Reflections
reflecting on days gone by54 total reviews
Comment from krys123
I like your prose/poem very much and quite an imagination for someone who just looked at a picture and wrote a beautiful poem. Your rhyming was done very well and neither of your rhymes were forced, labored or strained. The rhythm would need a little bit of help Salk afloat just a little bit better otherwise than that it was good enough for me to read and understand your poem correctly. Thank you so much for sharing this with others including myself. May you have a good one in God bless.
Alex
PS: It's usually the quiet ones sometimes to get the prize.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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I like your prose/poem very much and quite an imagination for someone who just looked at a picture and wrote a beautiful poem. Your rhyming was done very well and neither of your rhymes were forced, labored or strained. The rhythm would need a little bit of help Salk afloat just a little bit better otherwise than that it was good enough for me to read and understand your poem correctly. Thank you so much for sharing this with others including myself. May you have a good one in God bless.
Alex
PS: It's usually the quiet ones sometimes to get the prize.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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Krys123, thank you so much for the comments and review. It is greatly appreciated.
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You are so sincerely welcome
Comment from adewpearl
you have categorized your poem as prose/fiction
though it's in a poetry contest
solid use of rhyming in abcb format
We road our bikes - rode
vivid description of setting
water's muddy edge - add the apostrophe for possessive
fun-loving Hank - add the hyphen
Many people have been left the third person out, so this poem should resonate with quite a few readers
Brooke
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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you have categorized your poem as prose/fiction
though it's in a poetry contest
solid use of rhyming in abcb format
We road our bikes - rode
vivid description of setting
water's muddy edge - add the apostrophe for possessive
fun-loving Hank - add the hyphen
Many people have been left the third person out, so this poem should resonate with quite a few readers
Brooke
Comment Written 24-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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Brooke, thank you so much for your wonderful comments and review. I always appreciated your thoughts. Also, I didn't chose the setting, i.e. the prose/fiction.. I only submitted it under the story in a peom contest and that's what came up. I looked to see if I can change it anywhere, but don't see where I would do that. Any suggestions?
Comment from Selina Stambi
Aw .. I just loved this poem, grama!
It's a worthy contender in the contest - wish you all the best!
I'm chuckling - but this really happened to me in real life - it took awhile to stop smarting!!
Have a great weekend and thanks for the smiles!
xxx
Sonali :)
Question: you've got final periods - any reason why you don't have commas in the body of the stanza - if necessary?
Deep in the water(')s muddy edge
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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014
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Aw .. I just loved this poem, grama!
It's a worthy contender in the contest - wish you all the best!
I'm chuckling - but this really happened to me in real life - it took awhile to stop smarting!!
Have a great weekend and thanks for the smiles!
xxx
Sonali :)
Question: you've got final periods - any reason why you don't have commas in the body of the stanza - if necessary?
Deep in the water(')s muddy edge
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Comment Written 24-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014
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Thank you for your personal interest being awaken from my poem. I appreciate your comments and ratings. No reason for the punctuation... just felt like doing it that way. LOL
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Chuckling with you ... ;) :) :)
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I "reflected" on my poem, and added punctuation after all. LOL
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You sound like a chuckly lady, grams, dear!! xxx
Comment from hobopoet
Yeah, reflecting on life is a funny thing, and we all have 20/20 hindsight, don't we?
Good little poem here. I like poems that tell a story.
Nice work. :)
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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014
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Yeah, reflecting on life is a funny thing, and we all have 20/20 hindsight, don't we?
Good little poem here. I like poems that tell a story.
Nice work. :)
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Comment Written 24-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2014
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Thank you, hobopoet, for reading my poem and liking it. I appreciate the comments and rating.
