Springtime in Hedgerow Village
Such a fun time in Hedgerow Village.19 total reviews
Comment from Story teller123
This was very cute and well written! It's a really good children's story! I really liked how you told what kind of eggs each character painted! I really enjoyed reading it!
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2015
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This was very cute and well written! It's a really good children's story! I really liked how you told what kind of eggs each character painted! I really enjoyed reading it!
Comment Written 23-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2015
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Goodness me, you went back a long time for this one, thank you so very much! I'm delighted you enjoyed the story. :) Sandra
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You're welcome!
Comment from barleygirl
Not experienced at reading this type of story, I was thinking it seemed to lack anything memorable as an ending. But other than that, nicely written, with realistic dialogue and believable activities (for a bunch of talking animals). The best part is the tone of friendliness between everyone - very pleasant. Congrats on placing in the Story of the Month contest.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
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Not experienced at reading this type of story, I was thinking it seemed to lack anything memorable as an ending. But other than that, nicely written, with realistic dialogue and believable activities (for a bunch of talking animals). The best part is the tone of friendliness between everyone - very pleasant. Congrats on placing in the Story of the Month contest.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
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Thank you for the congrats, barleygirl, and for the nice review. Sandra
Comment from nelliesellie
I loved spending the time in Hedgerow village. The animals were very nice. This is a very good children's story's The animals are working together. They are having a lot of fun. They are making great fun things. Great work. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2014
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I loved spending the time in Hedgerow village. The animals were very nice. This is a very good children's story's The animals are working together. They are having a lot of fun. They are making great fun things. Great work. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2014
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Thank you so much, Nelliesellie, I am really pleased you liked this one. :) Sandra. xsx
Comment from Treischel
A delightful springtime story about all the children painting eggs while the adults all cooperate to make a wonderful day. I got a kick out of the girls painting pretty things and the boys painting monsters.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2014
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A delightful springtime story about all the children painting eggs while the adults all cooperate to make a wonderful day. I got a kick out of the girls painting pretty things and the boys painting monsters.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2014
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Thank you so much, Tom, I was going by that nursery rhyme, 'sugar and spice and all things nice,' do you know it? xsx
Comment from Nosha17
Lovely story, so many fun characters which were well-drawn. The dialogue was fun and lively and your story read well from start to finish. I enjoyed it immensely. Faye
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2014
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Lovely story, so many fun characters which were well-drawn. The dialogue was fun and lively and your story read well from start to finish. I enjoyed it immensely. Faye
Comment Written 14-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2014
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Thank you for this lovely review, Faye, I am so glad you enjoyed it. :) Sandra
Comment from amanda98653
A very cute and lovely story you've written there, Sandra:)
I enjoyed reading it.
Here are some suggestions to keep in mind:
1. The birds were getting their nests ready, making sure they (were) nice and cosy for their babies, high up on the tree-tops.
2. They were so busy (so) they didn't hear Millie the Mole and Vicky the Vole coming over to see them.
3. We saw all the birds making their nests, so we decided to make something too."
4. "Yes, of course you can," Reggie said proudly, "but keep your head down, you'll have to crawl in."
5. Vicky didn't mind at all helping her best friend
Best to rephrase it: Vicky didn't mind helping her best friend at all.
6. She also had some special plain white eggs with no speckles on at all!
7.She knew she couldn't be late today (because) Mummy Mouse would be waiting for her at the school gate.
Very lovely
Hugs
Amanda
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2014
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A very cute and lovely story you've written there, Sandra:)
I enjoyed reading it.
Here are some suggestions to keep in mind:
1. The birds were getting their nests ready, making sure they (were) nice and cosy for their babies, high up on the tree-tops.
2. They were so busy (so) they didn't hear Millie the Mole and Vicky the Vole coming over to see them.
3. We saw all the birds making their nests, so we decided to make something too."
4. "Yes, of course you can," Reggie said proudly, "but keep your head down, you'll have to crawl in."
5. Vicky didn't mind at all helping her best friend
Best to rephrase it: Vicky didn't mind helping her best friend at all.
6. She also had some special plain white eggs with no speckles on at all!
7.She knew she couldn't be late today (because) Mummy Mouse would be waiting for her at the school gate.
