Beyond the Wire
For the children of the Holocaust.69 total reviews
Comment from Ridley Williams
Hey Dean,
You portray the truth of our world with this solid write. The third stanza is point on; these problems still exist because we allow them to happen through our devout complacency. When you live in this country it's easy to forget about people's challenges, of course, what the Nazi's did was a crime against humanity. I appreciated the descriptive alliterations you used to enhance the feel of the write. I'm touched by your closing thought, for knowledge of these tragedies takes the sweet innocence from life. Nice job with this sensitive subject, Bill
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2014
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Hey Dean,
You portray the truth of our world with this solid write. The third stanza is point on; these problems still exist because we allow them to happen through our devout complacency. When you live in this country it's easy to forget about people's challenges, of course, what the Nazi's did was a crime against humanity. I appreciated the descriptive alliterations you used to enhance the feel of the write. I'm touched by your closing thought, for knowledge of these tragedies takes the sweet innocence from life. Nice job with this sensitive subject, Bill
Comment Written 26-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2014
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Thank you most sincerely for your warm comments and generous review, Bill. It's very much appreciated.
Comment from Treischel
The words of the deposed and and desperate speak out from behind the barbed waiting pen. A compelling story. I was impressed with your poetic phraseology that painted the poignant plea so well.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2014
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The words of the deposed and and desperate speak out from behind the barbed waiting pen. A compelling story. I was impressed with your poetic phraseology that painted the poignant plea so well.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2014
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Thanks you very much for that, Tom. I really appreciate it.
I ran across some journals of children interned during the holocaust while doing research for a story, and read them. So devastatingly heartbreaking! Their words inspired this poem.
Thanks so much again.
Comment from forestport12
"When suns honey kisses morning dew." One of many lines I love. I love how you create personifcations that give the poem soul. "Acrid stench of vaprous death." You take a string of words and own them and put together a unique trail I've never been down. It is oh so hard to find two or three words that come together like a string of pearls that feel oh so original. Nice work. So much more difficult than prose. Stan
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2014
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"When suns honey kisses morning dew." One of many lines I love. I love how you create personifcations that give the poem soul. "Acrid stench of vaprous death." You take a string of words and own them and put together a unique trail I've never been down. It is oh so hard to find two or three words that come together like a string of pearls that feel oh so original. Nice work. So much more difficult than prose. Stan
Comment Written 26-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2014
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Thanks very much for that wonderful compliment, Stan. I really appreciate that.
They both can be difficult, it's just that each one poses dilemmas specific to their construction and context. I feel that poetry writing helps you to become a better writer of prose, in a sense. However, it can get in the way too at times, if you allow it.
Thanks again for everything, Stan!
btw... the book came yesterday, and I am reading it for review. Thanks!
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Thanks!
Comment from Tomes Johnston
This is another dark and sinister poem from the author. There is a very stark moral to this story and that is that we must never forget about the horrors of the Third Reich and we must never let something like this ever happen ever again.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2014
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This is another dark and sinister poem from the author. There is a very stark moral to this story and that is that we must never forget about the horrors of the Third Reich and we must never let something like this ever happen ever again.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2014
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Yes, that's it in a nutshell, Tomes. Thanks so much for your exceptional rating and review.
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My pleasure
Comment from Alan K Pease
No love lost for those Germans and a history of subduing, deporting ethnic minorities from Crimea by past and present Russian dictatorships settling their own people into prominence in the region. The Soviets trained children to spy on their parents something perhaps only a little less than killing.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2014
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No love lost for those Germans and a history of subduing, deporting ethnic minorities from Crimea by past and present Russian dictatorships settling their own people into prominence in the region. The Soviets trained children to spy on their parents something perhaps only a little less than killing.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2014
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Thank you very much for sharing that with me, Alan, as well as for the wonderful review. Much obliged, my friend.
Comment from Twilightspire
The name of the poem and the corresponding line brought chills down my spine. Especially after reading the author's notes. This is an incredible dedication to all those that suffered under the Axis's evil. I like the color scheme, it really brought out the melancholy of the piece. Great job with this poem, my friend.
-T.J.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2014
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The name of the poem and the corresponding line brought chills down my spine. Especially after reading the author's notes. This is an incredible dedication to all those that suffered under the Axis's evil. I like the color scheme, it really brought out the melancholy of the piece. Great job with this poem, my friend.
-T.J.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2014
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I appreciate the indepth review of this one, T.J., and I am really glad that you liked it. I realize it's not my standard type of poetry. But, I was doing some research for a new horror story (go figure), about the Nazi's fascination with ancient runes and symbolism, and I ran across some journals of kids imprisoned during this horrific time in history. This poem was the result of those readings.
Thanks again for everything!
Comment from ravenblack
"Frosts filigree fingers touch my pane"- excellent line, tying in with the line before, "but very few seem to mind it". Frost fingers touch the speaker's pain, numbing it also coating the pane in frost, effecting his outlook on the world. I wish we could croon away the madness. This is one of your best and I wish I had a six left. Here's an extra pat on the back- monsters/ horror- really, Dracula/Frankenstein /zombies etc., are our attempt to croon away the madness, take the overwhelming horror of the world and condense some of its aspects into digestible chunks we can play with to understand.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2014
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"Frosts filigree fingers touch my pane"- excellent line, tying in with the line before, "but very few seem to mind it". Frost fingers touch the speaker's pain, numbing it also coating the pane in frost, effecting his outlook on the world. I wish we could croon away the madness. This is one of your best and I wish I had a six left. Here's an extra pat on the back- monsters/ horror- really, Dracula/Frankenstein /zombies etc., are our attempt to croon away the madness, take the overwhelming horror of the world and condense some of its aspects into digestible chunks we can play with to understand.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2014
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Thank you, ravenblack, I appreciate the wonderful comments. The fact that it garnered such high praise from you is reward enough for me, my talented friend.
Thanks again!
Comment from judester
A powerful poem in tribute to all those who suffered. It must truly have been a nightmare for them. What exactly does never again mean? The nightmare continues even today,just a different part of the world. Bless you for the compassion, Judester
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2014
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A powerful poem in tribute to all those who suffered. It must truly have been a nightmare for them. What exactly does never again mean? The nightmare continues even today,just a different part of the world. Bless you for the compassion, Judester
Comment Written 25-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2014
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Thank you very much for your thoughtful comments, judester. I sincerely appreciate it.
Comment from TAB_that's me
What a great tribute to those who died and those who survived the Holocaust. Your poem is amazing. it reflects the pain and nightmares that they endured. Great poetic devices such as alliteration.
teresa
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2014
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What a great tribute to those who died and those who survived the Holocaust. Your poem is amazing. it reflects the pain and nightmares that they endured. Great poetic devices such as alliteration.
teresa
Comment Written 25-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2014
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Thanks a million, Teresa. I'm so glad you liked this, as it is not my usual fare nor expertise. However, I felt compelled to write it and hope it duly honored those poor children who suffered so.
Comment from drivenbackward
Wow, Dean. That's an amazing poem. I honestly kept thinking that I was reading a famous poem written decades ago. You capture this misery so well. It's powerful and well written. In my opinion, it's perfect!
grief stricken -- Hyphen?
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2014
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Wow, Dean. That's an amazing poem. I honestly kept thinking that I was reading a famous poem written decades ago. You capture this misery so well. It's powerful and well written. In my opinion, it's perfect!
grief stricken -- Hyphen?
Comment Written 25-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2014
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Thank you, drivenbackward, that's such a wonderful compliment! I really appreciate your kind comments.
