History and Myth
Viewing comments for Chapter 26 "Cannon"Poems that tell stories of long ago
9 total reviews
Comment from Joan E.
Your timing was amazing in capturing the cannon's blast of fire! And then, you outdid yourself with a series of Lanterns--it's hard enough to create one!! Your words add the sound effects and the human costs to what the picture highlights. Well done! -Joan
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2014
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Your timing was amazing in capturing the cannon's blast of fire! And then, you outdid yourself with a series of Lanterns--it's hard enough to create one!! Your words add the sound effects and the human costs to what the picture highlights. Well done! -Joan
Comment Written 12-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2014
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Thank you Joan. I appreciate your comments.
Comment from MoIronE13
Love this format.
Nicely done...
The message is powerful and loaded..
Thanks for sharing this one with me..
Mahina +++
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2014
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Love this format.
Nicely done...
The message is powerful and loaded..
Thanks for sharing this one with me..
Mahina +++
Comment Written 10-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2014
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Thank you MolronE.
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Pleasure..
Comment from Selina Stambi
A stunning piece!
Just adhering to the restrictions of the form would make me edgy and drive me nuts!
What fiery pictures you created in my head, Tom.
Sonali
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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A stunning piece!
Just adhering to the restrictions of the form would make me edgy and drive me nuts!
What fiery pictures you created in my head, Tom.
Sonali
Comment Written 10-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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Thank you Sonali. Then I succeeded.
Comment from trimple
A perfect lantern poem describing the subject matter intensely. From the sounds the cannon makes to the havoc it produces.
Fine poem Tom
kind regards
trimple
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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A perfect lantern poem describing the subject matter intensely. From the sounds the cannon makes to the havoc it produces.
Fine poem Tom
kind regards
trimple
Comment Written 10-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014
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Thank you, trimple.
Comment from Preston McWhorter
Hi, Treischel,
"Cannon" is excellent poem meeting the requirements of a difficult intricate form which you do extremely well as far as I can see. It is a good visual structure, flows well and and has excellent figurative language and imagery (hot fire belch).
Preston
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2014
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Hi, Treischel,
"Cannon" is excellent poem meeting the requirements of a difficult intricate form which you do extremely well as far as I can see. It is a good visual structure, flows well and and has excellent figurative language and imagery (hot fire belch).
Preston
Comment Written 09-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2014
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Thank you Preston.
Comment from sunnilicious
That sure sounds like a cannon. Creative and dripping with visual imagery. Each verse works upon each other. Sad ending. And I wonder why mass destruction was created. Great work.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2014
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That sure sounds like a cannon. Creative and dripping with visual imagery. Each verse works upon each other. Sad ending. And I wonder why mass destruction was created. Great work.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2014
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Thanks again Alicia.
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
A lantern poem appears to be a precise and structured form.
To plan and accomplish the first is clever but a suite shows dedication and thought.
This lantern suite highlights the facets of the chosen topic well.
The visual imagery complements the chosen words well represent a clearand focused poem.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2014
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A lantern poem appears to be a precise and structured form.
To plan and accomplish the first is clever but a suite shows dedication and thought.
This lantern suite highlights the facets of the chosen topic well.
The visual imagery complements the chosen words well represent a clearand focused poem.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2014
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Thank you Shirley. I really am pleased that you liked it so much.
Comment from Capricorn30
A pleasure to read a well-penned historical poem;
The days of cannon weaponry long gone;
I've always thought that these powerful weapons were rather intriguing--you have reminded me of their power incorporating good audio imagery.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2014
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A pleasure to read a well-penned historical poem;
The days of cannon weaponry long gone;
I've always thought that these powerful weapons were rather intriguing--you have reminded me of their power incorporating good audio imagery.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2014
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Thank you Margaret. You should have been there. Definitely an audio experience .
Comment from Dean Kuch
Very cool poem, Mr. 'T', I really like this format, this lantern poem. Quite unique, I'd never seen it before until now.
Nicely done, and I loved the additional historical notes!
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2014
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Very cool poem, Mr. 'T', I really like this format, this lantern poem. Quite unique, I'd never seen it before until now.
Nicely done, and I loved the additional historical notes!
Comment Written 09-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2014
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Thank you, dean. Good to hear from you again.
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My pleasure.
