Along the Jericho Road
Viewing comments for Chapter 50 "Sunkothai Moon, Part II"Murder Mystery
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Comment from AprilShower
I wonder if her grandmother might know something that will help solve the murders, Bev.
Is the statement below a hint on who the murder is?
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"Dred's spectacular ability to grasp the flawed thinking of the criminally insane was a gift, not without its price. In their time together, she'd seen how he struggled to keep from falling into the pit inhabited by those with dead eyes who butcher the innocent."
This statement bothered me for some reason. Why would it have a price? Dilettante means to take up an occupation purely for amusement. The others' judgement of him must be wrong if it had a price. If he could fall into the same pit as those who butcher the innocent, could he be the murderer?
April
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2013
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I wonder if her grandmother might know something that will help solve the murders, Bev.
Is the statement below a hint on who the murder is?
Quote:
"Dred's spectacular ability to grasp the flawed thinking of the criminally insane was a gift, not without its price. In their time together, she'd seen how he struggled to keep from falling into the pit inhabited by those with dead eyes who butcher the innocent."
This statement bothered me for some reason. Why would it have a price? Dilettante means to take up an occupation purely for amusement. The others' judgement of him must be wrong if it had a price. If he could fall into the same pit as those who butcher the innocent, could he be the murderer?
April
Comment Written 11-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2013
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Hi, April. Thank you for reading this chapter with such depth. I've read and heard many times that those who work with the criminally insane are always touched in some way by the darkness of that person's mind/soul. Just as Father Brian has been touched by the evil that permeates from this killer. Dred is a conflicted man, but he is not the killer. He will be a part of bringing down the one who is, however.
Thanks, my friend for your support and encouragement. Now back to Father Brian.
Warmest regards, Bev
Comment from judiverse
Really outstanding, and I'm without six star ratings already! You do a great with Jana and her insights. Also, we learn of Dred's history--past alcoholic and he's drinking again. Jana picks up on that. We've already seen that he is quite the womanizer. When Dred asks about the inquiries into Father Brian, she talks about his alibis and her own observations of the priest. However, her attention is taken away from the case when she hears her grandmother's been hospitalized. Great ending for this post, and will it mean that strange things will be happening at the hospital? judi
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2013
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Really outstanding, and I'm without six star ratings already! You do a great with Jana and her insights. Also, we learn of Dred's history--past alcoholic and he's drinking again. Jana picks up on that. We've already seen that he is quite the womanizer. When Dred asks about the inquiries into Father Brian, she talks about his alibis and her own observations of the priest. However, her attention is taken away from the case when she hears her grandmother's been hospitalized. Great ending for this post, and will it mean that strange things will be happening at the hospital? judi
Comment Written 11-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2013
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Oh, Judi, I so understand about the stars!! So many good writers on this site. Your review made me smile which is worth any number of stars to me. I struggled to make the conversation real, yet interesting. And hoped that we would have a better idea of the person that Jana is. Sounds like I've accomplished that from your very kind words here. I appreciate so much your support for this novel! Warmest regards, Bev
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You're so welcome, Bev, and I do like Jana. She has such an interesting background. judi
Comment from Erik McGinley
Yep, yep, yep!
I liked this, thank you :D
And I also like the artwork, though I don't see the relevance in that particular chapter.
This flowed well, read well and is just the sort of writing I like.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2013
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Yep, yep, yep!
I liked this, thank you :D
And I also like the artwork, though I don't see the relevance in that particular chapter.
This flowed well, read well and is just the sort of writing I like.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2013
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Erik, thank you so very much! I appreciate your taking time to read my chapter. Warm regards, Bev
Comment from Green Lake Girl
Bev, I was delighted to see you had posted another chapter when I logged onto FanStory this morning. I wasn't disappointed. Another superior post. I love the way you sprinkle Native American culture into your story. Uncle Tony has very good energy and dispenses good advice. It gives us insight into Jana's method of tackling the case. You've skillfully written the dynamics between Dred and Jana. First I like him, then I don't. You keep your reader a little off balance by doing this, making for an exciting read. This is an excellent story and you are an excellent writer. Very well done!
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2013
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Bev, I was delighted to see you had posted another chapter when I logged onto FanStory this morning. I wasn't disappointed. Another superior post. I love the way you sprinkle Native American culture into your story. Uncle Tony has very good energy and dispenses good advice. It gives us insight into Jana's method of tackling the case. You've skillfully written the dynamics between Dred and Jana. First I like him, then I don't. You keep your reader a little off balance by doing this, making for an exciting read. This is an excellent story and you are an excellent writer. Very well done!
Comment Written 11-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2013
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Ah, thank you my generous friend. Uncle Tony is one of the many characters I've enjoyed shaping in this story. He epitomizes so much of the American Native Indian way for me. A way that is very sadly degenerating with each generation. We, in Northern Michigan, are fortunate to have a thriving community. That is not the case elsewhere.
I really appreciate your support, generosity and insights, GLG. You honor me with this six-star review.
Hugs, Bev
Comment from Rondeno
I love the way you don't simply use Indians as marionettes in your novel, but you actually enter into their lore, their poetry, their way of experiencing this world. And the Jana-Dred thing is great, with wonderful psychological nuances - such as Dred's brittle pride being hurt when she refers to him as a mere cop. And it's all written in a beautiful, professional prose! Attagirl, Bev!
