Skinny Dipping
Don't go skinny dipping with the sea creatures34 total reviews
Comment from Darkhorse555
from the naked picture engaged in skinny dipping in shark infested waters in the sea jailed for public streaking lovely piece
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013
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from the naked picture engaged in skinny dipping in shark infested waters in the sea jailed for public streaking lovely piece
Comment Written 22-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013
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THank you much for the review and comments. I appreciate your reading it.
Comment from joneau2
As far as the technical aspect, it's a six stars. As far as the poem ... well ...? One thing is certain, the picture certainly gets one attention, but doesn't match up to the individual portrayed in the poem. Mixed emotions about this one.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013
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As far as the technical aspect, it's a six stars. As far as the poem ... well ...? One thing is certain, the picture certainly gets one attention, but doesn't match up to the individual portrayed in the poem. Mixed emotions about this one.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013
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Thank you for the review and the comments. I'm sorry the picture doesn't work for you but I'm pleased you find the technical part O.K.
Smiles.
Comment from JohnnyQ
Haha.. this was pretty funny! So what was it that nipped you? Definitely not a shark..I am not sure what a Gertude form of poetry is, but this poem was very well written. I liked the rhyme scheme.
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reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013
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Haha.. this was pretty funny! So what was it that nipped you? Definitely not a shark..I am not sure what a Gertude form of poetry is, but this poem was very well written. I liked the rhyme scheme.
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Comment Written 22-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013
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Thank you for reviewing and comments. Yeah, I know sharks would take a big bite but maybe in creature in the water would be enough to scare him. I was going to use piranha but the syllable count didn't work.
Comment from rhonny
Very clever and it hops and jumps along like you're doing in the poem. But I think there are a couple of errors. In stanza 2 'consicered' should be 'considered' and in stanza 3 the last line you have left out the word 'in' before jail.
Yes that's much better. I'm upgrading the stars to 5. :)
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reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013
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Very clever and it hops and jumps along like you're doing in the poem. But I think there are a couple of errors. In stanza 2 'consicered' should be 'considered' and in stanza 3 the last line you have left out the word 'in' before jail.
Yes that's much better. I'm upgrading the stars to 5. :)
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Comment Written 22-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2013
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Thank you for the review and for the finding the spags. I've fixed them and I'm hoping by doing so you are able to change the rating. I don't know how that happened because I spell checked it twice.
Beth
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that's ok. spell check has failed me a few times too! I'll have another look now.
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Thank so much for looking again and upgrading it. You deserve a reviewer nomination.
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