Reflections
reflecting on days gone by54 total reviews
Comment from Rondeno
The picture is remarkable in itself, but you develop it into something wistful, and even dark. You leave me wanting to know more - which i always a sign of quality!
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2014
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The picture is remarkable in itself, but you develop it into something wistful, and even dark. You leave me wanting to know more - which i always a sign of quality!
Comment Written 18-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2014
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Rondeno, thank you for your comments and review. It is greatly appreciated.
Comment from LaineyZ
Oh, that was so sad! I guess we all can relate to that in one way or another. I think you did an excellent job in not only the writing, but in your choice of color for the text, background, and picture. It really does create a sense of this taking place sometime in the past.
Thank you for sharing this--I enjoyed it! Well done!
-LaineyZ
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
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Oh, that was so sad! I guess we all can relate to that in one way or another. I think you did an excellent job in not only the writing, but in your choice of color for the text, background, and picture. It really does create a sense of this taking place sometime in the past.
Thank you for sharing this--I enjoyed it! Well done!
-LaineyZ
Comment Written 17-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
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LaineyZ, thank you. I'm so glad you enjoyed. I really appreciate your comments and review.
Comment from beencounter
This poem tells how life can change your perspective regarding how you hope things are until you find how they really are. It is a bittersweet memory. The picture goes well with the poem.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
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This poem tells how life can change your perspective regarding how you hope things are until you find how they really are. It is a bittersweet memory. The picture goes well with the poem.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2014
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Beencounter, thank you so much for your comments and review. It is greatly appreciated.
Comment from Michaelk
Great story in a poem. I was reminded of Tom and Huck, until the romance part came into the story. Your descriptions were good, I felt like I was fishing on the river bank. Your poem was very sad in the end. It was quite a surprise. It made me feel as if I was the one who was alone. Good work.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2014
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Great story in a poem. I was reminded of Tom and Huck, until the romance part came into the story. Your descriptions were good, I felt like I was fishing on the river bank. Your poem was very sad in the end. It was quite a surprise. It made me feel as if I was the one who was alone. Good work.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2014
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I was hoping for the element of surprise. Glad you enjoyed it and thanks for the 5 star rating. I appreciate it.
Comment from Erik McGinley
I don't mean this in a bad way. I hate my dad because that's what he would see.
But while I grew up he was my best friend and Nancy was his wife and I was me.
When my dad stopped caring so did I. He used to hold me above his head so high.
I giggled and squirmed but he helped me lots now all I have is what he made me forgot.
When I was just a little boy I was my dad's pride and joy.
When I was older I was just his stupid soldier.
He thought I would forget my best friend and now I have none.
You can't pay me back for my wife, son. But I never stole his!
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2014
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I don't mean this in a bad way. I hate my dad because that's what he would see.
But while I grew up he was my best friend and Nancy was his wife and I was me.
When my dad stopped caring so did I. He used to hold me above his head so high.
I giggled and squirmed but he helped me lots now all I have is what he made me forgot.
When I was just a little boy I was my dad's pride and joy.
When I was older I was just his stupid soldier.
He thought I would forget my best friend and now I have none.
You can't pay me back for my wife, son. But I never stole his!
Comment Written 06-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2014
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Thank you for your 5 star rating. It is appreciated.
Comment from EMB
When you said you'd "pull out your rods" when riding on a bike, I immediately got the image of Inspector Gadget-like retractable rods that you had retrieved from your pockets. Haha! Other than that, this was nice and smooth to read. :)
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2014
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When you said you'd "pull out your rods" when riding on a bike, I immediately got the image of Inspector Gadget-like retractable rods that you had retrieved from your pockets. Haha! Other than that, this was nice and smooth to read. :)
Comment Written 04-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2014
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EMB... Thanks for your comments. I changed rods to poles... maybe that will be a better image. LOL. Happy that you enjoyed it overall.
Comment from Rosalyne
Hi, Gramalot.
I really enjoyed your poem, and felt that I too was staring into the reflection. Life does have it's unexpected moments, ones that catch us by surprise. You showed this well in the last few paragraphs. Well done. Best of luck in the contest.
Bye
Rosalyne :)
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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Hi, Gramalot.
I really enjoyed your poem, and felt that I too was staring into the reflection. Life does have it's unexpected moments, ones that catch us by surprise. You showed this well in the last few paragraphs. Well done. Best of luck in the contest.
Bye
Rosalyne :)
Comment Written 25-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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Rosalyne, thank you for your comments and review. They are greatly appreciated.
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Jerri. I absolutely loved this nostalgic trip down memory lane. It warms the heart and reminds me of days gone by in many ways. You should win this contest on originality alone, Jerri. bravo! wish I had six stars left for you. Bob
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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Hi, Jerri. I absolutely loved this nostalgic trip down memory lane. It warms the heart and reminds me of days gone by in many ways. You should win this contest on originality alone, Jerri. bravo! wish I had six stars left for you. Bob
Comment Written 25-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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Thank you, Bob, for your comments. Seems I'm always just missing those six stars from people but it's the intent that counts as well. Your comments are always appreciated and looked forward to as well. Jerri
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, gramalot, you did an excellent job writing this poetic story about the friendship that was left behind when the other two became more than friends. I enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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this is very well written, gramalot, you did an excellent job writing this poetic story about the friendship that was left behind when the other two became more than friends. I enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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Thank you as always for commenting on my work. It is always greatly appreciated. Jerri
Comment from maggieadams
You created a scene of days past and coupled with the artwork, it works to take the reader back to those days, no technology, just friends kicking around , hoping the boy liked them. Your rhyme scheme abab is not as evident in the first few stanzas. We rode our bikes. Good job.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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You created a scene of days past and coupled with the artwork, it works to take the reader back to those days, no technology, just friends kicking around , hoping the boy liked them. Your rhyme scheme abab is not as evident in the first few stanzas. We rode our bikes. Good job.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2014
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Msggie, thank you for your comments and review. It is really appreciated.
