History and Myth
Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "Alaskan Gold"Poems that tell stories of long ago
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Comment from kiwijenny
When I was in New Zealand in June we went through a gold mining town....there were scars on the land still. But the desperation of men rushing to a remote place is the story you tell.thanks for the author notes. I love Jack London's stories set in Alaska...I like your three line refrain the best
Good read
God bless
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2013
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When I was in New Zealand in June we went through a gold mining town....there were scars on the land still. But the desperation of men rushing to a remote place is the story you tell.thanks for the author notes. I love Jack London's stories set in Alaska...I like your three line refrain the best
Good read
God bless
Comment Written 26-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2013
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Thank you kiwijenny. I like Jack London too. Your comments are appreciated as is the generous award of stars.
Comment from jac tyler
Wow. I guess that would sum up what I feel about this. Excellent work, so rich and crisp it reminds me of something a historian or teacher might write. I love the stark reality of it all, how so many will struggle when God fever strikes.
I think I love this line the best, "Sad tune that sings gold fever's voice."
It sort of sums up the entire piece.
Great job, really good.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2013
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Wow. I guess that would sum up what I feel about this. Excellent work, so rich and crisp it reminds me of something a historian or teacher might write. I love the stark reality of it all, how so many will struggle when God fever strikes.
I think I love this line the best, "Sad tune that sings gold fever's voice."
It sort of sums up the entire piece.
Great job, really good.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2013
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Thank you jac. I'm glad you stopped by to read and comment.
Comment from kelly frederick
Overall you conveyed what gold mining is like. However the repeat from first lines into the last lines didn't do it justice. Maybe you could find a different way to explain it instead of repeating. Stances were clear and descriptive.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2013
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Overall you conveyed what gold mining is like. However the repeat from first lines into the last lines didn't do it justice. Maybe you could find a different way to explain it instead of repeating. Stances were clear and descriptive.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2013
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Ok. Thanks, Kelly.
Comment from renellevargas
A fact that is written thru the format of a poem is not easy.
You must know how to use words giving life to a poem without depicting the facts of the history.
The writer of this poem is as good as what he did in this poem.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2013
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A fact that is written thru the format of a poem is not easy.
You must know how to use words giving life to a poem without depicting the facts of the history.
The writer of this poem is as good as what he did in this poem.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2013
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Thank you rennellevargas.
Comment from Selina Stambi
I love the simple grandeur of the repeated "chorus".
Then gold fever strikes.... only this one (first stanza has a lower case g ... intentional?)
The mirrored effect of the first and final stanza create a fabulous frame for this piece.
I could hear the pounding beat
Of hearts and feet
Trying to find a seat
'Midst sure defeat!
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2013
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I love the simple grandeur of the repeated "chorus".
Then gold fever strikes.... only this one (first stanza has a lower case g ... intentional?)
The mirrored effect of the first and final stanza create a fabulous frame for this piece.
I could hear the pounding beat
Of hearts and feet
Trying to find a seat
'Midst sure defeat!
Comment Written 19-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2013
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Thank you very much Sonali. Wow! I am bedazzled by all those stars. yes, intentional.
Comment from Joan E.
A few years ago, we took a cruise to Alaska and road the White Mountain train into the old gold country. Thanks for reminding me of that adventure. I enjoyed your rhyme scheme with the repeating, mono-rhyme three-line stanzas, along with your echoing sounds of alliteration and assonance. I admired your cadence and vivid descriptions.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2013
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A few years ago, we took a cruise to Alaska and road the White Mountain train into the old gold country. Thanks for reminding me of that adventure. I enjoyed your rhyme scheme with the repeating, mono-rhyme three-line stanzas, along with your echoing sounds of alliteration and assonance. I admired your cadence and vivid descriptions.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2013
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Thank you Joan, you give a wonderfully detailed review.
Comment from sunnilicious
I love to hear and read about the goldrush. I didn't know there was gold in Alaska. I thought it was just oil and fishery stuff. There is a museum close to me in Seattle, Klondike Goldrush Museum. It's small, however, so much great history.
Great poem. You are informative and well researched. Historical and creative with wonderful visual imageries. Excellent work.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2013
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I love to hear and read about the goldrush. I didn't know there was gold in Alaska. I thought it was just oil and fishery stuff. There is a museum close to me in Seattle, Klondike Goldrush Museum. It's small, however, so much great history.
Great poem. You are informative and well researched. Historical and creative with wonderful visual imageries. Excellent work.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2013
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Thank you Sunnilicious. It was an amazing era.
Comment from ravenblack
Don't worry about a formal name. Poetry is not taxidermy. This one is just good. I like you framing the piece with the opening and closing stanza. Sometimes less is more- 2 line- consider dropping pale and read it aloud.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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Don't worry about a formal name. Poetry is not taxidermy. This one is just good. I like you framing the piece with the opening and closing stanza. Sometimes less is more- 2 line- consider dropping pale and read it aloud.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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Thanks Ravenblack. I like it better pale.
Comment from Capricorn30
A well-expressed, fact-laded writing on the quest for gold;
Great visual images of Alaska's unforgiving climate, as many strived to rid themselves of poverty.
I have read stories on the Klondike gold rush--another topic which has always intrigued me. Many made the difficult trek, only to walk away with empty pockets, if they were able to survive disease and the harsh elements.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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A well-expressed, fact-laded writing on the quest for gold;
Great visual images of Alaska's unforgiving climate, as many strived to rid themselves of poverty.
I have read stories on the Klondike gold rush--another topic which has always intrigued me. Many made the difficult trek, only to walk away with empty pockets, if they were able to survive disease and the harsh elements.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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Thank you Margaret. Yes, it was an interesting era. At least many had the adventure of a lifetime, if they survived.
Comment from Preston McWhorter
Hi, Treischel,
Shades of Jack London, Smoke Belleu and John Wayne. You certainly struck gold with this one. It gave me the fever just reading it. I certainly enjoyed this one with its imagery, rhythm and enthusiasm and figurative language. However I do think you mean gold "sluice" instead of "sleuth" in the 5th stanza.
Preston
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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Hi, Treischel,
Shades of Jack London, Smoke Belleu and John Wayne. You certainly struck gold with this one. It gave me the fever just reading it. I certainly enjoyed this one with its imagery, rhythm and enthusiasm and figurative language. However I do think you mean gold "sluice" instead of "sleuth" in the 5th stanza.
Preston
Comment Written 18-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2013
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Thanks Preston, I really appreciate the stars and thanks for the correction, I'll fix that. Dis you catch that the shiver and shake has double meaning?
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Yes, I am very appreciative of good double entendres.
