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Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
I understand how you feel and have posted some similar poetry myself.
You have managed to convey the message of just how much a loving gesture from your dad would have meant to you.
I didn't get to know my dad due to divorce and separation but this has still had a profound impact on my life.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2014
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I understand how you feel and have posted some similar poetry myself.
You have managed to convey the message of just how much a loving gesture from your dad would have meant to you.
I didn't get to know my dad due to divorce and separation but this has still had a profound impact on my life.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2014
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Thank you Shirley for sharing the impact on you.
Comment from NicciFaye
Wounds of love not completed but there linger in the spirit. I see these wounds in my husband. I understand from the love of a mother as well. Well done, expressed, and written.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2014
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Wounds of love not completed but there linger in the spirit. I see these wounds in my husband. I understand from the love of a mother as well. Well done, expressed, and written.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2014
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Thank you very much Nicci. Then you know how it is. Thanks for those kind words.
Comment from rod007
This was a deeply moving poem that caught my heart as I too had a father who showed no care about his children. The word you write is a truism in many children's lives. Well done.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2014
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This was a deeply moving poem that caught my heart as I too had a father who showed no care about his children. The word you write is a truism in many children's lives. Well done.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2014
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Thank you again rod. It seems we have a lot in common.
Comment from adewpearl
excellent use of enjambment to keep thoughts flowing from line to line
genuine expression of raw emotion
good alliteration in latent legacy
excellent character development
such a poignant passage when you talk about seeing positive father/son interactions as you long for a memory of your own that was like that
I've met people whose parents never said, I love you or I'm proud of you, and you capture perfectly the emotions they've shared with me about having such an upbringing
Brooke
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2014
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excellent use of enjambment to keep thoughts flowing from line to line
genuine expression of raw emotion
good alliteration in latent legacy
excellent character development
such a poignant passage when you talk about seeing positive father/son interactions as you long for a memory of your own that was like that
I've met people whose parents never said, I love you or I'm proud of you, and you capture perfectly the emotions they've shared with me about having such an upbringing
Brooke
Comment Written 12-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2014
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Thank you so much Brooke.
Comment from Dom G Robles
I like this poem from beginning to end. It touching, striking the chore of the heart. The writer is a victim of an unrequited love, one that he never felt from his Dad from early childhood. He feels the pain greatly when he sees a father and son interacting--a The father is gone and left a vacuum of utter loneliness...even just the words: "I'm proud of you son"
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2014
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I like this poem from beginning to end. It touching, striking the chore of the heart. The writer is a victim of an unrequited love, one that he never felt from his Dad from early childhood. He feels the pain greatly when he sees a father and son interacting--a The father is gone and left a vacuum of utter loneliness...even just the words: "I'm proud of you son"
Comment Written 12-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2014
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Thank you Don. I appreciate you comments and especially the stars.
Comment from tfawcus
Memories like this can never be erased, just softened with the passing of time. It does some good to write it out into the open as you have done. I feel sad for him, too, for he denied himself one of the greatest pleasures of life, a loving relationship with his son.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2014
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Memories like this can never be erased, just softened with the passing of time. It does some good to write it out into the open as you have done. I feel sad for him, too, for he denied himself one of the greatest pleasures of life, a loving relationship with his son.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2014
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Thank you tfawcus.
Comment from kiwisteveh
Your free verse poem expresses the personal side of the great truth that parents shape their children, knowingly or unwittingly.
Without knowing your father or the exact circumstances, I can surmise that perhaps he was doing as best he could, perhaps he was just doing what was accepted at the time or perhaps he himself was shaped and scarred by his upbringing and was merely perpetuating the cycle.
None of which makes his apparent lack of love any easier to bear, but it does clarify in our own minds the importance to change, to break free of what our parents did that was wrong and make sure our own children don't suffer these scars.
Steve
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2014
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Your free verse poem expresses the personal side of the great truth that parents shape their children, knowingly or unwittingly.
Without knowing your father or the exact circumstances, I can surmise that perhaps he was doing as best he could, perhaps he was just doing what was accepted at the time or perhaps he himself was shaped and scarred by his upbringing and was merely perpetuating the cycle.
None of which makes his apparent lack of love any easier to bear, but it does clarify in our own minds the importance to change, to break free of what our parents did that was wrong and make sure our own children don't suffer these scars.
Steve
Comment Written 12-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2014
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Thanks kiwisteveh lots of wisdom in your words.
Comment from DonandVicki
I enjoyed your poem immensely, I had a father similar to yours. I have never wrote a poem about him, maybe I should. Your poem, well written has brought back memories. I told my father once that I loved him and all he said was :"You too boy" I'll take that as a positive. Don
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2014
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I enjoyed your poem immensely, I had a father similar to yours. I have never wrote a poem about him, maybe I should. Your poem, well written has brought back memories. I told my father once that I loved him and all he said was :"You too boy" I'll take that as a positive. Don
Comment Written 12-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2014
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Thanks Donald. Dads huh!
Comment from Gungalo
These words
"I'm proud of you son"
Alas
Never
And now you are gone.
A living legacy that could have been much better. Sigh, I'm sorry Tom for your loss but it seems as if it were a good thing.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2014
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These words
"I'm proud of you son"
Alas
Never
And now you are gone.
A living legacy that could have been much better. Sigh, I'm sorry Tom for your loss but it seems as if it were a good thing.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2014
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Thank you Gungalo. Quite possibly
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Smile.
Comment from Selina Stambi
I recall these things
At unexpected moments
Whenever I see a father
And son interacting
In a positive way ... me too - but in my case, it's a father and daughter
Oh, Tom. How my heart bled. I have a father but longed for a DAD. I know exactly how you feel.
My father, aged 78, is mellowing a bit with age - but I have come to accept that he will never see me for the person I really am.
May God, the Healer, heal our wounded hearts, my friend.
Sonali
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2014
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I recall these things
At unexpected moments
Whenever I see a father
And son interacting
In a positive way ... me too - but in my case, it's a father and daughter
Oh, Tom. How my heart bled. I have a father but longed for a DAD. I know exactly how you feel.
My father, aged 78, is mellowing a bit with age - but I have come to accept that he will never see me for the person I really am.
May God, the Healer, heal our wounded hearts, my friend.
Sonali
Comment Written 12-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2014
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Thank you Sonali. Yes, both of our wounds. Hugs.
