A Picture's Worth a Thousand Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 21 "Horrified"A compilation of pictapoems from my portfolio
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Comment from tbacha58
Whoa Dean, what a beautiful master piece you have penned here my friend. I loved it because it is so sad, and so true, and the rhyming gives the feeling of a never ending poem. Your philosophy is immense, about the child abuse, the saddest thing that ever happens to a child. I know what it i means. Bless you Happy Holidays. Hugs Terry xxx
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Whoa Dean, what a beautiful master piece you have penned here my friend. I loved it because it is so sad, and so true, and the rhyming gives the feeling of a never ending poem. Your philosophy is immense, about the child abuse, the saddest thing that ever happens to a child. I know what it i means. Bless you Happy Holidays. Hugs Terry xxx
Comment Written 11-Dec-2013
Comment from Ridley Williams
Hey Dean,
More than when, I wonder how. I had a child-physic minor in college. I wrote a paper on a child's development from the day they were born until age five. My research showed that 80% of a child's personality and reaction to outside stimuli, smiling, frowning, a raised hand, are all established by that tender age. That's why it's so hard to re-train them. My sister takes in foster children, her and her husband have adopted three of them, but we talk about the challenges she faces trying to re-establish trust. In the "old" days with tribes, I surmise that there may not have been as much abuse in the families as they were much closer and involved in each others lives. Maybe that's the answer to some of these problems; closer family ties. Personally, I think you should have to apply for a permit to have children and then PASS a class and physic evaluation! Sorry, got a little excited there, didn't mean to raise my voice, but this subject pisses me off! I ever catch someone abusing a child there going to have a case of "shaken adult" syndrome. OK, better have a cup of tea and mellow out. Nice job presenting the horrors of abuse, Bill
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2013
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Hey Dean,
More than when, I wonder how. I had a child-physic minor in college. I wrote a paper on a child's development from the day they were born until age five. My research showed that 80% of a child's personality and reaction to outside stimuli, smiling, frowning, a raised hand, are all established by that tender age. That's why it's so hard to re-train them. My sister takes in foster children, her and her husband have adopted three of them, but we talk about the challenges she faces trying to re-establish trust. In the "old" days with tribes, I surmise that there may not have been as much abuse in the families as they were much closer and involved in each others lives. Maybe that's the answer to some of these problems; closer family ties. Personally, I think you should have to apply for a permit to have children and then PASS a class and physic evaluation! Sorry, got a little excited there, didn't mean to raise my voice, but this subject pisses me off! I ever catch someone abusing a child there going to have a case of "shaken adult" syndrome. OK, better have a cup of tea and mellow out. Nice job presenting the horrors of abuse, Bill
Comment Written 08-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2013
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Wow, thanks for such an indepth review, Bill, I really appreciate the excellent feedback. This is a very sensitive subject for me, so I found myself in a bit of a conundrum as I approached the writing of it. On one hand, I didn't want to "sugar-coat" anything. I felt that would be a disservice to all those who have suffered abuse. On the other hand, I did not want to go too "over-the-top." I hope I found a happy, healthy medium, and people can take something positive away from this.
Thanks so much, again!
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Your welcome. I think the only way to beat this may be to keep the light shining on the problem as long as possible. Well lit, my friend, Bill
Comment from elpsog
The poem in and of itself stands tall in its message delivered. But I gave six because you have the guts to shout the horror to the silent world. You deserve a medal of honor. I don't condone murder but if I am on the abused girl's jury I cast my vote as innocent. God bless you.
Ray
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The poem in and of itself stands tall in its message delivered. But I gave six because you have the guts to shout the horror to the silent world. You deserve a medal of honor. I don't condone murder but if I am on the abused girl's jury I cast my vote as innocent. God bless you.
Ray
Comment Written 07-Dec-2013
Comment from allborn66
This is a very poignant poem. The form enhances the piece. The last line in each stanza is very strong. You communicate your theme very well.
Domestic violence and child abuse is a major problem. Until society decides to provide a better support system to the victims, I fear it will continue much as it has before.
Barbara
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This is a very poignant poem. The form enhances the piece. The last line in each stanza is very strong. You communicate your theme very well.
Domestic violence and child abuse is a major problem. Until society decides to provide a better support system to the victims, I fear it will continue much as it has before.
Barbara
Comment Written 07-Dec-2013
Comment from Just Alyx
Whew, that's one hell of a cleave poem. One of the best I've ever read, and especially due to content. The final stanza, on the left, was very smartly done for double impact through the third read. I'm impressed (and appreciative) that you wrote this and put your high profile here to such a positive use. Secrecy is these predator's strongest weapon. Every time we're silent about what we know and see, and do nothing, we enable their cruelties. Take away the secrecy and they are disempowered. This is a passionate cleave with purpose. Good onya. One comment is that perhaps you could add to author notes that this is in fact a cleave because I think many would be distracted by the powerful content and not even realise the qualities of the cleave itself. Just wondering. The visuals to accompany are excellent. Fine package.
