Yosemite
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Comment from Michaelk
Good chapter. I see this as taking a deep breath before jumping off the high dive. Once a group organizes, I believe the powers that be will consider them a threat. I would love to see them hold an election and Joe doesn't get one single vote. I think he is going to be trouble. He's already trying a power grab.
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Good chapter. I see this as taking a deep breath before jumping off the high dive. Once a group organizes, I believe the powers that be will consider them a threat. I would love to see them hold an election and Joe doesn't get one single vote. I think he is going to be trouble. He's already trying a power grab.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2014
Comment from faragon
I think the little group is coming along very well. I like that they have meeting around a campfire. It not only serves as a means of physical warmth but psychological warmth as well. The need to stay connected to each other in some way and to be organized against a common evil. I don't know which direction you are taking this, but in my opinion it should be somewhat of a dictatorship for now. A strong leader is what is needed in this instance.
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I think the little group is coming along very well. I like that they have meeting around a campfire. It not only serves as a means of physical warmth but psychological warmth as well. The need to stay connected to each other in some way and to be organized against a common evil. I don't know which direction you are taking this, but in my opinion it should be somewhat of a dictatorship for now. A strong leader is what is needed in this instance.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2014
Comment from GracieAnn
Mikey, the relationships are in place, a plan is being forged and it looks like a potential Judas has just showed his face. Nice surprise that old Joe is a politician and that spells trouble. Already a rift. Good job. :0 GracieAnn
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Mikey, the relationships are in place, a plan is being forged and it looks like a potential Judas has just showed his face. Nice surprise that old Joe is a politician and that spells trouble. Already a rift. Good job. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 25-Mar-2014
Comment from ravenblack
Well, for one thing, kick that senator in the ass. A leader- hah! But really, why form a country at all? There are no real institutions left. They might be better off just forming the tribe of Yosemite.
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Well, for one thing, kick that senator in the ass. A leader- hah! But really, why form a country at all? There are no real institutions left. They might be better off just forming the tribe of Yosemite.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2014
Comment from l.raven
There is always one in the group who has to try and take over...if he's was in the gov before whatever happen...shoot him...LOL...so Linda is getting cozy with Nikolai...hummm....I know it!!!!ok now where ??? asked the bird...LOL...very well written...Luff Linda xxoo
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There is always one in the group who has to try and take over...if he's was in the gov before whatever happen...shoot him...LOL...so Linda is getting cozy with Nikolai...hummm....I know it!!!!ok now where ??? asked the bird...LOL...very well written...Luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 23-Mar-2014
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Uh, oh. Joe's part of the establishment, and he'll want to do things the old, dumb way, that wasn't working.
what a dirty word that is, "govern". >> YES! Right on, brother!
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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Uh, oh. Joe's part of the establishment, and he'll want to do things the old, dumb way, that wasn't working.
what a dirty word that is, "govern". >> YES! Right on, brother!
Comment Written 23-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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I shall skip the million responses that I am behind. Yes!! That is what I needed to hear. Johnny is listening to that idiot and thinking of taking his people and leaving. But, he's pissed now. Time to shut that fool up and LEAD! Thank you very much!!!!
Comment from Nosha17
Good chapter with necessary discussions for a community to make. Maybe, there will be votes cast to elect a leader, but it is a foregone conclusion who it will be. The characters are all so different, but very alive-your good writing enabled that. Like you said, intervention from the outside is bound to come sooner or later. Enjoyable read as always. Faye
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Good chapter with necessary discussions for a community to make. Maybe, there will be votes cast to elect a leader, but it is a foregone conclusion who it will be. The characters are all so different, but very alive-your good writing enabled that. Like you said, intervention from the outside is bound to come sooner or later. Enjoyable read as always. Faye
Comment Written 23-Mar-2014
Comment from Tatarka2
This is REAllY becoming intriguing! I would delete the "Christine creation" paragraph. Too much in Johnny's head. I love the way you don't let the reader in on what's happening; we know no more than the campers. It does seem like you have something in mind, though. The tension between Johnny and Joe has some interesting possibilities.
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This is REAllY becoming intriguing! I would delete the "Christine creation" paragraph. Too much in Johnny's head. I love the way you don't let the reader in on what's happening; we know no more than the campers. It does seem like you have something in mind, though. The tension between Johnny and Joe has some interesting possibilities.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2014
Comment from Sasha
You pose some serious questions in this one. You are also doing a great job debating the right and wrong of every suggestion, leaving the reader to decide for him/herself what the right answer is. I found one nit and have one more comment:
enenmies... should be enemies
You opening paragraph is really quite profound.
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You pose some serious questions in this one. You are also doing a great job debating the right and wrong of every suggestion, leaving the reader to decide for him/herself what the right answer is. I found one nit and have one more comment:
enenmies... should be enemies
You opening paragraph is really quite profound.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2014
Comment from nelliesellie
It is not good to have a vacant spot of power. But you must be wiling to change that power when the circumstances change. Their world has changed from a vast space to a small national park. They need to control the basis firs, food, shelter and protection.. The power they knew is not needed and will not be for awhile. Great work.
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It is not good to have a vacant spot of power. But you must be wiling to change that power when the circumstances change. Their world has changed from a vast space to a small national park. They need to control the basis firs, food, shelter and protection.. The power they knew is not needed and will not be for awhile. Great work.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2014
