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Comment from adewpearl
Each stanza is in good syllable count for the cinquain
I very much like your optional use of rhyming
such celebration in the story you tell - I am so happy for both of you :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2013
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Each stanza is in good syllable count for the cinquain
I very much like your optional use of rhyming
such celebration in the story you tell - I am so happy for both of you :-) Brooke
Comment Written 12-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2013
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Thank you Brooke. I appreciate your support.
Comment from Gungalo
And if
it all goes well,
she can finally say goodbye
to all her years of chronic hell,
I'll cry.
Darn tootin' you will and loud and clear too. It is hoped that it will do just that eh Tom? Gosh I readlly hope it does.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
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And if
it all goes well,
she can finally say goodbye
to all her years of chronic hell,
I'll cry.
Darn tootin' you will and loud and clear too. It is hoped that it will do just that eh Tom? Gosh I readlly hope it does.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
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Thank you Gungalo. Yes, me too. You are so nice!
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Smiling on both of you.
Comment from Princesseunice
Not a cry baby i declare.
Good Cinq and well structured.
Followed the rules well.
All will go well in Jesus name.
Here's a tissue (winks)
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
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Not a cry baby i declare.
Good Cinq and well structured.
Followed the rules well.
All will go well in Jesus name.
Here's a tissue (winks)
Comment Written 11-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
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Thank you Princessunice. smiles!
Comment from vapros
They are all here, the three cinquains you promised, to tell a story of your wife's successful treatment by doctors. In the weird style required, you have written well, with one glitch that I noticed. I'm sure you intended to write 'applause' rather than 'applaud'. Good Work.
v
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
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They are all here, the three cinquains you promised, to tell a story of your wife's successful treatment by doctors. In the weird style required, you have written well, with one glitch that I noticed. I'm sure you intended to write 'applause' rather than 'applaud'. Good Work.
v
Comment Written 11-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
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Thank you Vapros. Nope. I meant it to rhyme with Awed and God.
Comment from Leineco
A resounding cry of joy and hope. An exhalation to blessed resolution that may bequeath relief for your beloved wife. And all wrapped up with the pretty bow, of tightly controlled cinquain prose.
Nicely done :-)
[heartfelt wishes for fruition]
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
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A resounding cry of joy and hope. An exhalation to blessed resolution that may bequeath relief for your beloved wife. And all wrapped up with the pretty bow, of tightly controlled cinquain prose.
Nicely done :-)
[heartfelt wishes for fruition]
Comment Written 11-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
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Thank you so much Leineco.
Comment from Cookie333
The reader has a sense of the emotion you feel, and how very much you care for her my friend. Nice Cinquains, rhymes flow very well, and I thank you for sharing this piece of yourself with us,
karen
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
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The reader has a sense of the emotion you feel, and how very much you care for her my friend. Nice Cinquains, rhymes flow very well, and I thank you for sharing this piece of yourself with us,
karen
Comment Written 11-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
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Thank you Karen, I appreciate you comments.
Comment from marycec
Such a joy filled cinquain! Thank you for the notes by the way.you have carried out the demands of the form perfectly.This flows nicely and with positive energy.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
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Such a joy filled cinquain! Thank you for the notes by the way.you have carried out the demands of the form perfectly.This flows nicely and with positive energy.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2013
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Thank you Mary.
Comment from Selina Stambi
Go ahead and cry, Tom - it takes a REAL man to be able to shed tears, and I applaud you.
I'll cry with you. So happy for you. Praise God! :)
xxx
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2013
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Go ahead and cry, Tom - it takes a REAL man to be able to shed tears, and I applaud you.
I'll cry with you. So happy for you. Praise God! :)
xxx
Comment Written 10-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2013
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Thank you Sonali. Wonderful words of encouragement.
Comment from amanda98653
A beautiful poem you've written there, Treischel.
I hope all is well now. Rest is crucial. My parents suffer from back pain. It's hard for them to do a lot of things.
I like the positivity that's shown throughout the poem.
"
Oh Joy!
Awake and fine
Skills that doctors employ
With just a touch of the Divine
She's mine! "
of happiness and joy.
Best wishes to you and your wife
Amanda
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2013
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A beautiful poem you've written there, Treischel.
I hope all is well now. Rest is crucial. My parents suffer from back pain. It's hard for them to do a lot of things.
I like the positivity that's shown throughout the poem.
"
Oh Joy!
Awake and fine
Skills that doctors employ
With just a touch of the Divine
She's mine! "
of happiness and joy.
Best wishes to you and your wife
Amanda
Comment Written 10-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2013
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Thank you Amanda. I appreciate those best wishes greatly.
Comment from Sueellen11
I do hope your wife is recovering well,,, and her pain is easing,,,great write,,,I love the chinquains,,, my friend,, is med-I -cine and fin-al-ly three syllables each,,, ,,, easy fixed,,,great write,,,my best wishes to your wife,,,blessings sueellen
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2013
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I do hope your wife is recovering well,,, and her pain is easing,,,great write,,,I love the chinquains,,, my friend,, is med-I -cine and fin-al-ly three syllables each,,, ,,, easy fixed,,,great write,,,my best wishes to your wife,,,blessings sueellen
Comment Written 10-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2013
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Thank you Sueellen. Got it.