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Whew, that's one hell of a cleave poem. One of the best I've ever read, and especially due to content. The final stanza, on the left, was very smartly done for double impact through the third read. I'm impressed (and appreciative) that you wrote this and put your high profile here to such a positive use. Secrecy is these predator's strongest weapon. Every time we're silent about what we know and see, and do nothing, we enable their cruelties. Take away the secrecy and they are disempowered. This is a passionate cleave with purpose. Good onya. One comment is that perhaps you could add to author notes that this is in fact a cleave because I think many would be distracted by the powerful content and not even realise the qualities of the cleave itself. Just wondering. The visuals to accompany are excellent. Fine package.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2013
Comment from Gungalo
A riveting story Dean and hopefully all will read it. Child abuse is something I will never be able to handle. It is plain old evil.
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A riveting story Dean and hopefully all will read it. Child abuse is something I will never be able to handle. It is plain old evil.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2013
Comment from Dutchie
In fact you deserve a six Dean, but I've any left .So Sorry...
It breaks my heart to read this. Yes this is what happens and those children are hurt for a lifetime...
Is it justified, she asks... Well when you are in this situation you can't think clear and is it the only way to escape this horror. Well written, realistic, smooth flow and great rhyme. Great job. Fia
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In fact you deserve a six Dean, but I've any left .So Sorry...
It breaks my heart to read this. Yes this is what happens and those children are hurt for a lifetime...
Is it justified, she asks... Well when you are in this situation you can't think clear and is it the only way to escape this horror. Well written, realistic, smooth flow and great rhyme. Great job. Fia
Comment Written 07-Dec-2013
Comment from Eleanor Buron
You have tackled a difficult subject in this poem! You approach child abuse directly, but most powerfully in the last four stanzas. children violated sometimes never recover from the trauma - and they have trust issues the rest of their lives. Sad that so many wretched people have no respect for life and take advantage of the helpless. You have written a dramatic, memorable poem!
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You have tackled a difficult subject in this poem! You approach child abuse directly, but most powerfully in the last four stanzas. children violated sometimes never recover from the trauma - and they have trust issues the rest of their lives. Sad that so many wretched people have no respect for life and take advantage of the helpless. You have written a dramatic, memorable poem!
Comment Written 07-Dec-2013
Comment from Deborah Ahern
This poem is chilling. Child abuse is a nightmare, and no child ever deserves that. It's chilling and you show the evil very dramaticly. Thank you.
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This poem is chilling. Child abuse is a nightmare, and no child ever deserves that. It's chilling and you show the evil very dramaticly. Thank you.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2013
Comment from pipersfancy
This one resonates with me, too, Dean. My oldest daughter is legally blind in her left eye due to retinal scarring/damage from an episode of her father shaking her as an infant. There were seven long years following my divorce where there was parental interference, and I didn't know where my kids were for months at a time... father lives in Minnesota and would disappear between several communities between Rochester and Winona. When the bottom fell out and my children were returned permanently to my sole custody here in Canada, it was discovered that my oldest had endured years of sexual molestation by both her father and by an older step-brother living in this family. We deal with the aftermath on a daily basis... bi-weekly trauma counselling has been ongoing for nearly 2 years.
I think one of the great difficulties in changing these statistics is that society has an idea that these kinds of horror stories only affect certain groups of people. Not true. I'm educated, self-employed with a wonderful career... but managed to get myself (and then brought 2 children) into a terrible situation that is taking an excruciating long time to heal from.
PF
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This one resonates with me, too, Dean. My oldest daughter is legally blind in her left eye due to retinal scarring/damage from an episode of her father shaking her as an infant. There were seven long years following my divorce where there was parental interference, and I didn't know where my kids were for months at a time... father lives in Minnesota and would disappear between several communities between Rochester and Winona. When the bottom fell out and my children were returned permanently to my sole custody here in Canada, it was discovered that my oldest had endured years of sexual molestation by both her father and by an older step-brother living in this family. We deal with the aftermath on a daily basis... bi-weekly trauma counselling has been ongoing for nearly 2 years.
I think one of the great difficulties in changing these statistics is that society has an idea that these kinds of horror stories only affect certain groups of people. Not true. I'm educated, self-employed with a wonderful career... but managed to get myself (and then brought 2 children) into a terrible situation that is taking an excruciating long time to heal from.
PF
Comment Written 06-Dec-2013
