Little Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 105 "Hold Crutch!"Small and Specialty Poems
10 total reviews
Comment from marycec
Well done in introducing a new form A twelve line exhortation! It is quite a simple form really once you read it with increasing and decreasing syllables.I liked, 'where strength may lack, support her back.' Hope she is going from strength to strength.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013
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Well done in introducing a new form A twelve line exhortation! It is quite a simple form really once you read it with increasing and decreasing syllables.I liked, 'where strength may lack, support her back.' Hope she is going from strength to strength.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013
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Thank you Mary for the review, glad you like the form. Appreciate the well wishes.
Comment from Nottoway
I really enjoyed this poem and the message of want and hope. I don't think I had ever seen a poem like this but I liked the exhortation message it presented so well.
Continued best regards for as much healing and comfort as possible for your love.
Leroy
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013
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I really enjoyed this poem and the message of want and hope. I don't think I had ever seen a poem like this but I liked the exhortation message it presented so well.
Continued best regards for as much healing and comfort as possible for your love.
Leroy
Comment Written 19-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013
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Thank you very much Leroy, for the good review and encouraging words.
Comment from RGstar
Great stuff. Your own seal on this one. That is what I like to see.
I smiled all the way through.
Even without an explanation of the structure, it felt right. Mo forced rhyming or any other forced thing.
Well done,
Rgstar
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2013
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Great stuff. Your own seal on this one. That is what I like to see.
I smiled all the way through.
Even without an explanation of the structure, it felt right. Mo forced rhyming or any other forced thing.
Well done,
Rgstar
Comment Written 17-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2013
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Thank you RGstar, appreciate the input.
Comment from Selina Stambi
So, soon she may again cavort
On healthy legs,
This husband begs. ... such beautiful, passionate devotion alone, demands an entire galaxy of stars.
Hold Crutch! Great "bread" for the poetry sandwich.
A very cleverly wrought form - I salute you sir!
p.s. She's been in my daily prayers - as have you, the caregiver. So delighted to know she's making progress.
xxx :)
s
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2013
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So, soon she may again cavort
On healthy legs,
This husband begs. ... such beautiful, passionate devotion alone, demands an entire galaxy of stars.
Hold Crutch! Great "bread" for the poetry sandwich.
A very cleverly wrought form - I salute you sir!
p.s. She's been in my daily prayers - as have you, the caregiver. So delighted to know she's making progress.
xxx :)
s
Comment Written 17-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2013
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Thank You Sonali. I appreciate the stars and the prayers.
Comment from Sueellen11
How is your lovely wife going hope she is doing well and recovering well,,, this is an interesting poetry style you have created,, I will give it a go,, blessings to you both,,,sueellen
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2013
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How is your lovely wife going hope she is doing well and recovering well,,, this is an interesting poetry style you have created,, I will give it a go,, blessings to you both,,,sueellen
Comment Written 17-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2013
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Thank you Sueellen. She is progressing well. Yes, please try one.
Comment from sunnilicious
That doesn't seem so long. It's half the time of a broken bone. It'll speed by y'all. Good lyrical flow of rhythm and rhymes. Good visual imagery. Excellent work.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2013
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That doesn't seem so long. It's half the time of a broken bone. It'll speed by y'all. Good lyrical flow of rhythm and rhymes. Good visual imagery. Excellent work.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2013
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Thanks sunnilicious. 3 months for full recovery. Lots ot Physical therapy ahead after the three weeks on crutches. Yes we will get through it.
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Have a goodnight :)
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
An impressive name and style of poetry.
A well written and supportive poem for a loved one.
Good use of rhyme within the stated style and a great picture and presentation.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2013
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An impressive name and style of poetry.
A well written and supportive poem for a loved one.
Good use of rhyme within the stated style and a great picture and presentation.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2013
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Thank you Shirley. Glad you liked it.
Comment from Preston McWhorter
Hi, Treischel,
This is excellent poetry. Although there are some really complicated structural requirements which you as a master craftsman would understand the usefulness of all I can really evaluate is the rhyme and the flow which are both excellent. Although the language is pretty pedestrian feelings you have for your wife shine through. My best wishes to her for a speedy recovery.
Preston
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2013
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Hi, Treischel,
This is excellent poetry. Although there are some really complicated structural requirements which you as a master craftsman would understand the usefulness of all I can really evaluate is the rhyme and the flow which are both excellent. Although the language is pretty pedestrian feelings you have for your wife shine through. My best wishes to her for a speedy recovery.
Preston
Comment Written 16-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2013
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Thanks you Preston. I appreciate that.
Comment from Capricorn30
A well-penned get-well message;
Support is not only gained from crutches, but also the great love shared between two individuals;
"Hold Crutch!"--a bit of humor to aid an ailing lady.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2013
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A well-penned get-well message;
Support is not only gained from crutches, but also the great love shared between two individuals;
"Hold Crutch!"--a bit of humor to aid an ailing lady.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2013
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Thank you Margaret, yes, I think So too.
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Dear Tom,
Even in crutches her healing is well under way. I was in a wheel chair for what seemed like forever....but healing is always there under the cover of any tools she needs to use.
Great little poem that made me smile as well.
Keep healing hugs & smiles....laughter was a great tool I used:)
Thanks for sharing this well penned post.
Maureen
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2013
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Dear Tom,
Even in crutches her healing is well under way. I was in a wheel chair for what seemed like forever....but healing is always there under the cover of any tools she needs to use.
Great little poem that made me smile as well.
Keep healing hugs & smiles....laughter was a great tool I used:)
Thanks for sharing this well penned post.
Maureen
Comment Written 16-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2013
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Thank you Maureen. You are alway so uplifting. I appreciate it.
