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Viewing comments for Chapter 22 "Bigger Enemies, More Friends"Acts of war have plunged Earth into catastrophe.
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Comment from 24chas
Again, another great chapter. Like the way everyone is pulling together for a common goal. Just like I picture would happen if this occured. Well done.
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Again, another great chapter. Like the way everyone is pulling together for a common goal. Just like I picture would happen if this occured. Well done.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2014
Comment from GracieAnn
Mikey, this is a great resolution to a dire problem. The old adage, "The enemy of my enemy is my friend" certainly comes into play here. Truthful reasoning here, "By considering themselves superior, they become inferior". The direction is a good one. Well done. :0 GracieAnn
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2014
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Mikey, this is a great resolution to a dire problem. The old adage, "The enemy of my enemy is my friend" certainly comes into play here. Truthful reasoning here, "By considering themselves superior, they become inferior". The direction is a good one. Well done. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 18-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2014
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I like the direction too. But, it is scary thinking of how complicated it probably is "out there". We'll see. mikey
Comment from l.raven
OK We are now becoming as one force...but how to survive is the question....OK Michael....lets see where it goes in your mind...LOL...and what a perfect picture....so glad to see me...LOL...still love it...luff Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2014
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OK We are now becoming as one force...but how to survive is the question....OK Michael....lets see where it goes in your mind...LOL...and what a perfect picture....so glad to see me...LOL...still love it...luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 17-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2014
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Yep, keeping you in the forefront!! mikey
Comment from ragamuffin
Yes, definitely like the direction this story is going. Will be interesting to see it unfold. Liked the bit of humor with the "drunk possum" bit. That would be a sight to see. lol
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
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Yes, definitely like the direction this story is going. Will be interesting to see it unfold. Liked the bit of humor with the "drunk possum" bit. That would be a sight to see. lol
Comment Written 17-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
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Glad to hear it! It feels a little more in focus for me now. I have a friend in mind that Christine is loosely based on. Her humor pops in to my head from time to time. Very off the wall. My favorite! Thanks! mikey
Comment from Marillion
I have to admit that I was a little confused at the end of the last chapter, but now I realize what happened. Sorry, I was reading too fast, but now I see it has a bit of a Hunger Games dynamic to it. It almost has the feel of a Gamemaker watching over everything and controlling the whole situation.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
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I have to admit that I was a little confused at the end of the last chapter, but now I realize what happened. Sorry, I was reading too fast, but now I see it has a bit of a Hunger Games dynamic to it. It almost has the feel of a Gamemaker watching over everything and controlling the whole situation.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
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It became a little clearer to me as well. Still some hazy areas to focus in on. But, looking better in my mind now. Thanks for the input. I'll check out Gamemaker. mikey
Comment from ravenblack
You are handling the explanation of the dream sequence correctly, not dwelling on it but just throwing a few snippets in every now and then. Now the question- just what enemy would booby trap cargo rather than just bomb the crap out of them? The enemy must be within the border, trying to keep up appearances. And why the survivors such a threat?
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
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You are handling the explanation of the dream sequence correctly, not dwelling on it but just throwing a few snippets in every now and then. Now the question- just what enemy would booby trap cargo rather than just bomb the crap out of them? The enemy must be within the border, trying to keep up appearances. And why the survivors such a threat?
Comment Written 17-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
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Still working on that! Hahaha. I don't seem to be happy unless I am digging myself out of some hole. I think they are just trying to kill them for the sake of it and perhaps there isn't much control on their part. The enemy may not be all powerful. Things are in flux perhaps everywhere. Something like that?
Comment from nelliesellie
The survivors have a common enemy now. They need to band together or die. It is going to be hard on people how count on big government to take care of them. It will be easier because they have less to protect. They are not soldiers working for a pay check. Thus is personal. Great work.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
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The survivors have a common enemy now. They need to band together or die. It is going to be hard on people how count on big government to take care of them. It will be easier because they have less to protect. They are not soldiers working for a pay check. Thus is personal. Great work.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
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Glad you are enjoying. It took awhile to find the right direction. But, I think everyone has good reason to get together now. we'll see. mikey
Comment from Tatarka2
This is amazing! Superbly told - the plot rolls right along, is mostly shown, not told, and the reader is intrigued to the end. Plus, the plot is beginning to make believable sense. Kudos!
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
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This is amazing! Superbly told - the plot rolls right along, is mostly shown, not told, and the reader is intrigued to the end. Plus, the plot is beginning to make believable sense. Kudos!
Comment Written 17-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
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I was treading water for a long time!! Hahaha. I finally reached the shore. Yes, this felt like it was going the way I wanted. I had to fill some holes. (that I dug myself!) Glad you liked it. mikey
Comment from Nosha17
This was a decisive chapter, maybe the turning point in the chaos-united we stand, divided we fall! Strong story line and characters have come alive. Enjoyable read. Faye
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This was a decisive chapter, maybe the turning point in the chaos-united we stand, divided we fall! Strong story line and characters have come alive. Enjoyable read. Faye
Comment Written 17-Mar-2014
Comment from Michaelk
Good chapter. I especially liked the speech at the end. So, the clampets are heading to war. I still don't understand why the government wants to wipe everyone out. But with the new Capitol being relatively close to where the group is, I can see the president getting a sudden, unexpected visit in the near future.
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Good chapter. I especially liked the speech at the end. So, the clampets are heading to war. I still don't understand why the government wants to wipe everyone out. But with the new Capitol being relatively close to where the group is, I can see the president getting a sudden, unexpected visit in the near future.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2014
