noble steed
3/5/3 poem52 total reviews
Comment from CrystieCookie999
Ah ha, a fellow horse lover. Or at least, a definite suggested metaphor here, that if one has found someone or something like a noble steed, that could indeed carry one through the trials of life. Caught 'c' alliteration in emphasized words canter, carry. Nice share.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2020
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Ah ha, a fellow horse lover. Or at least, a definite suggested metaphor here, that if one has found someone or something like a noble steed, that could indeed carry one through the trials of life. Caught 'c' alliteration in emphasized words canter, carry. Nice share.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2020
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Thank you so much! I was NOT expecting a review on a work I posted seven years ago, so I had to go back and re-read it myself. LOL
Yes, I am a fellow horse lover. We actually own twelve horses. :-)
All the best,
Jan
Comment from tony bronk
Should I ask for this to be censored for sexual content? Being too sexy? No! It is a beautiful 3 lib poem. A haiku is about nature; is yours nature? That is debatable? You decide Tony
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2018
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Should I ask for this to be censored for sexual content? Being too sexy? No! It is a beautiful 3 lib poem. A haiku is about nature; is yours nature? That is debatable? You decide Tony
Comment Written 18-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2018
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Well this was a surprise review. :-) I didn't even recall writing this! LOL Thank you very much for the delightful review.
Jan
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Was my review delightful? That surprises me? I do like the poem, though. Tony
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I thought so. LOL Horses are nature, right? Hahahaha. Probably not, but it was still fun to write all those years ago.
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You got it! Just take it as a lesson. I read and pay a lot of attention to the haiku. I write a lot of haikus! Tony
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You're nature,too!? right? Lol Tony
Comment from tedanytime
Your verse is perfect as a 3-5-3.
Haiku is acceptable in that short form.
However, some contests specify 5-7-5, so your entry should comply on those. This contest is a bit ambiguous, but the example is 5-7-5.
The expert on haiku is dondaldww on this site. Read his!
Some of your reviewers are not completely knowledgeable because you may use an "ing" ending in haiku.
Note that the contest indicates haiku is about nature (HORSE OK).
A haiku should be titled "haiku(first line)"
Your title is correct, but overall may not be a contest compliant.
I like your 3-5-3 and it deserves a 5.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2013
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Your verse is perfect as a 3-5-3.
Haiku is acceptable in that short form.
However, some contests specify 5-7-5, so your entry should comply on those. This contest is a bit ambiguous, but the example is 5-7-5.
The expert on haiku is dondaldww on this site. Read his!
Some of your reviewers are not completely knowledgeable because you may use an "ing" ending in haiku.
Note that the contest indicates haiku is about nature (HORSE OK).
A haiku should be titled "haiku(first line)"
Your title is correct, but overall may not be a contest compliant.
I like your 3-5-3 and it deserves a 5.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2013
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Thank you! :-)
Comment from rjuselius
"noble steed
who canters through life
carry me"
this is a beautiful piece of poetry! i was just wondering should the "who" rather be "which", since it is an it.
anhyoo
thank you for sharing!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2013
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"noble steed
who canters through life
carry me"
this is a beautiful piece of poetry! i was just wondering should the "who" rather be "which", since it is an it.
anhyoo
thank you for sharing!
rebekka x
Comment Written 05-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2013
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Thank you! :-)
Comment from Bobby Jo
I love your picture of your horse carrying you through life. I too, ride. And this is fitting. Thanks for sharing your great work.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2013
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I love your picture of your horse carrying you through life. I too, ride. And this is fitting. Thanks for sharing your great work.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2013
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Thank you! :-)
Comment from Christof McTarnahan
Great little piece. I always like reading these to see how the poet can pack a lot into so few words. You pulled it off my friend. Good job.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2013
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Great little piece. I always like reading these to see how the poet can pack a lot into so few words. You pulled it off my friend. Good job.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2013
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Thank you! :-)
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
Janilou,
I thought this was an excellent Haiki, and you obviously love riding horses. Loved the word "canter"! Amaazing how so much can be said with so few words. Well done!
bichonfrisegirl aka Connie
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2013
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Janilou,
I thought this was an excellent Haiki, and you obviously love riding horses. Loved the word "canter"! Amaazing how so much can be said with so few words. Well done!
bichonfrisegirl aka Connie
Comment Written 04-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2013
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Thank you! :-)
Comment from Gungalo
noble steed
who canters through life
carry me
This is a great 3/5/3 write girl and the alliteration of canters/carry is a plus.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2013
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noble steed
who canters through life
carry me
This is a great 3/5/3 write girl and the alliteration of canters/carry is a plus.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2013
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Thank you! :-)
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Comment from GWHARGIS
There are about fifty different haikus, so you're bound to have gotten at least one right. LOL. I don't know what constitutes a haiku, but I enjoyed this one. I pictured a family's work horse pulling a plow. Noble steed. Lovely imagery. Nice job.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2013
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There are about fifty different haikus, so you're bound to have gotten at least one right. LOL. I don't know what constitutes a haiku, but I enjoyed this one. I pictured a family's work horse pulling a plow. Noble steed. Lovely imagery. Nice job.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2013
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Thank you! :-)
Comment from Titan Black
You know to make statements sound so
poetic. And you painted a very clear picture
of a horses daily routine. Nevertheless, your
poetic alliteration is on point. Keep writing.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2013
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You know to make statements sound so
poetic. And you painted a very clear picture
of a horses daily routine. Nevertheless, your
poetic alliteration is on point. Keep writing.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2013
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Thank you! :-)
