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Comment from Darkhorse555
the truth is in the thinking itself the endless downpour the mind's bedside vigil now loved these lines dear friend really enjoyed following this excellent piece mikey
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013
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the truth is in the thinking itself the endless downpour the mind's bedside vigil now loved these lines dear friend really enjoyed following this excellent piece mikey
Comment Written 24-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013
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Exactly. You got it perfectly correct. Glad you liked it. Not many understood it. mikey
Comment from Cookie333
What the heck? Now I have this image of hubby on the riding lawn mower, caught up in all sorts of nasty rubber balloons. Where did your mind ever come up with this analogy? I have this crazy image in my head,
very different, and different is excellent in my book. Not the same old blah,blah, dodododo...You definitely woke up my eyes with your ending, now I just gotta lift off the top of my head and look in...
thanks mike
karen
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013
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What the heck? Now I have this image of hubby on the riding lawn mower, caught up in all sorts of nasty rubber balloons. Where did your mind ever come up with this analogy? I have this crazy image in my head,
very different, and different is excellent in my book. Not the same old blah,blah, dodododo...You definitely woke up my eyes with your ending, now I just gotta lift off the top of my head and look in...
thanks mike
karen
Comment Written 24-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013
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Yeah! A riding lawnmower. Taking it up a notch. YES!! I know there is plenty in your head. Remember to put the top back on. Don't want anything spilling out. ha! mikey
Comment from ProjectBluebook
Michael your full of surprises. Only you, can be creative, coming up with things others can't. Remind me of a camelion, adjusting shape and form, mimicking it's natural environment. There's nothing bad to say about this piece. Different from the norm, a lawnmover mowing a field of water. I never heard of that one, you got a big imagination and that's a good thing. Yor a creative thinker . . . most of all, I enjoy your poems because they are never boring, interesting. I recently updated my twister poemaiming for perfection. Let me know, if you have an insight or input on new types of poems. Like a bombshell, I think people are running for cover on this twisted prototype poem. They seem, shellshocked or confounded. Well, your style of poetry gave me the idea, it's a loaded bomb! later days, wackydo. I love your poem!
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013
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Michael your full of surprises. Only you, can be creative, coming up with things others can't. Remind me of a camelion, adjusting shape and form, mimicking it's natural environment. There's nothing bad to say about this piece. Different from the norm, a lawnmover mowing a field of water. I never heard of that one, you got a big imagination and that's a good thing. Yor a creative thinker . . . most of all, I enjoy your poems because they are never boring, interesting. I recently updated my twister poemaiming for perfection. Let me know, if you have an insight or input on new types of poems. Like a bombshell, I think people are running for cover on this twisted prototype poem. They seem, shellshocked or confounded. Well, your style of poetry gave me the idea, it's a loaded bomb! later days, wackydo. I love your poem!
Comment Written 24-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013
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When they run for cover you know you are on the right track. Glad you like this. I didn't know where it was going when I started it. Surprised me too. hahaha! mikey
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You probably, got them running for cover, as well. Your climbing the ladder rapidly, your a writing machine, I can't keep up. I just updated my scrabble poem, new variety. Thanks for your time and reply. wackydo
Comment from cinderbella
Funny guy, you are. The poem is hilarious, but you are right, I was too stupid to know it till the end when you told me. I love your writing, when I see your name on something I never know what to expect. One thing you are NOT is predictable. :) Sandra
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013
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Funny guy, you are. The poem is hilarious, but you are right, I was too stupid to know it till the end when you told me. I love your writing, when I see your name on something I never know what to expect. One thing you are NOT is predictable. :) Sandra
Comment Written 24-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013
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Yep. It is all scrambled in there for sure. Glad you liked it. Sometimes I fell a little crazy when I post something but, then I just press post. ha! thank you very much, mikey
Comment from tbacha58
a lawnmower mowing
a field of water balloons
Hello my dear, ok, I had to go to your portfolio read what other reviewed your poem, because I had no idea what you are talking about, I loved all the 11 answers, it was so much,fun with you answering back, did the mower remove your balloon head?.....I enjoyed there joking with you, it shows the beautiful spirit there is on FS. Hugs Glad your head will answer me. xoxoxo
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013
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a lawnmower mowing
a field of water balloons
Hello my dear, ok, I had to go to your portfolio read what other reviewed your poem, because I had no idea what you are talking about, I loved all the 11 answers, it was so much,fun with you answering back, did the mower remove your balloon head?.....I enjoyed there joking with you, it shows the beautiful spirit there is on FS. Hugs Glad your head will answer me. xoxoxo
Comment Written 24-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013
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The good thing is that when it is empty I can fill it back up again hahaha. Sometimes I write and I don't know what will come out! This is just pulling my hair and saying ahhh!!!! Mikey
Comment from country ranch writer
YOU CAN PUT THE TOP OF YOUR HEAD BACK ON IT LOOKS KINDS EMPTY OOOOOOPS DID I SAY THAT!MY MUSE IS TRYING TO GET ME IN TROUBLE AGAIN DAGNABIT.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013
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YOU CAN PUT THE TOP OF YOUR HEAD BACK ON IT LOOKS KINDS EMPTY OOOOOOPS DID I SAY THAT!MY MUSE IS TRYING TO GET ME IN TROUBLE AGAIN DAGNABIT.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013
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hahaha!!!! I think when I opened it up everything leaked out. Well, I wasn't using it anyway!
