To Cherish Thorns
Viewing comments for Chapter 50 "Secret Worth"Free Verse Poetry
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Comment from Sankey
What's that about kissing the rim of the urinal?? Complex!! Are we talking about a corpse open in a coffin for examination? This was something different but of course nothing new with you huh!
No Spags.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2013
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What's that about kissing the rim of the urinal?? Complex!! Are we talking about a corpse open in a coffin for examination? This was something different but of course nothing new with you huh!
No Spags.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2013
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Another oldie but strangy. Hahaha.
Comment from allborn66
This is a wonderful poem. The word choice is strong. The form enhances the piece. You communicated your theme well. Barbara
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013
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This is a wonderful poem. The word choice is strong. The form enhances the piece. You communicated your theme well. Barbara
Comment Written 19-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013
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Really excellent review. I am so pleased. Thank you very kindly. warmest regards, mikey
Comment from Darkhorse555
dressed in the colour of night falling down your words blue awakening upon the senses oh but mikey is flowing beautiful piece dear friend
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2013
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dressed in the colour of night falling down your words blue awakening upon the senses oh but mikey is flowing beautiful piece dear friend
Comment Written 17-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2013
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Ha! Was just reading your latest piece about friendship. The compliments and insights are mostly rewarding to hear. Glad you liked this piece. mikey
Comment from krys123
When they realize their sleight? What exactly does this mean? For want of a spoon? ??? And this too has a meaning?
When you talk about no doors opened and or doors closed all I was thinking of is a revolving door. Thank you for sharing this poem with fans, myself and other readers/writers. I found your poem bits and pieces of hypothetical thought. Premises to prophetic ideas and philosophic gestures to which you answer your own question. Your last first talks about a person's death and not to hear one's eulogy for the answers to his realization that any of his lies were answered for his forgiveness. You may you have many strange thoughts and ideas and philosophies in trying to propose them in one piece and to corral them to answer one of many questions that you asked and answered. I believe this would need some work to tie all in your ideas and philosophies so that one common denominator would be answered. Not bad on the philosophical thoughts rendered. You have a good running gob bless.
AK
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2013
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When they realize their sleight? What exactly does this mean? For want of a spoon? ??? And this too has a meaning?
When you talk about no doors opened and or doors closed all I was thinking of is a revolving door. Thank you for sharing this poem with fans, myself and other readers/writers. I found your poem bits and pieces of hypothetical thought. Premises to prophetic ideas and philosophic gestures to which you answer your own question. Your last first talks about a person's death and not to hear one's eulogy for the answers to his realization that any of his lies were answered for his forgiveness. You may you have many strange thoughts and ideas and philosophies in trying to propose them in one piece and to corral them to answer one of many questions that you asked and answered. I believe this would need some work to tie all in your ideas and philosophies so that one common denominator would be answered. Not bad on the philosophical thoughts rendered. You have a good running gob bless.
AK
Comment Written 17-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2013
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He is referring to being disregarded while alive and then having those same people speak kindly of him at his funeral. A bitter sarcastic remark really. Now that I am dead they will be sorry that they ignored me. How inadequate that they try to make up for disregarding me when it mattered. Or slighting him.
The spoon reference is a bit vague I admit. I am trying to say that had he done something about his failures other than sit there he wouldn't be in the state he is in. The spoon is there to consume what he has become when he should have used it to consume the reasons for being that way.
As I explain I realize how difficult it might be to read all of that into it. Your points are well taken, I believe. Sometimes when one writes in a quick flow like this it is not going to be clear to the reader like it is to the writer. But, as you point out it is a bit much to expect everyone to be mind readers! Perhaps in a few days I will take a look at it again as you suggest and attempt to tie it together more effectively and make sure that what I am saying is more clear to the reader. Once again some excellent thoughts and suggestions. I will consider what you said quite seriously. Thank you kindly, mike
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Thank you for the up-and-coming understanding of this poem I appreciate you coming together on this with me and you are welcome.
Comment from cinderbella
This is both insightful, and very amusing at times. You, my friend, have quite an imagination, and this poem is very creative indeed.
"you lick the urinal rim" ha ha ha
I loved these lines:
"a condolence by its very nature only brings solace to the messenger"
"endless journey imagined rocked in the cradle of could've been"
The ending is perfect. :) Sandra
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2013
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This is both insightful, and very amusing at times. You, my friend, have quite an imagination, and this poem is very creative indeed.
"you lick the urinal rim" ha ha ha
I loved these lines:
"a condolence by its very nature only brings solace to the messenger"
"endless journey imagined rocked in the cradle of could've been"
The ending is perfect. :) Sandra
Comment Written 17-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2013
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Glad you liked it. Yep, a sour taste indeed if that is the way to get rid of it! Glad you liked the ending though I took a while to get there. much thanks, mikey
Comment from nelliesellie
Most heroes are accidental. They do the deed while gripped in fear. The memory of the fear makes the newly labeled heroes feel like cowards. We do not want to correct the many new fans. We usually just have to wait for another hero to come along. Good work.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2013
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Most heroes are accidental. They do the deed while gripped in fear. The memory of the fear makes the newly labeled heroes feel like cowards. We do not want to correct the many new fans. We usually just have to wait for another hero to come along. Good work.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2013
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That is a very astute observation right there. Wonderful comments and insights. so very appreciated, mike
Comment from tbacha58
than a silent world of possibility
where no door is opened
yet, no door is closed
and endless journey imagined
rocked in the cradle of could've been?
Excellent poem, amazing connected phrases that have very deep meanings. The English is so strong and perfect. The subject to is hurtful, but put with much elegance. Great job done here Mike. Hugs Terry
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2013
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than a silent world of possibility
where no door is opened
yet, no door is closed
and endless journey imagined
rocked in the cradle of could've been?
Excellent poem, amazing connected phrases that have very deep meanings. The English is so strong and perfect. The subject to is hurtful, but put with much elegance. Great job done here Mike. Hugs Terry
Comment Written 17-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2013
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So pleased with your wonderful and review and keen insights. Delighted that you liked this. Not many take the time with a longer piece so, I appreciate it so much. mikey
Comment from dmt1967
This is a well written poem a bit long winded and confusing for me but well written all the same I like the after all that about thinking of a kiss thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2013
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This is a well written poem a bit long winded and confusing for me but well written all the same I like the after all that about thinking of a kiss thank you for sharing
Comment Written 17-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2013
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Yes, I do have a tendency to ramble. Ha! Glad you found something of interest, mike
Comment from CR Delport
This makes me think. How many people live their lives striving for validation. Most of us do in one way or another. Thanks for sharing another well written poem.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2013
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This makes me think. How many people live their lives striving for validation. Most of us do in one way or another. Thanks for sharing another well written poem.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2013
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Yes, so true. Even here it tends to overshadow the real purpose. Interesting insights. thank you, mike
Comment from country ranch writer
How do you wanted to be remembered when you leave this earth
What do you think your life is really worth what have you accomplished in your life ,are you proud,loving,caring sharing, kind, considerate and above all understanding. can you define love, devotion,emotion ,and when all is said and done is a kiss in order for the one you love dearly
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2013
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How do you wanted to be remembered when you leave this earth
What do you think your life is really worth what have you accomplished in your life ,are you proud,loving,caring sharing, kind, considerate and above all understanding. can you define love, devotion,emotion ,and when all is said and done is a kiss in order for the one you love dearly
Comment Written 17-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2013
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Yes, indeed. Beautifully put. Wonderful insightful comments as always. Thank you kindly. mike
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welcome
