Ride of The Fairy Queen
Beauty she creates on the trail19 total reviews
Comment from pattipac
Your excellent worded optimistic poem about a Fairy Queen riding a unicorn across the sky, spreading serenity and joyfulness to all who catch a glimpse of her is lovely.
Perfect rhyme-scheme makes your poem flow. Good to hear from you, sorry I'm all out of sixes or I would place one on your poem. Blessings.
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Your excellent worded optimistic poem about a Fairy Queen riding a unicorn across the sky, spreading serenity and joyfulness to all who catch a glimpse of her is lovely.
Perfect rhyme-scheme makes your poem flow. Good to hear from you, sorry I'm all out of sixes or I would place one on your poem. Blessings.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2013
Comment from Righteous Riter
The writer stays consistent with the abcb rhyme scheme. This piece has good solid rhyming accompanied by a smooth flow. The photo grabs my attention from the beginning but the words hold it to the end. Good job.
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The writer stays consistent with the abcb rhyme scheme. This piece has good solid rhyming accompanied by a smooth flow. The photo grabs my attention from the beginning but the words hold it to the end. Good job.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2013
Comment from Zue65
Oh my I love the pictures of Fairies and unicorns too, it suddenly transport to a world of beauty untouched by evil minds. We all want to be there and take our time way from the madding crowd in the world of the humans. Your poem is like and ode to that beauty painted in the photo, I just hope the art work is larger so we can appreciate the details more. But anyway your poem painted it all effectively so your verses are more than enough for me, to bask in the glory of my dreamworld too. God bless, well done.
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Oh my I love the pictures of Fairies and unicorns too, it suddenly transport to a world of beauty untouched by evil minds. We all want to be there and take our time way from the madding crowd in the world of the humans. Your poem is like and ode to that beauty painted in the photo, I just hope the art work is larger so we can appreciate the details more. But anyway your poem painted it all effectively so your verses are more than enough for me, to bask in the glory of my dreamworld too. God bless, well done.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2013
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, helvi, you did an excellent job writing this beautiful poem about the fairy that sows seeds of hope and beauty on her unicorn ride. i enjoyed reading it
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this is very well written, helvi, you did an excellent job writing this beautiful poem about the fairy that sows seeds of hope and beauty on her unicorn ride. i enjoyed reading it
Comment Written 13-Aug-2013
Comment from Jewell McChesney
This is absolutely beautiful just like all of your work! I always look forward to seeing what you create and this was no disappointment! What a delightful poem this is. You always have a way of weeding a magical story within the lines of well written poetry. I wish I could see the picture but right now I cannot for I am using my cell phone and its not showing up.
I think this would make an adorable children's book Suitable to an older child who enjoys fantasy. How delightful!
love ya,
Jj
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This is absolutely beautiful just like all of your work! I always look forward to seeing what you create and this was no disappointment! What a delightful poem this is. You always have a way of weeding a magical story within the lines of well written poetry. I wish I could see the picture but right now I cannot for I am using my cell phone and its not showing up.
I think this would make an adorable children's book Suitable to an older child who enjoys fantasy. How delightful!
love ya,
Jj
Comment Written 13-Aug-2013
Comment from JB Lynn
"Enjoy the feelings that might be/Before the moment[']s by" - Definitely my favorite two lines in this poem...but it was SO hard to choose!
"That far [too] soon rescind"
I like the imagery in the last stanza, but your second-to-last stanza feels more like the ending. As it stands, I kind of feel like more should follow your last stanza.
I adore unicorns - my current novel is all about them - and I know your piece is about a fairy queen, but the image of the unicorn caught my attention. I'm SO glad I read your poem. This is beautiful and I think children both young and old would enjoy it. I know I'll have sweet dreams tonight, thanks to you.
Thank you for sharing.
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"Enjoy the feelings that might be/Before the moment[']s by" - Definitely my favorite two lines in this poem...but it was SO hard to choose!
"That far [too] soon rescind"
I like the imagery in the last stanza, but your second-to-last stanza feels more like the ending. As it stands, I kind of feel like more should follow your last stanza.
I adore unicorns - my current novel is all about them - and I know your piece is about a fairy queen, but the image of the unicorn caught my attention. I'm SO glad I read your poem. This is beautiful and I think children both young and old would enjoy it. I know I'll have sweet dreams tonight, thanks to you.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2013
Comment from Evelyn Fort Stewart
Well, I'd say this is an awesome picture and an awesome poem. I'm not a poet so I know i couldn't do the picture justice. Good job. God loves you and so do I,.
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Well, I'd say this is an awesome picture and an awesome poem. I'm not a poet so I know i couldn't do the picture justice. Good job. God loves you and so do I,.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2013
Comment from Black_Oxygen
This poetry is very well written; you haven't lost a step.
The words are descriptive and transport the reader to a
fantastic scene. The rhymes are selected and used nicely.
The reader-friendly language makes it easy to comprehend.
The attached painting is a giant mirror that reflects the
message. Thank You for your creation.
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This poetry is very well written; you haven't lost a step.
The words are descriptive and transport the reader to a
fantastic scene. The rhymes are selected and used nicely.
The reader-friendly language makes it easy to comprehend.
The attached painting is a giant mirror that reflects the
message. Thank You for your creation.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2013
Comment from Darkhorse555
such a beautiful picture in a puff of air under the golden sun a beauty like magic penned in silken colours beautiful piece
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2013
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such a beautiful picture in a puff of air under the golden sun a beauty like magic penned in silken colours beautiful piece
Comment Written 11-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2013
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Hi Darkhorse,
Love the words you used to describe my poem. Thank you for the lovely compliments. SO glad you enjoyed it! :o) Helvi
Comment from adewpearl
Gorgeous illustration :-) I always love her art
excellent use of abcb rhyming
lovely alliteration in beneath bright beams
vivid and pleasing descriptive detail
excellent use of enjambment to keep your thoughts flowing from line to line
delightful use of personification
a wonderfully whimsical and upbeat poem, my friend - one I will share with my fairy-loving daughter, and for that, you get a sixth star :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2013
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Gorgeous illustration :-) I always love her art
excellent use of abcb rhyming
lovely alliteration in beneath bright beams
vivid and pleasing descriptive detail
excellent use of enjambment to keep your thoughts flowing from line to line
delightful use of personification
a wonderfully whimsical and upbeat poem, my friend - one I will share with my fairy-loving daughter, and for that, you get a sixth star :-) Brooke
Comment Written 11-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2013
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Hi Brooke,
To receive a review like this from someome I think So highly of as a poet is the highest honor I could have received.
You definitely caused my heart to smile! I hope your daughter
enjoys the poem just as much. Thank you SO much My Friend!
:o) Helvi
