Pantoum Collection
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "All Hail, Pantoum!"Poems written using the pantoum form
40 total reviews
Comment from Joy Graham
Hi Tony,
I just checked out your seal of qualiy book. I'm impressed that you went wih pantoums. You do have a way with them. I had to look back for your repeating lines. That's how smooth they are. Congratulations on this seal of quality. I enjoyed all the poems in this book. You are a talented man.
Joy xx
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2019
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Hi Tony,
I just checked out your seal of qualiy book. I'm impressed that you went wih pantoums. You do have a way with them. I had to look back for your repeating lines. That's how smooth they are. Congratulations on this seal of quality. I enjoyed all the poems in this book. You are a talented man.
Joy xx
Comment Written 09-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2019
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Thanks, Joy. It's a while since I last wrote a pantoum. You prompted me to go back and re-read this set that I wrote five years ago. It's an interesting form. Perhaps I should try my hand at one or two new ones. So glad that you enjoyed them. All the best, Tony
Comment from writeapoem
Thanks for the education first time learning about this sort of a poem interesting form and explanation self-explanatory with a good story. All the best and God Bless
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2016
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Thanks for the education first time learning about this sort of a poem interesting form and explanation self-explanatory with a good story. All the best and God Bless
Comment Written 09-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2016
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Hi, writeapoem. This is a form that I was introduced to by FanStory - and I have written several of them. It's quite an appealing format, though a bit like doing a crossword puzzle! The art is, I think, largely bound up in achieving slight shifts in meaning with each repetition.
Comment from Nosha17
An unusual poem written in a style I am unfamiliar with, but it is very effective. Your imagery fits nicely with the picture and your poem rhymes with ease. Well-written.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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An unusual poem written in a style I am unfamiliar with, but it is very effective. Your imagery fits nicely with the picture and your poem rhymes with ease. Well-written.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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Thank you so much for this lovely review, Nosha! Very much appreciated!
Comment from Selina Stambi
Clever - oh, so clever, sir!
The word pictures you create are brilliant and explained it all perfectly.
How on earth did you achieve that effect??
You ARE becoming a master at this, tf.
So very well done! :)
Sonali
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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Clever - oh, so clever, sir!
The word pictures you create are brilliant and explained it all perfectly.
How on earth did you achieve that effect??
You ARE becoming a master at this, tf.
So very well done! :)
Sonali
Comment Written 28-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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Thank you so much for another lovely review, Sonali! You are a tonic for the ego!
Comment from Sally Carter
Well, it seems I am allowed to give you two sixes in quick succession, so here's the second.
This is so clever - not just the technical aspect of the pantoum - but the way you have managed to describe it. Outstanding.
Tucked up within each other's phrase
lines fixed in one climb up a rung
At last the tail engulfs the head
and my efforts at them have certainly caused me to curse.
Very, very well done, Tony. You could almost tempt me to try another, if I weren't ankle deep in a tanka course and already trying to do far too many things. But you never know... This is very appetising.
You are establishing yourself as the FS Pantomeister. Perhaps that line in the poem should have said "pantoumime"?
Best wishes
Sally
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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Well, it seems I am allowed to give you two sixes in quick succession, so here's the second.
This is so clever - not just the technical aspect of the pantoum - but the way you have managed to describe it. Outstanding.
Tucked up within each other's phrase
lines fixed in one climb up a rung
At last the tail engulfs the head
and my efforts at them have certainly caused me to curse.
Very, very well done, Tony. You could almost tempt me to try another, if I weren't ankle deep in a tanka course and already trying to do far too many things. But you never know... This is very appetising.
You are establishing yourself as the FS Pantomeister. Perhaps that line in the poem should have said "pantoumime"?
Best wishes
Sally
Comment Written 28-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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Thank you so much for this lovely review, Sally! Very much appreciated, as are your second cascade of stars! I nearly did write pantoumime for that was the intended pun(rather like Pan pipes entombing!). However, I thought it probably better for the reader to make the connection! I do like 'pantoumeister' - sounds as if I'm flying by the seat of my pants! Not far from the truth, really!
Comment from patsypats
Good write. You have captured added character through your rhyming scheme and the flow is smooth and easy to follow. You display vivid imagery through your word choices and I have no corrections or suggestions:)
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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Good write. You have captured added character through your rhyming scheme and the flow is smooth and easy to follow. You display vivid imagery through your word choices and I have no corrections or suggestions:)
Comment Written 28-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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Thank you so much for this lovely review, Patsypats! Very much appreciated!
Comment from kenni
I think all we need to know in order to write one of these little beauties is here, not to mention a salutation to the form itself. But we'd be locking wits with you for our efforts, too. This work demands six stars. kenni
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2013
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I think all we need to know in order to write one of these little beauties is here, not to mention a salutation to the form itself. But we'd be locking wits with you for our efforts, too. This work demands six stars. kenni
Comment Written 27-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2013
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Very many thanks for your very kind review, Kenni, and for your most generous six-star rating. I am delighted that you enjoyed it and flattered by your fulsome praise!
Comment from Debra White
Hi :)
This is so cleverly done and it definitely worked for me!
I've read a few pantoums and I'm always in awe - this is no exception, I wouldn't know where to start...
I thoroughly enjoyed this and thought that your presentation was also outstanding. Thanks for sharing :) Kindest regards, Debra
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2013
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Hi :)
This is so cleverly done and it definitely worked for me!
I've read a few pantoums and I'm always in awe - this is no exception, I wouldn't know where to start...
I thoroughly enjoyed this and thought that your presentation was also outstanding. Thanks for sharing :) Kindest regards, Debra
Comment Written 27-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2013
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Very many thanks for your very kind review, Debra, and for your most generous six-star rating. I am delighted that you enjoyed it and flattered by your fulsome praise!
Comment from adewpearl
solid use of abab rhyming
excellent use of the pantoum format of repeated lines
nice touches of assonance and alliteration
very effective humor in explaining the way this complex form is composed :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2013
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solid use of abab rhyming
excellent use of the pantoum format of repeated lines
nice touches of assonance and alliteration
very effective humor in explaining the way this complex form is composed :-) Brooke
Comment Written 27-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2013
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Many thanks for your review and comments, Brooke. I appreciate your encouragement.
Comment from michaelcahill
dare I say genius? I cannot believe how clever this is. I barely understand the form. you understand it so well that you make fun of it. hahaha. plus it is great fun and I get how it works now. it makes more sense in your poem than it does in the mind numbing notes. Malay malaise. love it! mikey
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2013
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dare I say genius? I cannot believe how clever this is. I barely understand the form. you understand it so well that you make fun of it. hahaha. plus it is great fun and I get how it works now. it makes more sense in your poem than it does in the mind numbing notes. Malay malaise. love it! mikey
Comment Written 27-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2013
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Very many thanks for your very kind review, Mikey, and for your generous star rating. I am delighted that you enjoyed this one and once again, I am flattered by your fulsome praise!
