All Dressed In White
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Comment from Alchera
A provocative, well written, thinking thought for a missing bride contest throughout its people's ill-gospelling
narrative story lined contest with an unexacting end. I did like it. Thank you for reading and congratulations and cheers for your deserved victory. Blessings
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2020
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A provocative, well written, thinking thought for a missing bride contest throughout its people's ill-gospelling
narrative story lined contest with an unexacting end. I did like it. Thank you for reading and congratulations and cheers for your deserved victory. Blessings
Comment Written 24-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2020
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Thank you so very much. This is one of my favorites. :-)
Much appreciated.
Jan
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You are Always welcome Jan and may your day be bright and happy with your dear beloved family! Blessings. Tony
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Hello Janilou. I kept waiting for it. Knew it was coming, could feel it ... almost there the reveal about who was doing what and then BAM! Laughed my butt off and know exactly why this one got 1st place. Brilliant! xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
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Hello Janilou. I kept waiting for it. Knew it was coming, could feel it ... almost there the reveal about who was doing what and then BAM! Laughed my butt off and know exactly why this one got 1st place. Brilliant! xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 16-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
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LOL I am so glad you enjoyed it. This is one of my all-time favorites of all the short stories I have written. Thanks for the great review. :-)
Comment from bluemlein
Janilu you have a way with words. Anyone who wants to write humorous stories, or mysteries, should study this gem because it is excellent in every way. I did think, when he tousled his bodyguard's hair, that the bodyguard/narrator would be a special character, but you were very sparing in your clues. The ending is simply priceless. Six Woofs.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2013
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Janilu you have a way with words. Anyone who wants to write humorous stories, or mysteries, should study this gem because it is excellent in every way. I did think, when he tousled his bodyguard's hair, that the bodyguard/narrator would be a special character, but you were very sparing in your clues. The ending is simply priceless. Six Woofs.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2013
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LOL Thank you so very much. SO glad you enjoyed it.
Jan
Comment from pbroussard209
Okay, this was awesome, didn't see the point of view coming from a dog. Loved it. You have a great imagination, and wonderful story telling talent.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2013
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Okay, this was awesome, didn't see the point of view coming from a dog. Loved it. You have a great imagination, and wonderful story telling talent.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2013
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Thank you so much! :-) I'm thrilled to hear how much you enjoyed this. :-)
Jan
Comment from Spiritual Echo
Well I loved it, absolutely roared by the end.
What a very deserving win. This is a fabulous story...hell, I'd send it to Bride magazine---just to see if they have a sense of humour.
Glad I found you.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2013
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Well I loved it, absolutely roared by the end.
What a very deserving win. This is a fabulous story...hell, I'd send it to Bride magazine---just to see if they have a sense of humour.
Glad I found you.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2013
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LOL Thank you so much! That's a great idea. Ha, ha. Maybe I will. Again, thanks for the honor of the six stars, and your comments. It's great to know you enjoyed it that much! :-)
Jan
Comment from amahra
This is excellent, excellent writing. And I've used up all my sixes, darn it! I thought the dog and the bone at the end was priceless. You deserved to win. Glad I wasn't in this contest; I wouldn't have stood a chance, LOL
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2013
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This is excellent, excellent writing. And I've used up all my sixes, darn it! I thought the dog and the bone at the end was priceless. You deserved to win. Glad I wasn't in this contest; I wouldn't have stood a chance, LOL
Comment Written 02-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2013
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Knowing that you thought it worthy of six stars is a great honor. Thank you so much. :-)
Jan
Comment from Contests
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2013
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 A contest winning entry! A seven star rating from the Contest Committee for posting the winning contest entry. |
Comment Written 02-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2013
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Wow, I'm speechless. :-) Thank you so much for recognizing my writing in this way and choosing my entry as the winner of this contest. I'm still working two jobs averaging 120 hours a week and 'writing time' is limited to the wee hours of the night. This is an incredible honor and inspiration. Thank you.
Comment from Selina Stambi
It's getting crowded in here, and the guests are getting smellier. ...:) :) ... how awful!!
His face is looking like a lobster poking out of a ceramic pot .. LOVE it!
Janilou, I love the style of this write - so clever, witty acerbic. The VOICE - I thought it was a butch woman who was his body guard. NEVER guessed until the moment of revelation, the identity of the bodyguard.
I hope this one wins. Hugs xxx
spags:
because I knew (not know) she was having an affair
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2013
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It's getting crowded in here, and the guests are getting smellier. ...:) :) ... how awful!!
His face is looking like a lobster poking out of a ceramic pot .. LOVE it!
Janilou, I love the style of this write - so clever, witty acerbic. The VOICE - I thought it was a butch woman who was his body guard. NEVER guessed until the moment of revelation, the identity of the bodyguard.
I hope this one wins. Hugs xxx
spags:
because I knew (not know) she was having an affair
Comment Written 31-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2013
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Thank you so much! A very pleasant surprise to find six stars waiting for me this morning, before heading off to work. I went in and corrected that spag. Thank you so much for drawing my attention to it! :-)
Many, many thanks.
Jan
Comment from AlvinTEthington
What a surprise that the story was told by a dog! I loved it. You not only wrote a very humorous story, you wrote an excellent social commentary piece on how the Sacrament of Marriage has become a travesty in today's society. I also like how you show animals are often wiser than human beings. Excellent work.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2013
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What a surprise that the story was told by a dog! I loved it. You not only wrote a very humorous story, you wrote an excellent social commentary piece on how the Sacrament of Marriage has become a travesty in today's society. I also like how you show animals are often wiser than human beings. Excellent work.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2013
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Alvin, what an honor this is to receive a six-star review from you for my story. I am so thrilled! Thank you!
Hugs,
Jan
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It was well deserved. After a two month hiatus, I just posted a tanka sequence, if you are interested.
Comment from Evelyn Fort Stewart
Is the narrator of this story a dog and the dog dug a hole in the back yard and buried the bride in white, because she looked like a bone. Now, I do have to say this is one heck of a good imagination. Good job. God loves you and I do too.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2013
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Is the narrator of this story a dog and the dog dug a hole in the back yard and buried the bride in white, because she looked like a bone. Now, I do have to say this is one heck of a good imagination. Good job. God loves you and I do too.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much. :-)
Jan
