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Free Verse Poetry

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Comment from Sankey
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Aw what a curious bunch of verse. But then mate it would be boring if it was from you and not curious huh!
Interesting picture it definitely belongs. No Spags well done. Heading down hill to level 6 Reviewer thanks partly to you.

 Comment Written 12-Nov-2013


reply by the author on 13-Nov-2013
    keeping you busy....and scratching your head. ha! I don't know what they mean either sometimes. ha! just getting older and tired of the charade and wishing someone would lie to me and tell me I am wonderful. something like that. mikey
Comment from nelliesellie
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Our minds can appear as great as any cathedral.Especially when we are young and learning the sometimes limitless capacity. It makes us feel like giants. I like the cute monkey. I could see myself swinging through the trees as him. I laugh at the two legs stuck on the ground.. Like the work.

 Comment Written 30-Oct-2013


reply by the author on 30-Oct-2013
    Glad you like this. The little monkey is so darling. I feel just like him sometimes! thank you kindly, mikey
Comment from tbacha58
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I am hungry
tarnished
and alone

Hi Mike, That poem is so full of everything an artist like you could write it down. I enjoy so much the variation in each of your poems, monotony never exists. That is why you are great. Hugs Terry. You are never alone. xoxo

 Comment Written 29-Oct-2013


reply by the author on 30-Oct-2013
    I am glad you liked this. A little different. Cute picture of me too! mikey
Comment from mystery poet
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Well, I knew from the art that I should expect
the unexpected and I was, soooo right. You really
drew me in with the first stanza...

Suddenly my dumbfoundedness switched gears to, well
sucker, you should have known there's a trick in
this monkey business.

So fun and funny...Hahaha!




























 Comment Written 29-Oct-2013


reply by the author on 30-Oct-2013
    Glad you liked it. I knew if I threw a self portrait in it would get some laughs!! mikey
Comment from pipersfancy
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Awww... Mikey! Don't we all feel the advance of age, and the pangs of realization that time takes away some of what we have struggled so hard to gather around ourselves?

Just when I was beginning to feel sad and humdrum... well there you were, showing off your athleticism... hanging naked from a trapeze, no less! And, I had to stifle a chuckle! (No offense intended!)

'a ginger bread dream
that I baked inside their thoughts'


Did you give away much of yourself... only to be consumed by others? I know I have.

Really enjoyed this one... it's a bit like reading a script from Monty Python... with a dash of Arthur Miller thrown in for good measure.

PF

 Comment Written 29-Oct-2013


reply by the author on 30-Oct-2013
    Yes, that is well put. Giving away ones self to be consumed by others. There is so much truth to that. It is almost the price we pay for being decent. Oh well, plenty left!! That is some great company to put me in. I shall take it. Big smiles from your review and comments. Thank you so much. Well, the circus calls, mikey
Comment from ProjectBluebook
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There's a lot of interesting word combinations I like--here. The organ pipes, trapeze and "I remember the giddy presence of a ginger bread dream." The ending is a bold statement, mimics the title. You seem---to be in the zone, so to speak. I like the bold white letters and dark contrast, easy to read, sticks out. This poem reminds of the book and movie, "The hunger." David Bowie was a vampire, you probably, recall. Like in Rocky, you seem to have that twinkle and hunger! I enjoyed this poem, delightful. Thanks for your help, also, sincerely, wackydo.

 Comment Written 29-Oct-2013


reply by the author on 30-Oct-2013
    Yeah! "The Hunger" I do recall. I have so much material I could post two a night till I die probably. Plus I am still rambling away. hahaha. I just don't seem to shut up. Glad you liked this. I kind of like it myself. Love them stars. Mikey
reply by ProjectBluebook on 30-Oct-2013
    Go ahead, your in the zone and spitting them out like sunflower seeds. That's a good thing. Later Mikey, go snatch that gold trophy!
Comment from whizpurr ^-^
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Hi Michael,
I enjoyed reading your unusual but highly poetic composition. You use great similies and comparisons in your expressive writing. I especially enjoyed your thoughts about the pipe organs in a cathedral and the word picture you painted of yourself as a naked trapeze artist. Thanks for sharing. Warm regards, W ^-^

 Comment Written 29-Oct-2013


reply by the author on 30-Oct-2013
    So glad you liked my piece and understood it. Your review and comments are very encouraging and appreciated. Thank you very much, mikey
Comment from A TARNISHED KNIGHT
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Well since I am a Tarnished Knight I can empathise with you my friend .. But hanging naked from in a leather collar from a trapeze I can give no empathy at all. It must have been mighty cold there in your world or then again maybe quite hot !!
This was an interesting work for sure ..
TK
w

 Comment Written 29-Oct-2013


reply by the author on 30-Oct-2013
    Glad you found it interesting. I'm in the desert so HOT is the right guess. You can see by the picture what it did to me. ha! mikey
Comment from ravenblack
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This may sound odd, but this really reminds new of Shel Silverstein- the same type of whit. The first stanza, your heart as a cathedral is magnificent. Athletic, hanging naked from a trapeze with a leather collar- hilarious. Ginger bread dream seeking a clever liar like yourself- very playful poem. And honest. You hit all the right notes with this one. Stay hungry. Here's a six to munch on.

 Comment Written 29-Oct-2013


reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
    I have to remember that artists are reading this. I am used to the blank stares of clueless regular people. hahaha. so glad to hear you got this. thank you so much. a great meal!! mikey
Comment from krys123
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Thank you Michael for sharing this free verse poem with fans, myself and other readers/writers. This is a very interesting and very prolifically provocative poem was describes to philosophical hunger of a person in your memory. A very well done piece Michael and I enjoyed reading it very much. You have a good one and God bless.
AK


 Comment Written 29-Oct-2013


reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
    Love your keen insights as always. Cute picture of me don't you think? hahaha. thank you kindly. blessings, mikey
reply by krys123 on 29-Oct-2013
    you are so welcome Mikey have your picture was quite charming. chuckle chuckle