Little Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 107 "My City at Night"Small and Specialty Poems
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Comment from 9999pool
A good rondeau describing a beautiful night scene over the surface of the Mississippi River. The bright reflection on the waterfront can bedazzle the onlookers and to see the magnificence of the City of St Paul by night.
Brilliant imagery too.
Great write and well expressed the mood of a night scene.
Cheerio, Ritchie. :))
Happy holidays!
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2013
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A good rondeau describing a beautiful night scene over the surface of the Mississippi River. The bright reflection on the waterfront can bedazzle the onlookers and to see the magnificence of the City of St Paul by night.
Brilliant imagery too.
Great write and well expressed the mood of a night scene.
Cheerio, Ritchie. :))
Happy holidays!
Comment Written 15-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2013
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Thank you Ritchie.
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Welcome Tom,
This Rondeau doesn't look like it is easy to write, smiles.
Cheerio, Ritchie. :))
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
This 6 is not only for the most beautiful words and style of your poem, but for the incredible photo as well, Tom. The two combined makes this so special. To be able to write about something that stirs you, and then back it up with the images you have shown in the words and then to seal it with your camera, is worthy of a double 6. Extra special this time. xsx sandra
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2013
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This 6 is not only for the most beautiful words and style of your poem, but for the incredible photo as well, Tom. The two combined makes this so special. To be able to write about something that stirs you, and then back it up with the images you have shown in the words and then to seal it with your camera, is worthy of a double 6. Extra special this time. xsx sandra
Comment Written 14-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2013
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Thank you Sandra. I am very pleased that you enjoyed this one so much. The picture is one of several I took at night. A couple more just might pop up.
Comment from robina1978
The photo is excellent and complements your poem so well. You can do any form well, I think. Is this indeed where you live? It looks lovely.
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2013
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The photo is excellent and complements your poem so well. You can do any form well, I think. Is this indeed where you live? It looks lovely.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2013
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Thank you Ine. Yes, born and raised there.
Comment from Smoothiecool
awesome picture
I don't know a lot about Rondeau poetry but reading the format I can't seem to fault this one it looks to have all the components
your allows the reader to see and feel the images portrayed through out your poem the golden glow shines through in this poem and the reflections
the rhyme falls in place and works well
flows easy read
cheers SC
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2013
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awesome picture
I don't know a lot about Rondeau poetry but reading the format I can't seem to fault this one it looks to have all the components
your allows the reader to see and feel the images portrayed through out your poem the golden glow shines through in this poem and the reflections
the rhyme falls in place and works well
flows easy read
cheers SC
Comment Written 14-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2013
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Thank you SC, your detailed review is excellent and appreciated.
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your welcome
Comment from Carole Rosa
Treischel, I've never been to your city, but your lovely poem is inviting to anyone who would like to visit. I suppose every town and or city has a vocal point that could be bragged about. Some may be more beautiful than others, but your photo with the lights reflecting in the water is gorgeous. You appear to be both an excellent photographer and poet. Carole
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2013
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Treischel, I've never been to your city, but your lovely poem is inviting to anyone who would like to visit. I suppose every town and or city has a vocal point that could be bragged about. Some may be more beautiful than others, but your photo with the lights reflecting in the water is gorgeous. You appear to be both an excellent photographer and poet. Carole
Comment Written 14-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2013
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Thank you very much Carole.
Comment from sunnilicious
Beautiful photograph. Great poem. Good flow of rhythm and rhymes. Well thought out. Clearly written. Good visual imagery created. Good author notes. Nice work.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2013
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Beautiful photograph. Great poem. Good flow of rhythm and rhymes. Well thought out. Clearly written. Good visual imagery created. Good author notes. Nice work.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2013
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Thank you so much Sunni.
Comment from Tatarka2
I really love the way you stayed within this difficult format and yet painted a "word picture of your beautiful city. I didn't love the middle stanza (the one that rhymes "fool" with "cool"). It doesn't seem to flow, to me, in such a beautifully lyrical poem.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2013
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I really love the way you stayed within this difficult format and yet painted a "word picture of your beautiful city. I didn't love the middle stanza (the one that rhymes "fool" with "cool"). It doesn't seem to flow, to me, in such a beautifully lyrical poem.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2013
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Thank you Tatarka2. I put that in there to add a touch of pace and humor.
Comment from Joan E.
Saint Paul looks a bit like Montreal (the second largest city in Canada) also on a river--the Saint Lawrence. Thanks for the new vocabulary word. I enjoyed your Rondeau with its rhymes and repeats. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2013
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Saint Paul looks a bit like Montreal (the second largest city in Canada) also on a river--the Saint Lawrence. Thanks for the new vocabulary word. I enjoyed your Rondeau with its rhymes and repeats. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 13-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2013
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Thank youbJoan. Yes, I've been there. It is a beautiful city.
Comment from Preston McWhorter
Hi, Treischel,
This is an exceptional rondeau. I resonate with its rhythm and rhyme. The repetition is effective. The image it makes is precisely the image in your illustration. Nice picture.
Preston
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2013
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Hi, Treischel,
This is an exceptional rondeau. I resonate with its rhythm and rhyme. The repetition is effective. The image it makes is precisely the image in your illustration. Nice picture.
Preston
Comment Written 13-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2013
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Thank you so very much Preston. You must be warming up to repetition.
Comment from Gungalo
The glow that shows in each vestibule,
That gleams and beams form each edifice spicule
Adds its glimmer to the evening bright,
While the water-shed ribbons of gold delight
Blend together so well,
My city at night.
An excellent Rondeau Tom. You have outdone yourself with this one. Your city at night is beautiful and shines like a star.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2013
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The glow that shows in each vestibule,
That gleams and beams form each edifice spicule
Adds its glimmer to the evening bright,
While the water-shed ribbons of gold delight
Blend together so well,
My city at night.
An excellent Rondeau Tom. You have outdone yourself with this one. Your city at night is beautiful and shines like a star.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2013
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Thank you, thank you Gungalo. I glowing myself with that review.
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SMiling at you TOm.
