Little Poems
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Comment from Sueellen11
My friend I so like this poetry style, you wrote your poem to perfection, I do not pay golf, but I know what your are saying about putts and such, I enjoyed reading about your golf, excellent write, excellent rhyming, rhythm and flow, imagery of your putting and slicing were great, blessings, sueellen
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2013
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My friend I so like this poetry style, you wrote your poem to perfection, I do not pay golf, but I know what your are saying about putts and such, I enjoyed reading about your golf, excellent write, excellent rhyming, rhythm and flow, imagery of your putting and slicing were great, blessings, sueellen
Comment Written 25-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2013
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Thank you Sueellen11. I am very pleased that even a non-golfer could appreciate this poem. You make me smile.
Comment from adewpearl
Nice illustration/presentation of your poem
strong use of abab rhyming
good alliteration in strokes the small/swing
and in flew and fell
good use of the repeating lines in characteristic pantoum format
traditionally in the closing you reverse the order of the lines left over from stanza one so that the poem begins and ends with the same line
Brooke :-)
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2013
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Nice illustration/presentation of your poem
strong use of abab rhyming
good alliteration in strokes the small/swing
and in flew and fell
good use of the repeating lines in characteristic pantoum format
traditionally in the closing you reverse the order of the lines left over from stanza one so that the poem begins and ends with the same line
Brooke :-)
Comment Written 24-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2013
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Thank you Brooke. OK I'll keep that in mind. It didn't say that in Poetry Dances description, but now I see it did do it in the examples.
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many Poetry Dances explanations are woefully incomplete
Comment from vapros
Well done. That's a good up-and-down. You have told an interesting tale in the four stanzas of your pantoum. To me, it's a weird assignment, but you have handled it very well. Never up, never in.
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reply by the author on 23-Aug-2013
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Well done. That's a good up-and-down. You have told an interesting tale in the four stanzas of your pantoum. To me, it's a weird assignment, but you have handled it very well. Never up, never in.
v
Comment Written 23-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2013
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Thank you vapros. Spoken like a fellow golfer.
Comment from AudreyRose
You did a great job, the beat was very specific and the rhymes as well. You stuck to the structure and provided a wonderful poem.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2013
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You did a great job, the beat was very specific and the rhymes as well. You stuck to the structure and provided a wonderful poem.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2013
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Thank you very much Audrey.
Comment from Caressa_08
Even though, I have never visited a golf course, as one of my favorite sayings, when I'm not feeling well is I'm not up to par, though, really doesn't have anything to do with golf... So anyways, your poem was an interesting read, golfer or not..It was up to par!
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2013
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Even though, I have never visited a golf course, as one of my favorite sayings, when I'm not feeling well is I'm not up to par, though, really doesn't have anything to do with golf... So anyways, your poem was an interesting read, golfer or not..It was up to par!
Comment Written 12-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2013
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Thank you Caressa.
Comment from onkughosh19
As expected another wonderful write from you...his time on something completely different.The first para of this poem '"He clearly strokes the small white orb...........In curving arc,it flew and fell."is beautiful as well as sensuous.
Your description of the game imparts a soft touch just like the game is played.
A lovely write and a beautiful read.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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As expected another wonderful write from you...his time on something completely different.The first para of this poem '"He clearly strokes the small white orb...........In curving arc,it flew and fell."is beautiful as well as sensuous.
Your description of the game imparts a soft touch just like the game is played.
A lovely write and a beautiful read.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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Thank you so much onkughosh. I appreciate the review and compliments.
Comment from Supe
Thank you for sharing your knowledge of a pantoum. I had no idea. Nice job on this poem and the game of golf. I have to differ with you on a typical hole a par 4. lol I am usually running around the 6-7 mark. Once a week isn't enough obviously. Because I golf I followed this through every stanza.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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Thank you for sharing your knowledge of a pantoum. I had no idea. Nice job on this poem and the game of golf. I have to differ with you on a typical hole a par 4. lol I am usually running around the 6-7 mark. Once a week isn't enough obviously. Because I golf I followed this through every stanza.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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Thanks sup. I just meant that most of the 18 holes are par 4, not that I typically shot par. I more like you stated an am happy if I shoot bogy golf.
Comment from Stephen Wolff
A well written piece which manages to communicate some of the attraction of golf even to me, who has never swung a club. I quite like watching it on television though! You use the poetic form very well and there's no hint of shoehorning your ideas in to make them fit. I find your phrase "Imparting power balls absorb" somewhat troublesome though as what force it absorbs does not convey it to where the golfer hopes it will land.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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A well written piece which manages to communicate some of the attraction of golf even to me, who has never swung a club. I quite like watching it on television though! You use the poetic form very well and there's no hint of shoehorning your ideas in to make them fit. I find your phrase "Imparting power balls absorb" somewhat troublesome though as what force it absorbs does not convey it to where the golfer hopes it will land.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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Thanks Stephen. I struggled with that myself, majestic you think of a lottery ticket, huh. But, I considered it and decided ghat the words conveyed what I intended.
Comment from me_tudor
This was great! I would never have thought about talking about golf in poetry but this was a perfect poem. This was a perfect style of poem too. It lead the reader from the t-off to the hole. Great job!
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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This was great! I would never have thought about talking about golf in poetry but this was a perfect poem. This was a perfect style of poem too. It lead the reader from the t-off to the hole. Great job!
Comment Written 10-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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Thank you me_tudor, yes, golf can be poetic.
Comment from Capricorn30
A well-crafted writing as the imperative rules of golf are explained utilizing good visual images;
I like the incorporation of the complex laws of physics as indeed they greatly contribute to the perfect score.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2013
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A well-crafted writing as the imperative rules of golf are explained utilizing good visual images;
I like the incorporation of the complex laws of physics as indeed they greatly contribute to the perfect score.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2013
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Thank you Margaret. Indeed they do.
