Comment from Sararb

Excellent

A very nice job with the 3-5-5 poem. Cultured path around the pond. A very beautiful creation of architect. I love the Japanese garden. Sara :)

 Comment Written 18-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 18-Sep-2013

Thank you Sara.

Comment from Capricorn30

Excellent

A well-penned water haiku;
Nice alliteration of "path"; "pond"; "pure";
Always a serene setting when water is present--therapeutic when we are along-side of it and in it.

 Comment Written 18-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 18-Sep-2013

Thank you Margaret. Yes, water is so soothing to me too.

Comment from robina1978

Excellent

Very nice photo to complement your poem. And a little Haiku the way it should be. Beautiful, I loved it. Thanks for sharing with us all.

 Comment Written 18-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 18-Sep-2013

Thank you Ine, so glad you enjoyed it.

reply by robina1978 on 18-Sep-2013

welcome, Ine

Comment from Hawaiian Mermaid

Excellent

Aloha Treischel,
You are so right is a delight. You took the perfect photo to go with the words. Thank you for sharing.
Aloha, Ginger
Hawaiian Mermaid

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 17-Sep-2013

Thank you Ginger, always happy to share.

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

This place is exceptionally lovely, Mr. 'T'...Looks like a place I'd enjoy walking around in for a few hours. Is this in Minnesota somewhere? Como Park, it does sound familiar.


Anyhow, very beautifully written haiku.

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 17-Sep-2013

Thank you Dean. Yes, is St. Paul, Minnesota. I hope you get o see it some time.

reply by Dean Kuch on 17-Sep-2013

Yes, I would really love to, it looks gorgeous!

Comment from Shirley E Kennedy

Excellent

Very thoughtful and well expressed Haiku poem.
The 3--3 -5 format adheres to the syllble coiunt allowed for a modern Haiku poem.
A very nice picture which shows what the poem is about and so reinforces the poetry.

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 17-Sep-2013

Thank you Shirley. I appreciate the comments.

Comment from Preston McWhorter

Excellent

Hi, Treischel,
This is excellent haiku. It meets the form's requirements. It expresses a coherent thought in figurative language. I enjoyed reading this.
Preston

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 17-Sep-2013

Thank you Preston..

Comment from sunnilicious

Excellent

Great photograph. Nice form. The word 'cultured' makes me wonder if there is a better work for the first line. Expressive satori line. Good work.

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 17-Sep-2013

Thank you Sunni.

Comment from baustian64

Excellent

The picture you have picked with your poem fits so well. A small pond can be so much fun to look at. This is very well done.

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 17-Sep-2013

Thank you baustian64.

Comment from Nuad1

Excellent

I do so like Haiku because I love works about nature; I am always in awe of poets who can really get a vision across in minimal syllables. Good job.

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 Comment Written 17-Sep-2013

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reply by the author on 17-Sep-2013

Thank you Nuad1. I appreciate the comments and compliment.