Very lovely
Hugs
Amanda
Comment Written 14-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2014
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Hi Amanda, thank you for your lovely review, I will be taking another look at your suggestions. I am always open to advice and welcome it. I am pleased you liked the story! :) Sandra
Comment from Selina Stambi
My dear Sandra,
How you transport me back over the decades to my Mummy's knew and Enid Blyton! As always, these are precious enchanting minutes I've had with your adorable critters.
Love to you, my wonderful friend. :)
xxx
Sonali
making sure they are nice and cosy for their babies(,) high up on the tree-tops.
everyone did their share(,) then stood back and admired their
and when it was finished she slipped (the bracelet) onto Millie's wrist
"Or (what I'm going to paint on) mine." Millie laughed
tables and chairs out(,) ready for the children's
youngsters came racing over to find their egg(s) and paint pots.
what had the most paint on! ... you are not quite clear here ... who had the most paint on ...?/ (or)
what had the most paint on - the eggs of the youngsters ...?
"Well done, everyone," (s)aid( no comma) Miss Freda the Frog,
Timmy and Tommy's eggs, or Reggie the Rat(')s.
so proud of their eggs, and Cyril the (S)quirrel was really pleased
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2014
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My dear Sandra,
How you transport me back over the decades to my Mummy's knew and Enid Blyton! As always, these are precious enchanting minutes I've had with your adorable critters.
Love to you, my wonderful friend. :)
xxx
Sonali
making sure they are nice and cosy for their babies(,) high up on the tree-tops.
everyone did their share(,) then stood back and admired their
and when it was finished she slipped (the bracelet) onto Millie's wrist
"Or (what I'm going to paint on) mine." Millie laughed
tables and chairs out(,) ready for the children's
youngsters came racing over to find their egg(s) and paint pots.
what had the most paint on! ... you are not quite clear here ... who had the most paint on ...?/ (or)
what had the most paint on - the eggs of the youngsters ...?
"Well done, everyone," (s)aid( no comma) Miss Freda the Frog,
Timmy and Tommy's eggs, or Reggie the Rat(')s.
so proud of their eggs, and Cyril the (S)quirrel was really pleased
Comment Written 13-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2014
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You are such a dear friend, Sonali, thank you for your help again, I have put them all right! I am so glad your enjoyed this one. Thank you! xsx Sandra
Comment from michaelcahill
I have been trying to think of why it is that your work is so appealing since I am not a child. (Hahaha! Insert joke here) When I was younger the compromise position when going to the movies was Disney. The kids loved it and the adults did too while pretending they went for the kids. That is what your work is like. It has all of the whimsy and fun for kids, but there is that smart and witty undertone that makes us want to read it for ourselves. That is why it is so excellent. Love this, mikey
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2014
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I have been trying to think of why it is that your work is so appealing since I am not a child. (Hahaha! Insert joke here) When I was younger the compromise position when going to the movies was Disney. The kids loved it and the adults did too while pretending they went for the kids. That is what your work is like. It has all of the whimsy and fun for kids, but there is that smart and witty undertone that makes us want to read it for ourselves. That is why it is so excellent. Love this, mikey
Comment Written 13-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2014
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What a lovely thing to say, Mikey. I think most of us retain that lovely link to childhood, so don't worry, you are not alone!! I am so happy that you enjoyed this story, thank you for your lovely review. :) xsx Sandra
Comment from jmdg1954
Sandra, if my children's stories were 1/4 as good as yours I'd be a happy camper. You brought the Easter tradition of coloring eggs to life in your story defining each chatector's creation. But then, with Miss Freda the Frog complimenting each one was an important piece to your story.
Very well done, John
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2014
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Sandra, if my children's stories were 1/4 as good as yours I'd be a happy camper. You brought the Easter tradition of coloring eggs to life in your story defining each chatector's creation. But then, with Miss Freda the Frog complimenting each one was an important piece to your story.
Very well done, John
Comment Written 13-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2014
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That is such a lovely compliment, John, thank you so much. I think I am still a bit of a child myself, LOL. I am so pleased you liked this one. A big hug for the 6 stars!! :) Sandra
Comment from chasennov
'Springtime In Hedgerow Village.' I found this children's story to be an excellent tale, a learning tool, a fun thing to join in, and for children to grow while experiencing life. Well done.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2014
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'Springtime In Hedgerow Village.' I found this children's story to be an excellent tale, a learning tool, a fun thing to join in, and for children to grow while experiencing life. Well done.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2014
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Thank you so much for reading my children's story, I am really pleased you enjoyed it. :) Sandra
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You are most welcome, Sandra.
