Comment from Selina Stambi

Excellent

Says the one time elementary school teacher in me .. this would make a great children's poem - a book - an illustrated couplet, per page.

Love the thoughtful childlike narrative voice... :)

 Comment Written 20-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 20-Nov-2013

Thank you Sonali. I will occasionally write a children's one.

Comment from Shirley E Kennedy

Excellent

What an effective style of poetry.
The list of Ifs and Thens could go on forever.
This style certainly provides an immense blank canvas.
Thoughtfully written and presented to support the
theme and style of poetry.

 Comment Written 19-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 19-Nov-2013

Thank you Shirley. The possibilities are unlimited.

Comment from Preston McWhorter

Excellent

Hi, Treischel,
This poem is neat, rhythmic and inventive. The rhyme is good and the rhyme scheme is carried off without a hitch. I enjoyed this poem.
Preston

 Comment Written 18-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 18-Nov-2013

Thank you Preston.

Comment from rod007

Excellent

I really like this. It rhymes well and is humorous. Good for a children's book.
If I were a wolf
then I would gobble down the calf."
I get it, well done.

 Comment Written 18-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 18-Nov-2013

Thank you Rod, very good, you got it.

Comment from joneau2

Excellent

Really nicely composed. I like that If-Then structure. Hmm, like:
If I were a shark alone in the sea
I'll bet I'll get you before you see me.

Oh well. Well done.

 Comment Written 18-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 18-Nov-2013

Thank you Joneau, you've got it. Keep going.

Comment from RGstar

Excellent

A nice little quirky one :)

Made me smile.

This would do nicely in a kids book. I think it would be greatly loved.

Good rhymes with humor attached.

Save this one for a good children's book.

I like to write children's poems also.

Well done,

RG

 Comment Written 18-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 18-Nov-2013

Thank you RG. OK, will do.

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

Heh, yeah, I have wondered about being a few things, other than a human being. Like, I wonder what it'd be like to be a lion, King of the Jungle. Or, a Tiger, deep in the jungles of Southeast Asia.

This was great, Mr. 'T', and it does get us thinking, just as you intended it would.

 Comment Written 18-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 18-Nov-2013

Thank you Dean. Something light for the little ones.

reply by Dean Kuch on 18-Nov-2013

Sure thing, it was great.

Comment from Maureen's Pen

Excellent

Hi Tom,
I really enjoyed reading this one. Creative format I think its got the ability to have us answering those deeper questions.
Well penned my friend.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen

 Comment Written 18-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 18-Nov-2013

Thank you Maureen. Glad you enjoyed it.