Comment from CornishChick

Exceptional

You are the best! Do you see poetry in everything? BTW... is this your poor de-feeted feet?? Get that book published because I'm ready to buy!

 Comment Written 24-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 24-Jul-2013

Thank you so much ashowalter. No not my feet, fortunately. Mine are just full of mosquito bites from camping last weekend. That was my Muse. Wow, I am very pleased with the stars you awarded this simple piece that I had low expectations for. Yes, I do see poetry in everything.

Comment from Preston McWhorter

Excellent

Hi Treischel,
Excellent. The perils of the outdoors. Ben there, done that. I did not particularly enjoy this poem. Realistic imagery I suggest boots.
Preston

 Comment Written 23-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 23-Jul-2013

Thanks Preston. Boots or walking shoes. Of course you can get blisters in those too.

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

I hope that is not a photograph of your foot! I enjoyed your rhymes, abundant alliteration and punchline! Be careful out there- Joan

 Comment Written 23-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 23-Jul-2013

Thanks Joan. Nope not my foot. I was camping this weekend and did get the legs eaten a bit by Mosquitoes, but nothing like that picture.

reply by Joan E. on 23-Jul-2013

Thank goodness--but the mosquitoes can be brutal (I'm hypersensitized). Keep enjoying the summer! -Joan, from Colorado

Comment from sunnilicious

Excellent

That looks mighty painful. Great alliteration on the letter b and t. Good poetic form. Clearly written with rhymes. Excellent work.

 Comment Written 22-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013

Thanks Sunni, just a poem, fiction.

Comment from Robin Gilmor

Excellent

Just love this one. Lots of alliteration and enjambment that make the words tumble off the tongue and are delightful to read. Poor foot! I feel your
pain. Smiles. Robin :)

 Comment Written 22-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013

Thanks Robin.

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

Hah! Feet meet defeat...very clever, Mr. 'T'! I shudder to think where that photograph came from, but knowing that you frequently use your own photography in your poems, I can only offer my sincerest condolences...

Nicly done, very funny.

 Comment Written 22-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013

Thank you Dean. Not mine, actually, but the thoughts come from personal experience.

Comment from in777wr#

Excellent

This is a well written poem. I liked the consistent abcb rhyming scheme. This poem flows off the tongue very well. You have a really good picture as well.

 Comment Written 22-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013

Thank you in777.

Comment from trevorletang

Excellent

Just a read of your poem by me as well - I've put up my feet to rest them from swell - I've been walking the town flat and now I need to restore my arches back - thanks for your bushland poem - sorry for the injuries to feet - - note how your poem stimulated my juices Treischel!

 Comment Written 22-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013

Thank you Trevor. Glad to be of assistance.

Comment from vapros

Excellent

Five of my stars for a neat little verse about the folly of venturing into the wilds without your shoes. And the picture is a perfect match. 'Feet meet defeat' made a good punch line. Be well.

v

 Comment Written 22-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013

Thank you vapros. Glad you liked the punch line.