To Cherish Thorns
Viewing comments for Chapter 42 "la di da di da"Free Verse Poetry
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Comment from l.raven
WOW!!!!Michael, This one just moves right along...not letting you stop to breathe...just trying to find yourself...I love the title to this one Michael...and the picture is great...very well written...Luff Ya Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2013
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WOW!!!!Michael, This one just moves right along...not letting you stop to breathe...just trying to find yourself...I love the title to this one Michael...and the picture is great...very well written...Luff Ya Linda xxoo
Comment Written 13-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2013
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I am so happy that you like this. I was afraid to post this. I didn't know if anyone would like it or not. Yea!! I was afraid everyone would think it was too long and I was crazy. hahaha. mikey
Comment from adewpearl
Great presentation of your poem
good pairing of strolling and strutting
I love the passage with the march of the fish to dry land
good alliteration in phrases like meeting molecules
this has such a great spirit to it :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2013
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Great presentation of your poem
good pairing of strolling and strutting
I love the passage with the march of the fish to dry land
good alliteration in phrases like meeting molecules
this has such a great spirit to it :-) Brooke
Comment Written 13-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2013
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I am so pleased you liked this one. I wasn't sure how it might be received. Thank you so very much. big smiles. mikey
Comment from country ranch writer
A WORK IN PROGRESS FOR ALL IS NOT LOST YOU HAVE FOUND YOUR WAY BACK, YOU HAVE FOUND YOUR WAY IN LIFE ALTHOUGH YOU HAVE HAD TO STRUGGLE TO DO IT
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2013
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A WORK IN PROGRESS FOR ALL IS NOT LOST YOU HAVE FOUND YOUR WAY BACK, YOU HAVE FOUND YOUR WAY IN LIFE ALTHOUGH YOU HAVE HAD TO STRUGGLE TO DO IT
Comment Written 13-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2013
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yes. that is all exactly it. a little long winded on this one. but, it just came out that way.
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keep up the good work my friend
Comment from ravenblack
Wow! This reminds me of that Police song, "da do do do..." I don't remember it, but the gist is that a simple, nonsensical melody is all important as it unifies...And my train of thought on that song just flew off the tracks. The water is connection, the source of life, the all and you walk the tunnel, really an artificial membrane separating you from the water, a bit out of sync but still able to see. And la di da- insight to connection rushes in , a necessary drowning that, when in sync, you can summon at will. Just not all the time, hence the tunnel walls. And then it comes-the humble yet arrogant la de da. Like the dr ift of drift and drop of drop. Very inventive piece. Enlightening and cocky ( and a bit scared)....Sixer!
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2013
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Wow! This reminds me of that Police song, "da do do do..." I don't remember it, but the gist is that a simple, nonsensical melody is all important as it unifies...And my train of thought on that song just flew off the tracks. The water is connection, the source of life, the all and you walk the tunnel, really an artificial membrane separating you from the water, a bit out of sync but still able to see. And la di da- insight to connection rushes in , a necessary drowning that, when in sync, you can summon at will. Just not all the time, hence the tunnel walls. And then it comes-the humble yet arrogant la de da. Like the dr ift of drift and drop of drop. Very inventive piece. Enlightening and cocky ( and a bit scared)....Sixer!
