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Comment from Joan E.
Yes, this park sparks romantic thoughts. It reminds me of a "stroll park" in Pasadena. I recently wrote two tanka about the Storier-Stearns Gardens, and since I didn't take a photograph, I want to borrow yours! I enjoyed your repeats and rhymes in this transporting triolet. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2014
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Yes, this park sparks romantic thoughts. It reminds me of a "stroll park" in Pasadena. I recently wrote two tanka about the Storier-Stearns Gardens, and since I didn't take a photograph, I want to borrow yours! I enjoyed your repeats and rhymes in this transporting triolet. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 28-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2014
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Thank you Joan. I could hang it out on FanArt Review. Then you could borrow it.
Comment from marycec
Lovely simple poem that evokes tranquility. I think the form is perfect for the feelings the poem conveys. You are lucky to have such a beautiful place to walk and think in.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2014
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Lovely simple poem that evokes tranquility. I think the form is perfect for the feelings the poem conveys. You are lucky to have such a beautiful place to walk and think in.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2014
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Thank you Marycec. I appreciate the complements.
Comment from RGstar
Once again a good structure conquered. I liked the flow of this one with the elements of nature and thoughts combined.
A good write, Treischel.
Best wishes,
RGstar
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2014
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Once again a good structure conquered. I liked the flow of this one with the elements of nature and thoughts combined.
A good write, Treischel.
Best wishes,
RGstar
Comment Written 28-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2014
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Thank you RG. Your are most kind
Comment from rod007
Mixing a walk in the park with sights of nature sparking romantic exchanges in the midst of cedar bark and water running through the rocks. Well done.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2014
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Mixing a walk in the park with sights of nature sparking romantic exchanges in the midst of cedar bark and water running through the rocks. Well done.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2014
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Thank you rod.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Romance in that park? I do think you are right, Tom, it looks lovely. Your poem depicts it so well. I like the rhyme scheme, you must have written every style there is now! Love your photo too! xsx Sandra
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2014
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Romance in that park? I do think you are right, Tom, it looks lovely. Your poem depicts it so well. I like the rhyme scheme, you must have written every style there is now! Love your photo too! xsx Sandra
Comment Written 25-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2014
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Thank you Sandra. I thing there are about 20 I haven't gotten around too, but I'll eventually get there.
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Then you should put them all in a book, you have no need to buy illustrations as you already own them. What a legacy to leave your family for generations to come! :) xx
Comment from STEPHEN A CARTER
Walk/ park
with/ rocks
with bark.
Walk/ park,
where/might spark Lovely connotation
thoughts of QUIET romantic talks.
Walk/ park
with/rocks.
A plethora of mono-syllabic words carry the piece forward in a simple, crisp fashion.
Regards:
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2014
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Walk/ park
with/ rocks
with bark.
Walk/ park,
where/might spark Lovely connotation
thoughts of QUIET romantic talks.
Walk/ park
with/rocks.
A plethora of mono-syllabic words carry the piece forward in a simple, crisp fashion.
Regards:
Comment Written 25-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2014
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Thank you Stephen . A simple walk
