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Viewing comments for Chapter 92 "Blessed by Beauty"
Small and Specialty Poems

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Comment from Selina Stambi
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Fine flowers festoon ... ah .. this is a Treischel line to be sure!

Dear author himself, I love the picture you took - Como Park and the Froggie watering place seems to be a personal delight...

Tom, Tom (the piper's son!) ... I'm trying so hard to keep up with reviewing your beauties!

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2013


reply by the author on 17-Sep-2013
    Thank you Sonali. Appreciate that very much.
Comment from 9999pool
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Along this beautiful filled with flowers and stones as well as other bits of nature, we can smell the fragrance each flower beams to us.
Their welcome fragrance guide our nostrils to discovering nature's secret of beauty and awe.
Let us walk through this flower garden path to know how lucky we were that nature had open her summer costume for us to admire.
Great write and penned well this reversed Rhyming Quatrains write.
Cheerio, Rithcie. :))

 Comment Written 16-Sep-2013


reply by the author on 16-Sep-2013
    Thank you Ritchie,
Comment from Hawaiian Mermaid
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Aloha Treischel,
You are truly blessed with beauty and the ability to appreciate it. I love your photography as much as the inspirational words.
Have a blessed day.
Aloha, Ginger
Hawaiian Mermaid

 Comment Written 16-Sep-2013


reply by the author on 16-Sep-2013
    Thank you Ginger. You are so sweet.
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
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A lovely presentation and stunning picture.
Your chosen style and descriptive words blend perfectly together.
A very effective and clever style you have devised here.

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2013


reply by the author on 15-Sep-2013
    Thank you. Just experimenting a bit.
Comment from Preston McWhorter
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Hi, Treischel,
This an excellent poem with good,rhyme meter and figurative language and imagery. I enjoyed reading this one. It also has good unconventional visually appealing structure.
Preston

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2013


reply by the author on 15-Sep-2013
    Thanks Preston.
Comment from STEPHEN A CARTER
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Fine flowers festoon, 'f' allits
And give off perfume,
When one walks the fine floral trail, "
So blessed by bright beauty's detail. 'b's

Can be no travail,
Where colors unveil,
The essence of joy they assume LOVE...essence of joy
As they show off summer's costume. SHOE OFF=brilliant

Experimenting again are you? Well done.

Regards:

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2013


reply by the author on 15-Sep-2013
    Thank you Stephen. Yup, just seeing what works.
Comment from Capricorn30
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Excellent!
Nice alliteration incorporated into the first stanza: I so enjoy "Fine flowers festoon";
"summer's costume"--indeed the season displays her finest.
A lovely illustration also.

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2013


reply by the author on 15-Sep-2013
    Thank you Margaret. I appreciate your comments after another reviewer thought my rhyming was stilted and forced.
reply by Capricorn30 on 15-Sep-2013
    "stilted and forced"--WHAT?!
    I see nothing of this in your writing, how can writing about nature--first and foremost, be forced?
    I don't see any "force" in your writings--I see lovely poems which easily flow from your thoughts. Is this individual a new member? Sometimes newcomers think they already quite experienced.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2013
    No, he is a playwrite and considers himself a literary critic.
reply by Capricorn30 on 15-Sep-2013
    Would you happen to be referring to "Ekim77"? I find he is very harsh, and doesn't use much tact. He feels that my latest writing incorporates too many adjectives--well, you know what--I told him I have a fondness for adjectives, but I used tact.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2013
    You are right on target.
Comment from Ekim777
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Often I think, rhymes are overrated especially when rhythm and cadence is sacrificed to them. When they come naturally they can be fine otherwise they might be forced and spurious. Still our author does capture something of nature's beauty. It seems a picture does tell a thousand words. Although our poet does handle his words niftily enough -Ekim777

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2013


reply by the author on 15-Sep-2013
    Thanks Ekim777 for the review and appreciating the picture.