Along the Jericho Road
Viewing comments for Chapter 49 "Sunkothai Moon, Part One"Murder Mystery
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Comment from jadapenn
Hi Bev, I think I've missed a few chapters with my absence. Loved this one where Jana is saddled with some inner conflict about the man she's meeting. Loved Donal's thoughts though. Yep, seems Mr. Dred is a real womanizer and she needs to tread carefully. Hope he helps her some.
Well written. luv jada
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2013
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Hi Bev, I think I've missed a few chapters with my absence. Loved this one where Jana is saddled with some inner conflict about the man she's meeting. Loved Donal's thoughts though. Yep, seems Mr. Dred is a real womanizer and she needs to tread carefully. Hope he helps her some.
Well written. luv jada
Comment Written 12-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2013
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Thanks so much, Jada. I always enjoy hearing from you, and appreciate how generous and encouraging you always are. Much love... Bev
Comment from Showboat
Well, Bev, you've done it again. Man, when you get ready to publish this little gem, be sure to give me a buzz! Excellent - very visual, and employing several clever devices to keep the reader on edge.
A perfect example is how you end with:..'the beautiful woman he'd never stopped loving.' Aha! But he's a cheat! He was just coming on to Dani! What can this mean? ;)
Here's another sixer for you! Well deserved, m'dear, great writing.
Hugs,
Gayle
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2013
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Well, Bev, you've done it again. Man, when you get ready to publish this little gem, be sure to give me a buzz! Excellent - very visual, and employing several clever devices to keep the reader on edge.
A perfect example is how you end with:..'the beautiful woman he'd never stopped loving.' Aha! But he's a cheat! He was just coming on to Dani! What can this mean? ;)
Here's another sixer for you! Well deserved, m'dear, great writing.
Hugs,
Gayle
Comment Written 24-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2013
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Thank you so very much, Gayle. I'm honored by your wonderfully generous and encouraging review. I so appreciate you! Hugs, Bev
Comment from Adri7enne
I love how you've given the background of the relationship between Jana and Dred. Women love bad boys. We keep thinking we can change them. Ha! And even worse, she knows how vulnerable she is to him! Well done, Bev.
I love your use of the few Sioux phrases.
Oh, I don't know that I would have revealed that last line, though. "to the beautiful woman he'd never stopped loving." I would have left us to discover that as the story continued.
Congrats on having reached a point where you feel you can call it an 'end'. You're planning on a new book to continue the story?
Good writing, Bev.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2013
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I love how you've given the background of the relationship between Jana and Dred. Women love bad boys. We keep thinking we can change them. Ha! And even worse, she knows how vulnerable she is to him! Well done, Bev.
I love your use of the few Sioux phrases.
Oh, I don't know that I would have revealed that last line, though. "to the beautiful woman he'd never stopped loving." I would have left us to discover that as the story continued.
Congrats on having reached a point where you feel you can call it an 'end'. You're planning on a new book to continue the story?
Good writing, Bev.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2013
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Thanks so much, Adrienne. You make a valid point about that final line. I do have a tendency to go a bit dramatic at the end of my chapters LOL. I think I'm hooked on the hook.
Yes, the end is in sight. I have a few more scary chapters coming out of the hopper. I'm taking a horror writing class which is fueling the fire. Anywho, thanks for being so supportive and generous. I appreciate you! Warmest regards, Bev
Comment from amahra
You can tell an excellent writer by the way he/she can hold your interest when nothing adventurous or exciting happens in a scene. I also love that title and the beautiful art work you chose. Great chapter.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2013
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You can tell an excellent writer by the way he/she can hold your interest when nothing adventurous or exciting happens in a scene. I also love that title and the beautiful art work you chose. Great chapter.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2013
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Thank you so much, amahra. I think this is one of my favorite reviews for my entire novel. I'm honored by your gracious insight. Warmest regards, Bev
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
Hum, an interesting new twist. I personally think Jana is much better off with Donal, she will never be able to trust Dresden, with good reason. As always a great chapter, looking forward to the next. Rox
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2013
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Hum, an interesting new twist. I personally think Jana is much better off with Donal, she will never be able to trust Dresden, with good reason. As always a great chapter, looking forward to the next. Rox
Comment Written 24-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2013
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Thanks so much, Rox. I appreciate your great review! Hugs, Bev
Comment from Righteous Riter
Good smooth introduction as the setting is revealed from the start. Good character balance and intense dialogue. Good transition between the events. Good intense pace as the tension builds toward the end of the chapter. Good work.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2013
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Good smooth introduction as the setting is revealed from the start. Good character balance and intense dialogue. Good transition between the events. Good intense pace as the tension builds toward the end of the chapter. Good work.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2013
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Thank you so much for your gracious and generous review, RR. :0) Bev
Comment from barbara.wilkey
My reviewing has been cut way down because of my paying job. I think I must have missed a post. It took me awhile to figure it out, or it might have just been that I have a horrible memory. Anyway, you did a good job of writing.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2013
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My reviewing has been cut way down because of my paying job. I think I must have missed a post. It took me awhile to figure it out, or it might have just been that I have a horrible memory. Anyway, you did a good job of writing.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2013
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Thanks, barbara. I appreciate you taking time out to read and review. Happy Holidays! Bev
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This was an exceptional read. I was completely engaged from beginning to end. The balance of dialog and description was impeccably executed. Thank you so much for sharing this with me.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2013
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This was an exceptional read. I was completely engaged from beginning to end. The balance of dialog and description was impeccably executed. Thank you so much for sharing this with me.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2013
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Hi, Mystic Angel. Thank you so very much for this awesome review! I really appreciate your generosity and encouragement.
Warmest regards, Bev
Comment from JRLive
Very good writing setting up the characters and a little background info about them. I was able to read this work and view in my head as a movie.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2013
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Very good writing setting up the characters and a little background info about them. I was able to read this work and view in my head as a movie.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2013
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Thanks for this awesome review, JR. I appreciate it! Bev
Comment from DALLAS01
I like the way you used this chapter to give a break in the tension. Was that intentional? I follow Mastery also and noticed he did the same thing. It works well. I see that as a sign that the author can gage the readers need or tension release. I also liked the backstory peek at Jan's and Dred's relationship. My favorite line follow:
Like a physician aware of the little nasties circulating with impunity through the fluids of the human body, Jana was intimate with Dresden Stredwick's chezi okhizata (insincere) nature.
Now, here she was heading for an intimate meeting with the one man for whom she skated the edge where love and hate meet.
(great analogy)
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2013
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I like the way you used this chapter to give a break in the tension. Was that intentional? I follow Mastery also and noticed he did the same thing. It works well. I see that as a sign that the author can gage the readers need or tension release. I also liked the backstory peek at Jan's and Dred's relationship. My favorite line follow:
Like a physician aware of the little nasties circulating with impunity through the fluids of the human body, Jana was intimate with Dresden Stredwick's chezi okhizata (insincere) nature.
Now, here she was heading for an intimate meeting with the one man for whom she skated the edge where love and hate meet.
(great analogy)
Comment Written 23-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2013
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Hi, Dallas. Thanks for highlighting two of my favorite parts. I appreciate that and the super review. And to be considered in the same league with Mastery - icing on the cake. Warmest regards, Bev
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