Comment from Terrie DeGolier

Excellent

Love the picture if only everyone could see if for real. I like the fact your consuming the days offerings. Enjoyed your poem very much thank you for sharing Terrie

 Comment Written 22-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Jan-2014

Thank you Terrie. Your welcome, I love sharing beautiful moments.

Comment from James Dooney

Excellent

nice use of the structure that you built the poem around, as you indicate in your notes. Great expansion on the topic also !

 Comment Written 22-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Jan-2014

Thank you very much James.

Comment from Shirley E Kennedy

Excellent

This is certainly a sight worth waking early to see.
The beauty and stillness of the early pre-dawn is so calming and uplifting for the soul.
A well written Whitney poem and a great subject choice.

 Comment Written 19-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014

Thank you Shirley for sharing the moment and comments.

Comment from rod007

Excellent

These words are quite amazing-"just a cup of this new dawn for you." As we drink the wonderful sweet nectar of the yellow sun perhaps with some bacon and eggs! Well done.

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2014

Thank you rod. That's a great thought.

Comment from robina1978

Excellent

Excellent but foggy photo as your poem describes as well. A nice wake-up call you got by these birds and then a cuppa. How much better can life get?

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2014

Thank you Ine. Yes, it's those beautiful moments that must be cherished.

Comment from RGstar

Excellent

Another good write. It seems that this will be a difficult competition.
A calm beginning, so beautiful.
Love the colours, and your words

good luck


RG

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014

Thank you RG, I didn't enter. I just like this form.

Comment from Preston McWhorter

Excellent

Hi, Treischel,
"New Dawn" is a truly first rate whitney poem that meets the line syllable requirements of the form. It has excellent meter and rhyme. The structure is excellent visually.
Preston

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014

Thank you Preston.

Comment from Gravell

Excellent

Wonderful and fresh poem. Very interesting form. Your words has been perfectly chosen and emotions are very well presented. The second last line though has 6 syllables instead of 7. Excellent presentation. Well done.

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014

Thanks Gravel. That's ok in the Envoi.

Comment from Maureen's Pen

Excellent

Dear Tom, Great shot! A lovely poem and who can't see the beauty of the new dawn with a smile and renewed hope.
I enjoyed this one and thought you penned it wonderfully.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014

Thank you very much Maureen.

Comment from trevorletang

Excellent

This must have been breath taking to witness. Scenes like this make me realise how small and insignificant I am. Thanks for sharing this experience in a well formatted and interesting style of poetry

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014

Thank you Trevor for you wonderful review.