Comment from Selina Stambi

Excellent

I can understand how hard it was for you .. not to rhyme!

How on earth do you remember all these rules, my friend?

A pretty, perfumed, precious cameo.

Sonali

 Comment Written 25-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 25-Nov-2013

Thank you Sonali. I had to write a pretty poem for that flower.

Comment from Roxanna Andrews

Excellent

I love roses, my favorite boquet is red roses, sunflowers and white dasies. This is a lovey poem paying tribute to a beauiful flower. Rox

 Comment Written 24-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 24-Nov-2013

Thank you Rox, I loved that color.

Comment from amanda98653

Excellent

A beautiful poem you've written there, Treischel.

"Pink rose
Soft pastel petals"

lovely alliteration in "p"

smooth and delicate

"Delights the nose and enchants
The eye "

love that.

hugs


Amanda

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 23-Nov-2013

Thank you Amanda. I love that color.

Comment from Shirley E Kennedy

Excellent

A very well written Cameo poem in an unrhymed style.
Your carefully selected words portray this beautiful bloom to perfection.
I also think and write in rhyme so I understand the difficulty with spontaneous unrhymed verse.

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 23-Nov-2013

Thank you Shirley. I had to unwrite about three of them.

Comment from rod007

Excellent

As usual an excellent poem. I especially liked these lines which added a human dimension to that lovely flower:
"Delicate curled edges caress
In layers"
Well done.

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 23-Nov-2013

Thank you Rod.

Comment from Preston McWhorter

Excellent

Hi, Treischel,
This is an excellent cameo poem with the specified line/syllable count. It has good flow and excellent figurative language and imagery.
Preston

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 23-Nov-2013

Thank you Preston.

Comment from Gungalo

Excellent

Pink rose
Soft pastel petals
Delicate curled edges caress
In layers
A core with sweet scented center
Delights the nose and enchants
The eye


Well done Tom. It's a great cameo and doesn't rhyme one bit. Awesome guy.

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 23-Nov-2013

Thank you Gungalo, this wonderful review, and reminding me of that lovely format.

reply by Gungalo on 23-Nov-2013

SMiling at you. Robina wrote one too.

Comment from Ekim777

Excellent

You are brave to tackle the queen of flowers even it is only a cameo. As for rhyme, we should free ourselves of them. Unless they fall naturally in place, they become spurious and redundant; almost props in the game of writing poetry. Above all, they should not be there like a full stop at the end of a line and should not interfere with the cadence which is the spirit of the poem. My main gripe is that the poet has neglected the dark side of the rose where aphids and death lurks. "Oh rose thou art sick. The worm that flies in the night/ Has made its home in thy bed of joy/ And does thy life destroy.?" (How I remember it and William Blake wrote it." -Ekim777

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 23-Nov-2013

Thank you Ekim777. For your insightful comments and that incredible William Blake quote.

Comment from Capricorn30

Excellent

I must write a Cameo poem!
Your well-penned poem dedicated to summer flowers greatly complements the photograph--incorporating nice alliteration also particularly in "sweet-scented";
Excellent!
A pleasure to read.

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 23-Nov-2013

Thank you Margaret. Yes, you must!

Comment from STEPHEN A CARTER

Excellent

Pink rose
Soft pastel petals Love the alliteration
Delicate curled edges caress 'c' effects are lovely
In layers
A core with sweet scented center Strong..'a core'
Delights the nose ENCHANTING Omit: 'and'
The eye

Lovely indeed. My favorite flower. Used to grow roses.

Regards:

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 23-Nov-2013

Thank you Stephen.