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2013
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I love the way you don't simply use Indians as marionettes in your novel, but you actually enter into their lore, their poetry, their way of experiencing this world. And the Jana-Dred thing is great, with wonderful psychological nuances - such as Dred's brittle pride being hurt when she refers to him as a mere cop. And it's all written in a beautiful, professional prose! Attagirl, Bev!
Comment Written 11-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2013
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Aw, Mikey, I'm so loving this review. Thanks for your great insights that tell me I'm moving in the right direction with this story. That means so much coming from someone whose writing I totally admire. Big Hug, Bev
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, writingfundimension, you did an excellent job writing this chapter where jana and dred meet one on one to discuss the case off the record==one error i spotted=alibis instead of alibies.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2013
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this is very well written, writingfundimension, you did an excellent job writing this chapter where jana and dred meet one on one to discuss the case off the record==one error i spotted=alibis instead of alibies.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2013
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Thank you so much, Sweet. I appreciate the support! Bev
Comment from misscookie
Another interesting chapter.
As always you got me going back and fore of who the killer is. which is a good thing for the writer.
it makes the read want to read the next chapter and just maybe...LOL
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2013
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Another interesting chapter.
As always you got me going back and fore of who the killer is. which is a good thing for the writer.
it makes the read want to read the next chapter and just maybe...LOL
Comment Written 11-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2013
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Hi, misscookie. No creepy stuff in this one to scare one of my favorite ladies! Thank you for taking time to read and for hanging in there with me on this novel. You're a delight! Bev
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Don't hold back for me. I'll take a chill pill and read on. LOL
Until next time.
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You're so darned cute, Cookie. Love ya, Bev
Comment from Dawn Munro
I am so darn upset I could spit nickels! Here we go again! You have caught me yet again with no darn sixes!
This is FABULOUS, Bev. Flawless in every way possible (except for a tiny apostrophe here: "Of course, it(')s possible," she said. "But I keep..."
I am so hooked on this story! It's simply riveting! Outstanding writing all the way - an honor to review. ******************!!!
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2013
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I am so darn upset I could spit nickels! Here we go again! You have caught me yet again with no darn sixes!
This is FABULOUS, Bev. Flawless in every way possible (except for a tiny apostrophe here: "Of course, it(')s possible," she said. "But I keep..."
I am so hooked on this story! It's simply riveting! Outstanding writing all the way - an honor to review. ******************!!!
Comment Written 11-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2013
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I so understand about the sixes Dawn. When you're following so many awesome writers, as you and I both do, it makes the pitiful number of sixes available inadequate. Anyway, it's wonderful to know that you enjoyed my chapter. And thanks for catching that spaggie. I'll change posthaste. Your support is always so appreciated, my friend.
Hugs, Bev
Comment from Aussie
"Fear, the only way out is through." I liked your explanation of "do not run from this fear, child," he urged. "Face it, and you will grow strong and straight." His lips compressed into a gash - great imagery. I'm enjoying your murder/mystery story - sounds professional and keeps the reader reading. Well done.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2013
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"Fear, the only way out is through." I liked your explanation of "do not run from this fear, child," he urged. "Face it, and you will grow strong and straight." His lips compressed into a gash - great imagery. I'm enjoying your murder/mystery story - sounds professional and keeps the reader reading. Well done.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2013
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Hi, Kay. I honored by your encouraging and very generous review. You picked up on two areas I wanted to get right, so thank you for that. I really appreciate your support and helpful insights, my friend.
Blessings, Bev
Comment from Author Unknown
What an interesting and well written chapter Bev...Someday I'll get a new printer and copy these chapters off and I'll have your book to read all at once. :) If that's okay with you. I was impressed with your very realistic dialogue. One line stood out, "He grabbed the air as if catching it and patted his heart." Perfect. And I like all the original names of your characters. I take it they are Native American? I need to go back to the beginning. I'm so sorry I can't keep up Bev. VERY good work. No spags that I could see. x. A.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2013
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What an interesting and well written chapter Bev...Someday I'll get a new printer and copy these chapters off and I'll have your book to read all at once. :) If that's okay with you. I was impressed with your very realistic dialogue. One line stood out, "He grabbed the air as if catching it and patted his heart." Perfect. And I like all the original names of your characters. I take it they are Native American? I need to go back to the beginning. I'm so sorry I can't keep up Bev. VERY good work. No spags that I could see. x. A.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2013
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Thank you so much, A. Your words of encouragement and generosity mean so much coming from a writer I truly admire. I love the American Indian culture -- have from my youngest years. Though I am part Indian, I know little of my own people. So, I have created a fictitious family in this story that I have grown to really love. Thanks for noting the 'realistic dialogue'. That, particularly, means a lot.
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My husband is one quarter Cherokee on his mother's side. But doesn't look it at all. We haven't learned much either about his family history. He needs to do a search. I should sign him up to Ancestory?. com?? You could do that too Bev? Let me know if you do! I'll try to read more too asap. Luv, A.
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I've had some family members try to find out more about my maternal grandmother, but the records back then were sketchy, especially in a mixed marriage. XXX
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Still, there's surely something there? I'm adopted so that's that. Lol! But the old man could go back to his roots. :)
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I've lost touch with much of that side of my family. My mother died young and her family just sort of fell away. Now they are all gone but one and he's not all that sharp. I'm content to know there's some part of me that genuinely resonates with a culture that so fascinates me. :0)
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So, you're a bit like me...we'll probably never know the whole story. That's sad. But what can we do?? :/
