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Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "Stalking Lester & Romance?"Acts of war have plunged Earth into catastrophe.
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Comment from Sasha
I am trying to catch up so please excuse the cut and past review. I am glad you are moving away from the violence and I enjoyed the dialogue between Christine and Johnny. I am off to read the next chapter.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
I am trying to catch up so please excuse the cut and past review. I am glad you are moving away from the violence and I enjoyed the dialogue between Christine and Johnny. I am off to read the next chapter.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
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Hi! No rush, you can do a bunch at once if that is easier. Yes, I wasn't liking all the mega violence all that much. I'd rather focus on Christine! Yum!!! mikey
Comment from Darkhorse555
wow what a great way of painting a picture It isn't his nature, but he's been brainwashed before into that way of thinking excellent read really enjoyable mikey beautifully penned dear friend
wow what a great way of painting a picture It isn't his nature, but he's been brainwashed before into that way of thinking excellent read really enjoyable mikey beautifully penned dear friend
Comment Written 10-Mar-2014
Comment from ravenblack
I think Lester and genetic inbred experiment of a clan may be refugees from Duck Dynasty. Be careful. They have probably lived in them there hills for generations.
I think Lester and genetic inbred experiment of a clan may be refugees from Duck Dynasty. Be careful. They have probably lived in them there hills for generations.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2014
Comment from ragamuffin
Still keeping us inthralled and wondering. It's said land's the new gold... but of course the government reserves the right to take that from us too. Your "new folks" are kind of considered a bunch of yahoos by most, but if you can live off the land, you have an advantage if there's a disaster.
Still keeping us inthralled and wondering. It's said land's the new gold... but of course the government reserves the right to take that from us too. Your "new folks" are kind of considered a bunch of yahoos by most, but if you can live off the land, you have an advantage if there's a disaster.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2014
Comment from Nosha17
This was a well-written interesting chapter with the continuing adventures of the castaways! It feels rather like a desert island in a way, but I see we have now met some more of the survivors. You have made good use of language in the narrative and descriptions and the dialogue and characters are well drawn. Enjoyable read. Faye
This was a well-written interesting chapter with the continuing adventures of the castaways! It feels rather like a desert island in a way, but I see we have now met some more of the survivors. You have made good use of language in the narrative and descriptions and the dialogue and characters are well drawn. Enjoyable read. Faye
Comment Written 09-Mar-2014
Comment from GracieAnn
Mikey, it's good to be back reviewing the story and you have moved in a better and more redeemable direction at this point. Great idea to introduce a second group. The story line of the romance is a nice touch, too. Well done. :0 GracieAnn
Mikey, it's good to be back reviewing the story and you have moved in a better and more redeemable direction at this point. Great idea to introduce a second group. The story line of the romance is a nice touch, too. Well done. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 08-Mar-2014
Comment from ProjectBluebook
You're doing fine, Mikey. Go with your gut instinct. Personally, I like where this is going. I was once an avid bow hunter. I t would be smart, an idea time to spy on them campers in the dark. But if they have got anything worth protecting they will have a 24/7 watch, changing guard every four, six hours if they got the man-power and judging by what you said, there is a flock of them. An accurate head count of how many would be a good start. Doing what you say, is reconasance, simply observing the scene. Also, they must be eating fairly good to support such a large group. They must have resources hidden, reserves, no telling where they got it from. Maybe, David was a victim of circumstance, in the wrong place at the wrong time. I'm sure, they don't trust each other, either. They probably got a trusted person guarding the goods, food, supplies 24/7. If the Scouts, see someone guarding a shack, maybe, a red flag that's where the goods are stored. I'm sure, if spies are caught, they will be dealt with harshly. Sounds like they got something other than food they are guarding judging by the old ladies conversation? Let me know what you come up with, i'm getting entertained and interested in this backwoods saga. Them hillbillies look like the ones on Deliverance. Maybe, the old hag runs the show. This is an exception write in my opinion with no obvious errors. It looks ship-shape--mate.
You're doing fine, Mikey. Go with your gut instinct. Personally, I like where this is going. I was once an avid bow hunter. I t would be smart, an idea time to spy on them campers in the dark. But if they have got anything worth protecting they will have a 24/7 watch, changing guard every four, six hours if they got the man-power and judging by what you said, there is a flock of them. An accurate head count of how many would be a good start. Doing what you say, is reconasance, simply observing the scene. Also, they must be eating fairly good to support such a large group. They must have resources hidden, reserves, no telling where they got it from. Maybe, David was a victim of circumstance, in the wrong place at the wrong time. I'm sure, they don't trust each other, either. They probably got a trusted person guarding the goods, food, supplies 24/7. If the Scouts, see someone guarding a shack, maybe, a red flag that's where the goods are stored. I'm sure, if spies are caught, they will be dealt with harshly. Sounds like they got something other than food they are guarding judging by the old ladies conversation? Let me know what you come up with, i'm getting entertained and interested in this backwoods saga. Them hillbillies look like the ones on Deliverance. Maybe, the old hag runs the show. This is an exception write in my opinion with no obvious errors. It looks ship-shape--mate.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2014
Comment from l.raven
OK!!! Christine and Johnny have found others...what to do hummmmm...very interesting...for now let them rest...moving right along...next!!! well done you!!! Luff ya Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2014
OK!!! Christine and Johnny have found others...what to do hummmmm...very interesting...for now let them rest...moving right along...next!!! well done you!!! Luff ya Linda xxoo
Comment Written 08-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2014
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Not sure! I didn't know they were going to find them. I don't know what happened to my short story, it seems to be getting longer every day. Hahaha. mikey
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LOL...that would be you,,,lol..luff
Comment from Tatarka2
This is really getting exciting! I haven't yet read the chapter about David's death, but I'm sure I will soon. This chapter moves along at a rapid pace and holds the reader's interest throughout. Keep going - I think this will be a good one!
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2014
This is really getting exciting! I haven't yet read the chapter about David's death, but I'm sure I will soon. This chapter moves along at a rapid pace and holds the reader's interest throughout. Keep going - I think this will be a good one!
Comment Written 08-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2014
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Glad you liked this one! I put myself in a little hole with David's death that I had to write my way out of. So good to hear I'm back on track. mikey
Comment from Marillion
Another good chapter, Mikey, and a nice progression again to the story, widening the world a bit with the introduction of the new group and the ending mention of the president and whatever plans are being discussed. He and Christine need to just do the deed and get it over with. ;-)
"Yes. Yes. That bugged the hell out of me. We're up here at recon five (I think you mean Defcon Five
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2014
Another good chapter, Mikey, and a nice progression again to the story, widening the world a bit with the introduction of the new group and the ending mention of the president and whatever plans are being discussed. He and Christine need to just do the deed and get it over with. ;-)
"Yes. Yes. That bugged the hell out of me. We're up here at recon five (I think you mean Defcon Five
Comment Written 08-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2014
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Oh good. Wasn't sure if the President and his plans was a good idea. Yeah, they need to get down. Johnny's had lesbians before, he's on it! Hahaha. I was playing off him being Recon Johnny. Too obscure. My private jokes shouldn't be meant for just myself I suppose!! Glad you liked this chapter. Exploring the waters with this one. Okay, diving in now. mikey