Karma
Look Out, it Bites...36 total reviews
Comment from paulah60
What a hoot, P! Karma is such a bitch. Bad enough when it bites you on the bum, but ... a piranha with the munchies...holy shit!
An 'all-consuming' read. Brilliant!
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2013
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What a hoot, P! Karma is such a bitch. Bad enough when it bites you on the bum, but ... a piranha with the munchies...holy shit!
An 'all-consuming' read. Brilliant!
Comment Written 04-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2013
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Aww P, thanks so much for the screamer review. Yes those parched mouthed pirahna CAN be a bit of a problem for loose flailing appendages...haha
Loved that you stopped in my port. Most flattered. Cheers for the sixer
P x
Comment from Dougspoetry
A masterpiece of the HIGHEST order! :) Apart from the F-Bomb I would say you nailed a very creative write. Steady cadence and great rhymes, along with a creepy picture. Hope all is well!
God Bless!
Doug
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2013
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A masterpiece of the HIGHEST order! :) Apart from the F-Bomb I would say you nailed a very creative write. Steady cadence and great rhymes, along with a creepy picture. Hope all is well!
God Bless!
Doug
Comment Written 25-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2013
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Thanks so much Doug. Always appreciate you dropping by with a sixer. Even for a write inclusive of the f-bomb.
Boy I really appreciate that.
Cheers P
xo
Comment from Jaq Cee
Welcome to the Karma cafe where there are no menus you are served up your just desserts :).
Great and humerous story/poem well written as always. :) xx
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2013
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Welcome to the Karma cafe where there are no menus you are served up your just desserts :).
Great and humerous story/poem well written as always. :) xx
Comment Written 24-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2013
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Ahhh, Jaqualish...how are you? Thanks for the sixer honey.
this would make a GREAT poem title.
KARMA CAFE
I just KNOW who I'd be serving up my first Lothario Latte to.
Bwahahahahaha
Geez I'm ON fire today mate. Hugs P xoxo
Comment from rhymelord
Dear Phillippa,
Karma indeed and in such perfect "execution", but methinks, my dear, you are associating with the wrong types. Where did you learn about such things???
Regards
Reg
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2013
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Dear Phillippa,
Karma indeed and in such perfect "execution", but methinks, my dear, you are associating with the wrong types. Where did you learn about such things???
Regards
Reg
Comment Written 24-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2013
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LOL I'm a well travelled and versed girl Reg. No spring chicken, I'm 44. But take heart, this was NOT a bio. It's one of the few posts I've completely fabricated. I struggle with fiction. Thanks for stopping by. Hope you are well.
I must call into your port my friend.
Cheers P
x
Comment from Glasstruth
You tell a good story in couplets rhyming. Definitely shows what goes around comes around. You could easily write a part two to this. Just a suggestion. Good luck with the contest! Les
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2013
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You tell a good story in couplets rhyming. Definitely shows what goes around comes around. You could easily write a part two to this. Just a suggestion. Good luck with the contest! Les
Comment Written 23-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2013
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Thanks Les
I'm hoping for some good karma from this one with the judges. Not sure they'll appreciate the f-bomb. But pigs might fly. LOL
Cheers P
Comment from Joan E.
I read in your email that you have gone back to work. I hope you can channel some of your boundless creativity into the business. Thanks for still finding the time to share with us. I admired your rhymed quatrains as you told the tale of this ironic "karma!" Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2013
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I read in your email that you have gone back to work. I hope you can channel some of your boundless creativity into the business. Thanks for still finding the time to share with us. I admired your rhymed quatrains as you told the tale of this ironic "karma!" Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 22-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2013
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Hello my friend, many thanks for your delightful review. I appreciate the support and yes the boundless creativity is perfectly harnessed in the job so I'm happy enough. But miss my fs time dearly. Thanks for stopping by. I'll try and do the same.
Cheers Phillippa
xoxo
Comment from Louise Michelle
Hi C.P.,
This piece is pure perfection. I don't have to tell you the rhymes and meter are spot on and the storyline is fabulous. I am totally cracking up at the ending. How brilliant of you to not end just with drug dealers getting eaten. The bit about piranhas eating the weed first and then getting the munchies is brilliant.
Sorry I used that word twice, but you see I'm sitting here getting stoned and I can't find my thesaurus. ONLY KIDDING! I have enough trouble explaining some of my comments to folks when I'm reading on just a few hours sleep because of my insomnia.
