Comment from Selina Stambi

Excellent

Atlantic, Pacific and t'other three,... nice! :)

Wings instead of wits ... kind of the dumb blonde of the simian realm ...??

Very well done, R. Could do as a children's poem too, I think.


Spags:

Upwards I'd (not I'll) soar

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2013

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reply by the author on 22-Aug-2013

Thanks Sonali as ever for the detailed review! R

Comment from NicciFaye

Excellent

Very creative and fantasy.....I liked the wing-ed monkey theory of humor and imagination....Excellent rhymming and well penned. Always enjoy reading your work.

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2013

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reply by the author on 22-Aug-2013

Thanks Nicci. Sorry I've been away on holidays hence the belated response. Hope you are doing well! R, x

Comment from Ben Colder

Excellent

Perhaps someday . However until the time permits, we will need to ride airplanes and copters. I read a touch of Edgar Allen Poe ?

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 31-Jul-2013

Thanks Ben. Poe is indeed one of my favourite reads so perhaps he influenced this! R

Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca

Excellent

Oh what a light and airy piece. this is just wonderful and I don't have to run for the dictionary. But wings for wit? Well I just don't know

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 31-Jul-2013

Glad you like this Barb! It is a puzzle indeed...R

Comment from pipersfancy

Excellent

This is light, and fanciful - I like your rhyming and it moves the piece along at a rollicking fun rate! I read it aloud to my 16-year old whose comment was "I like it a lot, it's fun to listen to. I only wish it had not been a MONKEY!" (Flash back to the terrifying flying monkeys of the Wizard of Oz!)

Lovely work!

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 31-Jul-2013

Ah, so glad your child liked this and apologies for the flashbacks! R

Comment from ravenblack

Excellent

Excellent use of rhythm and rhyme but really, just pack a plane full of politicians and viola- witless winged monkeys. Just wish you could have written in heavy-duty umbrellas for us ground dwellers.

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 31-Jul-2013

Glad you liked this ravenblack! R

Comment from sweetwoodjax

Excellent

this is very well written, raoul, you did an excellent job writing this poem about the carefree life you would live if you had wings instead of wits. i enjoyed reading it. cute picture

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 31-Jul-2013

Thanks sweetwodjax. Glad you like this! R

Comment from cvcopac

Excellent

If moving's the clos'est thing to being free, well, flying's freer yet. I enjoyed the fanciful story, the rhythm and rhymes. Kenny

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 31-Jul-2013

Thanks Kenny for the kind words. R

Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep

Excellent

If your wish comes true and you decide to come to Australia, please aim for somewhere near the coastline. We have a vast hot dry interior where a monkey with wings might find it hard to survive. This poem is a lot of fun, but has wonderful rhyming and fantasies attached. Giddy

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 31-Jul-2013

Thanks Giddy. Glad you like this! R

Comment from Titan Black

Excellent

Yes my brother, you don't what an understatement
that thet the title of your poem will be on the day of
Jjudgement. For, there will be many who will wish they
were something other than a human being. Because
Man is the only creature, who has a hard time submitting
to the will of Allah(God). So, as your wishes to rather be
a winged monkey is rightfully so, most readers will laugh
at these words when they read it. But little do they know...
Keep writing.

 Comment Written 30-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 31-Jul-2013

Thanks you Titan for you encouraging words! R