Skinny Dipping
Don't go skinny dipping with the sea creatures34 total reviews
Comment from Nuad1
Darling of a poem (and the artwork was pretty cool, too!!)
Contest entries have to be the WORST task one can take on and you did this one quite well. Good luck.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2013
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Darling of a poem (and the artwork was pretty cool, too!!)
Contest entries have to be the WORST task one can take on and you did this one quite well. Good luck.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2013
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THank you so much for the wonderful review. I keep entering these contests. One of these days I might actually wib again but probably not today. Thanks for the good wishes.
:)
Comment from Quillian
Clever and satisfying Gertrude poem. I loved that nipping in the shark invested water off Capri and him landing in the Pokey! Made me smile
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2013
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Clever and satisfying Gertrude poem. I loved that nipping in the shark invested water off Capri and him landing in the Pokey! Made me smile
Comment Written 04-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2013
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I'm so glad you liked this poem. I'm happy you found the humor here.
:)
Comment from eafournier
Your poem is very humorous, but it does involve some truth.
The rhythm and rhyme scheme are good. The picture is awesome! Who wouldn't skinny dip if he looked like that.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2013
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Your poem is very humorous, but it does involve some truth.
The rhythm and rhyme scheme are good. The picture is awesome! Who wouldn't skinny dip if he looked like that.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2013
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Thank you so much for the review and comments. I guess skinny wouldn't exactly apply to this dude but he might not mind showing off that body.
Beth
Comment from Eternal Muse
That was beyond belief. The meter was a treat for a meter buff like me. And I just watched the Italian series "Capri" - so that hit the spot. It was super witty, origiinal, dynamic, with a killer picture, I adored every word. What a treat it is. I hope you win.
Favorite part:
Now I'm sitting in the pokey,
but I think there's something hokey,
because no one's volunteered to pay my bail.
All the pals, who found me charming
have left town, and that's alarming.
When you need them, that's the time when friendships fail.
Wow.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2013
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That was beyond belief. The meter was a treat for a meter buff like me. And I just watched the Italian series "Capri" - so that hit the spot. It was super witty, origiinal, dynamic, with a killer picture, I adored every word. What a treat it is. I hope you win.
Favorite part:
Now I'm sitting in the pokey,
but I think there's something hokey,
because no one's volunteered to pay my bail.
All the pals, who found me charming
have left town, and that's alarming.
When you need them, that's the time when friendships fail.
Wow.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2013
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Thank you so much for the six stars and for the delightful comments. I'm so glad you like it. I do appreciate your good wishes. It looks like it might be a close call to win.
:)
Comment from BeckyW
A fun read. Good rhyme and rhythm throughout while keeping within the challenging guidelines of a gertrude poem.
That's quite a predicament I'd say.
There's an extra 't' in the word 'sitting' in the first line of the third stanza.
Thanks for the giggle, and good luck with the contest:)
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2013
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A fun read. Good rhyme and rhythm throughout while keeping within the challenging guidelines of a gertrude poem.
That's quite a predicament I'd say.
There's an extra 't' in the word 'sitting' in the first line of the third stanza.
Thanks for the giggle, and good luck with the contest:)
Comment Written 02-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2013
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Thank you Becky, I really appreciate the review and comments. I can't believe you are the first to spot the typing error. Thanks for having sharp eyes.
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You're very welcome:)
Comment from Jose Saic
is a nice poem with a good sense of humour that 9in its verses tells us about a very serious situation: Swimming in a sea infested of sharks, I supposed completly nude and must ru n away of sea to get earth but nude, because clothes are far away, and police will see this person running in shore.
Now, in jail and no friend to pay the bail, because they have left.
How that person get out from that situation?
I ,like it.
Congratulations
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2013
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is a nice poem with a good sense of humour that 9in its verses tells us about a very serious situation: Swimming in a sea infested of sharks, I supposed completly nude and must ru n away of sea to get earth but nude, because clothes are far away, and police will see this person running in shore.
Now, in jail and no friend to pay the bail, because they have left.
How that person get out from that situation?
I ,like it.
Congratulations
Comment Written 02-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2013
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Thank you so much, Jose. I really appreciate your comments. I'm so glad you like the humor.
:)
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you are welcome.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
I like the way this form just takes off when I'm reading.
This is very well-written and amusing--while making a serious point: There are few friends that will come to the rescue when the situation is really challenging or embarrassing.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2013
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I like the way this form just takes off when I'm reading.
This is very well-written and amusing--while making a serious point: There are few friends that will come to the rescue when the situation is really challenging or embarrassing.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2013
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Thank you Janice, I really appreciate the review and nice comments. I'm so glad you like it.
:)
Comment from janalma
This is great. What a picture this conjures up. I was so pleasantly surprised when I read this wonderfully funny poem. To my ear, it sounds perfect. I am not a qualified poetry judge, but really thought this good. Rhyming is excellent and natural and it has, in my opinion, perfect cadence. Could see this in a publication, so a six.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2013
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This is great. What a picture this conjures up. I was so pleasantly surprised when I read this wonderfully funny poem. To my ear, it sounds perfect. I am not a qualified poetry judge, but really thought this good. Rhyming is excellent and natural and it has, in my opinion, perfect cadence. Could see this in a publication, so a six.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2013
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Thanks so much for the wonderful six star rating. I'm so glad you like it and I really appreciate your comments. It is up for votes in the contest booth now so I can't reveal my name just yet.
Comment from Cry the Vile Rebel
Congratulations on the creation of a very well-penned poem. The author's notes were rendered unnecessary by your rock solid meter. The entire poem made me smile. In my experience, the physique of your average skinny dipper does not even approach that of the gentleman in your chosen illustration, but there'll be no complaints from this quarter ; )
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2013
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Congratulations on the creation of a very well-penned poem. The author's notes were rendered unnecessary by your rock solid meter. The entire poem made me smile. In my experience, the physique of your average skinny dipper does not even approach that of the gentleman in your chosen illustration, but there'll be no complaints from this quarter ; )
Comment Written 02-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2013
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Thank you so much for the great review and comments. My guy is certainly not skinny. LOL
Comment from Judy Couch
This is funny. The rhyme and rhythm are very good. It tells a story which gives it added appeal. I like it a lot. Great job.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2013
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This is funny. The rhyme and rhythm are very good. It tells a story which gives it added appeal. I like it a lot. Great job.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2013
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Thank you so much Judy. I really appreciate your review. I'm glad you found it funny.
:)