Comment Written 13-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2013
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So awesome. I was really afraid to post this. I could just feel the "I don't get it" reviews pouring in. But, this would have made it totally worth it. I am out of sync a lot. But, I can get in sync sometimes at will. Maybe usually and I am lazy about it. that is probably more like it. I actually haven't received a bad review on this. cool. Great review. Happy as a poet with a great review, he said metaphorically. mikey
Comment from Darkhorse555
sound like you watched man from atlantis these words brought a big smile during the march of the fish to dry land a singing beautiful piece dear friend
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2013
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sound like you watched man from atlantis these words brought a big smile during the march of the fish to dry land a singing beautiful piece dear friend
Comment Written 13-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2013
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glad you liked this. afraid it might be too long. mikey
Comment from Sasha
WOW!!! You blew me away with this one. So often I don't feel like I fit in, yet we are truly a part of everything, aren't we? Awesome picture, stupendous poem...just love la di la i da, going to be my new war cry.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2013
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WOW!!! You blew me away with this one. So often I don't feel like I fit in, yet we are truly a part of everything, aren't we? Awesome picture, stupendous poem...just love la di la i da, going to be my new war cry.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2013
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I am just delighted that you enjoyed this! I was afraid that maybe it was too long or that no one would understand it. Thank you so very much. mikey
Comment from TAB_that's me
I think you have written a great poem Mikey. I often feel like you do - like I'm not connecting with or where I'm supposed to - drifting through life, disconnected.
~Teresa~
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2013
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I think you have written a great poem Mikey. I often feel like you do - like I'm not connecting with or where I'm supposed to - drifting through life, disconnected.
~Teresa~
Comment Written 13-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2013
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It is funny, but I feel more connected here than I ever have anywhere else. A little world of crazy poets. What could be better. mikey
Comment from tbacha58
and I'm just screaming now
filling the tunnel with some kind of
echoing screeching wail of sorrow
and I'm falling apart
cell by cell
and the tunnel is collapsing
molecule by m o l e c u l e
and the water I surmised
This part to is amazing, read your poems over and over, and you will discover so many cells living in you, that needs to surface.
Take care loved this poem, it touched my heart very deeply. hugs Terry xxx How I wish I had a six........next time......
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2013
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and I'm just screaming now
filling the tunnel with some kind of
echoing screeching wail of sorrow
and I'm falling apart
cell by cell
and the tunnel is collapsing
molecule by m o l e c u l e
and the water I surmised
This part to is amazing, read your poems over and over, and you will discover so many cells living in you, that needs to surface.
Take care loved this poem, it touched my heart very deeply. hugs Terry xxx How I wish I had a six........next time......
Comment Written 13-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2013
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I am so very happy you liked this one. Very long and I was a little afraid that people would not get it maybe. But, they seem to understand it pretty well. Your words are worth more than any six mum, mikey
Comment from Sueellen11
Wow Micky where did that come from,, this is outstanding,, you know what you have written,, call me stupid but this to me is the complete beginning of life, life being sent from the spirit realm through the umbilical cord, into the womb,, the amniotic fluid with the cell regeneration into the forming foetus,, this is brilliant,,sorry if this was not what you intended but this is what powered into my mind,, excellent,,blessings sueellen
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2013
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Wow Micky where did that come from,, this is outstanding,, you know what you have written,, call me stupid but this to me is the complete beginning of life, life being sent from the spirit realm through the umbilical cord, into the womb,, the amniotic fluid with the cell regeneration into the forming foetus,, this is brilliant,,sorry if this was not what you intended but this is what powered into my mind,, excellent,,blessings sueellen
Comment Written 13-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2013
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Pretty much all of that is in there and more. Really just poured out of my head. Creation, birth, connecting with each other, God, everything really. I'm always afraid to post something like that because I can't exactly explain it completely. But, it is meant to get a response that is personal like yours. So, thank you very much. Much better than "I don't get it" of "You are crazy, this is weird" hahaha!! mikey
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Yes we get some good reviews( NOT) some just have no idea,,, it was amazingly do you mind if I keep it as a favourite,, I like to keep special poems that means so much to from my poet friends,, that is if you don't mind,, well I sure saw creation ,,hugs sue
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of course, the idea that you would want to take a second look is an honor. thank you
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Thank you Micky will book case it now,,,sue
Comment from CR Delport
Did you originally wrote this as a song? It really makes you think a bit, like a good poem should. That is good work my friend.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2013
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Did you originally wrote this as a song? It really makes you think a bit, like a good poem should. That is good work my friend.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2013
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A song? No. But, that might be next now that you mention it. I have put stranger pieces to music. Glad you liked it. Thank you, mikey