Just thought of something else. Your scenario really puts new meaning to green tea. Might be worth looking into, lol.
Big Hug,
Lou
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2013
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Hi C.P.,
This piece is pure perfection. I don't have to tell you the rhymes and meter are spot on and the storyline is fabulous. I am totally cracking up at the ending. How brilliant of you to not end just with drug dealers getting eaten. The bit about piranhas eating the weed first and then getting the munchies is brilliant.
Sorry I used that word twice, but you see I'm sitting here getting stoned and I can't find my thesaurus. ONLY KIDDING! I have enough trouble explaining some of my comments to folks when I'm reading on just a few hours sleep because of my insomnia.
Just thought of something else. Your scenario really puts new meaning to green tea. Might be worth looking into, lol.
Big Hug,
Lou
Comment Written 22-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2013
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Heyyyyyyyyyyyyy thanks Lou...LOVED your review and YOU and I hope you saw the little dedication in the notes. You are a master at this form both with rhyme, meter and imagination and I can only hope I came somewhere close. Initially the story was going to be about the pet iguana but it somehow changed and this is what I ended up with. I DID like it in the end and I thank YOU for the inspiration to go out of MY comfort zone and completely fabricate a story. I struggle with that. I can stretch the truth no probs yet not fabricate complete fiction that well. The only thing I can vouch for in this write is the hemp terminology LMAO
Thanks for the sixer and I like the green tea idea...leave it with me. I got a suggestion for part two but that will take awhile and more chuff LMAO
Hugs CP
xxoo
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Yes, and I thank you for that dedication. Is it really hard for you to make stuff up? I have trouble writing about reality, hee hee. My mother used to say I had an over-active imagination. Don't think I ever live completely in reality and that's not such a good thing. I look forward to your Part II. Hugs back, LouLou
Comment from Joy Graham
I got a kick out of that picture. You got me with your rhyme of marijuana / piranha. This is a terrific little story poem. Always like to see the bad guys get it in a natural way :) Best wishes to you in this contest.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2013
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I got a kick out of that picture. You got me with your rhyme of marijuana / piranha. This is a terrific little story poem. Always like to see the bad guys get it in a natural way :) Best wishes to you in this contest.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2013
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LOL Glad you got a kick from my pic and good time from my rhyme.
Nothin' like the bad guys getting their just desserts...hmmm...
the fish got the dessert come to think of it. LOL
Cheers and thanks for stopping by, much appreciated
Phillippa
Comment from The Death
Hello
that last line punch was the 'lol' moment of the poem..hehe..I liked this funny little story.
Yeah,piranhas eating munchies...cool...we oughta eat marine then..haha..
Good use of strongly rhyming couplets with nice rhythm and peppy beats.
Last lines are the show stealers..and of course I being an Indian know well about Karma..you did an excellent narration.
Good luck:-)
Regards
Shar-A
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2013
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Hello
that last line punch was the 'lol' moment of the poem..hehe..I liked this funny little story.
Yeah,piranhas eating munchies...cool...we oughta eat marine then..haha..
Good use of strongly rhyming couplets with nice rhythm and peppy beats.
Last lines are the show stealers..and of course I being an Indian know well about Karma..you did an excellent narration.
Good luck:-)
Regards
Shar-A
Comment Written 22-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2013
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LOL Thanks so much Shar-A, I appreciate you stopping by.
cheers Phillippa
Comment from adewpearl
strong rhyming couplets - love the pairing of marijuana/piranha
I like the idea of the drug lords evading the cops only to be confronted by piranha
good alliteration in free for
and in mull in motion
great action verbs like clip/bounce/freak/dive/thrash add lots of life and drama to the scene
good alliteration in major munchies and further fuel
now, that is hungry, a piranha with pot munchies LOL
love your closing line :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2013
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strong rhyming couplets - love the pairing of marijuana/piranha
I like the idea of the drug lords evading the cops only to be confronted by piranha
good alliteration in free for
and in mull in motion
great action verbs like clip/bounce/freak/dive/thrash add lots of life and drama to the scene
good alliteration in major munchies and further fuel
now, that is hungry, a piranha with pot munchies LOL
love your closing line :-) Brooke
Comment Written 22-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2013
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Hey Brookers, thanks so much. I liked the idea of it too but to be honest, that was a lotta pot gone to waste LOL
LOVED your review, thanks so much
Hugs Phillippa xo