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LOL
Comment from Patti R.
I love the originality of the image you've now managed to stick in my head! Water balloons busting and bursting and leaving splotches of bright color all over the damn place!
The word sooth: meaning truth or fact, whereas soothe means to calm and reassure. I'm thinking you meant soothe.
Your formatting takes me back to the seventies - not sure why that is. I didn't even write poetry in the 70's, but there is something about your style that means 'freedom' to me. What goes on inside my head is surprisingly chaotic and untethered, too. I imagine it looks like a paper shredder's bin in there.
Patti
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013
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I love the originality of the image you've now managed to stick in my head! Water balloons busting and bursting and leaving splotches of bright color all over the damn place!
The word sooth: meaning truth or fact, whereas soothe means to calm and reassure. I'm thinking you meant soothe.
Your formatting takes me back to the seventies - not sure why that is. I didn't even write poetry in the 70's, but there is something about your style that means 'freedom' to me. What goes on inside my head is surprisingly chaotic and untethered, too. I imagine it looks like a paper shredder's bin in there.
Patti
Comment Written 24-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013
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Oh yeah. sooth sayer. my bad. fixed. I did mean soothe. I think I did pick up the style in the seventies now that you mention it and have always had it ever since. Yep chaotic. I was shocked that I wrote a sonnet or anything formal. hahaha. This is more of a natural form for me. no form!! mikey
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yep, free form, free style and free verse all work for me, too.
P.
Comment from Sasha
This is such an original and unique concept. Not sure which made me giggle more, lifting off the top of your head, or the vivid image of a lawnmower mowing a field of water balloons. Marvelous work with this one, I just love it.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013
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This is such an original and unique concept. Not sure which made me giggle more, lifting off the top of your head, or the vivid image of a lawnmower mowing a field of water balloons. Marvelous work with this one, I just love it.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013
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glad you liked this. I got to the end and thought it pretty strange. ha! thank you kindly, mikey
Comment from ravenblack
Again, it's the age-old poetic wrestle- truth vs. Truth adorned or shaded with art, the wearing of the mask. I love lifting off the top of your head, bold scream- just friggin' look. Of course, all one might see is the waterballoons, the latest image/metaphor...that is the freaking truth. Or maybe isn't. But at least you made them look.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013
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Again, it's the age-old poetic wrestle- truth vs. Truth adorned or shaded with art, the wearing of the mask. I love lifting off the top of your head, bold scream- just friggin' look. Of course, all one might see is the waterballoons, the latest image/metaphor...that is the freaking truth. Or maybe isn't. But at least you made them look.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013
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Yeah. I will settle for that. Making them look. A couple folk want to send out men in white suits. I am thinking lost prom dates from the 70s. I shall direct them to the center of the desert. mikey
Comment from nancy_e_davis
They're coming to take you away! Haha. Michael my goodness where did this idea come from? I would be a bit leary to look in your mind. LOL Hon, just don't use an electric lawnmower, we'd hate to lose you. xxx Nancy
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013
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They're coming to take you away! Haha. Michael my goodness where did this idea come from? I would be a bit leary to look in your mind. LOL Hon, just don't use an electric lawnmower, we'd hate to lose you. xxx Nancy
Comment Written 24-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2013
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Yep. I think a push mower would be safe. ha! I fear it's all weeds anyway! mikey
