A Wish Upon a Star
short prose piece26 total reviews
Comment from SValencia0178
Truly indifference among certain few classes of people is unforgivable. And certainly verbal abuse is one of the worst. Being abused in this manner myself, I can really appreciate Mike's descript way of writing. Thanks again, Mike
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2014
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Truly indifference among certain few classes of people is unforgivable. And certainly verbal abuse is one of the worst. Being abused in this manner myself, I can really appreciate Mike's descript way of writing. Thanks again, Mike
Comment Written 05-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2014
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Thank you so much. It is a common problem sadly. Too common. Appreciate the kind words, mikey
Comment from pattipac
Your well penned prose about a young girl wishing to escape her abusive parents is well written. You had me standing beside her trying to help her open the door to escape. Made this review mindful of all those innocent children, who suffer alone.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014
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Your well penned prose about a young girl wishing to escape her abusive parents is well written. You had me standing beside her trying to help her open the door to escape. Made this review mindful of all those innocent children, who suffer alone.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014
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There are too, too many of them. Thank you for your understanding response. I am happy this is being received so well. mikey
Comment from Brocha1
a powerful and touching piece. Through careful use of repetition and use of short sentences you bring the confusing yet simplistic world of the child alive.It is chilling to feel this child's pain and isolation.well done.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014
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a powerful and touching piece. Through careful use of repetition and use of short sentences you bring the confusing yet simplistic world of the child alive.It is chilling to feel this child's pain and isolation.well done.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014
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So pleased you found this on the money. An important topic. I was hoping to get it right with this one. Thank you kindly, mikey
Comment from Tatarka2
I would break this up into paragraphs to make it easier to read in a computer format. It's a very powerful piece, and reflects the feelings of a child in a very heartfelt way. I remember telling one of my clients, whose parents were fighting about her care, that it wasn't her fault. "I know," she said, "but it has my name on it." That is exactly your message. Very well done.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014
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I would break this up into paragraphs to make it easier to read in a computer format. It's a very powerful piece, and reflects the feelings of a child in a very heartfelt way. I remember telling one of my clients, whose parents were fighting about her care, that it wasn't her fault. "I know," she said, "but it has my name on it." That is exactly your message. Very well done.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014
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That is a touching story. So much basic truth in it. Torn on the paragraph thing. Some like it as one. I go back and forth. Glad you liked it though. mikey
Comment from 24chas
Wow, mikey, this was really intense and so sad. I'm not used to something like this from you. I think you definitely used the right form. Well told, my friend.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014
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Wow, mikey, this was really intense and so sad. I'm not used to something like this from you. I think you definitely used the right form. Well told, my friend.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014
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Hey. Thank you so much. Pleased that you liked this. I have so many different pieces. But, lately everything has been new. I haven't posted anything older in a while. mikey
Comment from Spitfire
Wow! You did an excellent job of portraying a child's pain and hurt when parents quarrel. I do think it would be a better read with paragraphing. Love the symbolism of a door. The last line is dynamite.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014
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Wow! You did an excellent job of portraying a child's pain and hurt when parents quarrel. I do think it would be a better read with paragraphing. Love the symbolism of a door. The last line is dynamite.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014
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Thank you so much. Going back and forth on the paragraphs. Some like the single paragraph. Some don't. I keep switching back and forth. So glad you liked it though. Big smiles! mikey
Comment from Darkhorse555
touching heartfelt I hope I will never wake up again. I just need for my dream to come true deep yet happens all the time brings it home beautifully penned mikey
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014
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touching heartfelt I hope I will never wake up again. I just need for my dream to come true deep yet happens all the time brings it home beautifully penned mikey
Comment Written 03-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014
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Thank you so much. Glad you liked this. Experienced this a bit and know others that have. A common thing unfortunately. mikey
Comment from MoIronE13
Wow..brother..
This is a deep maddening vision from a child's perspective.
To feel as if a child is the cause of their parents problems is so frightening. Instantly the child is thrown into a world of darkness.
No light, no confidence, no resources.
SAD, but all to true.
Thanks for being an advocate and voice for these lonely children.
Well done.
Peaceful
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014
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Wow..brother..
This is a deep maddening vision from a child's perspective.
To feel as if a child is the cause of their parents problems is so frightening. Instantly the child is thrown into a world of darkness.
No light, no confidence, no resources.
SAD, but all to true.
Thanks for being an advocate and voice for these lonely children.
Well done.
Peaceful
Comment Written 03-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014
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Thank you my friend. It is sad, but all too true and way too common. mikey
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I know..It hurts..
Comment from w.j.debi
Wow, Mikey. I am sorry you missed the deadline. This is well written. How many times children think they are the reason for all the problems when it has little to do with them. Their perspective though, is that the world would be better if they just disappeared. Such a sad situation and you describe it well.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014
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Wow, Mikey. I am sorry you missed the deadline. This is well written. How many times children think they are the reason for all the problems when it has little to do with them. Their perspective though, is that the world would be better if they just disappeared. Such a sad situation and you describe it well.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2014
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I am glad I missed it. I would rather have the people I know read it anyway. I am so pleased you liked this. Thank you kindly, mikey
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By the way, congratulations on being the #one author of short works. You rock!
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Thank you! Just write and post a lot and don't stop. Hahaha. Now that I am there I may have to give up sleep. It will be fun while it lasts!! mikey
Comment from country ranch writer
mental abuse is reigning more and more. It is so sad people can't see what they are doing to their kids. The kids blame themselves for their parents problems.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2014
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mental abuse is reigning more and more. It is so sad people can't see what they are doing to their kids. The kids blame themselves for their parents problems.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2014
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Happens over and over. I remember fighting in the house when I was little. I was sure that I was the reason. You are so correct. I would have preferred a spanking. mikey
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awe there is no reason to spank really ask my grand kids I have a slew of them. I would just ask them if I had to take them aside and talk to them in front of their friends and they would say no maam. My one grandson Nick says grandma it is the level way you say it that gets us.
