Silver Threads
A (modified) Shakespearean sonnet of cursed enchantment94 total reviews
Comment from Evelyn Fort Stewart
Oh my. I would say this lady was out for revenge. I'm assuming this if fictional in your case and has nothing to do with your real life. This picture always gives me the creeps for some reason and it has been used more than any one picture on this site. Good job. God loves you and I do too.
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2013
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Oh my. I would say this lady was out for revenge. I'm assuming this if fictional in your case and has nothing to do with your real life. This picture always gives me the creeps for some reason and it has been used more than any one picture on this site. Good job. God loves you and I do too.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2013
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It's an art work that everyone has to write about for the competition Evelyn - that's why you're seeing so much of it. Creepy, hmm?
:)Sharyn
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
Hmmm: visionary1234:
Silver threads and ocean's darkest bed don't seem to
be on friendly terms. I hope you kill him before he
goes to ocean's darkest bed because the thoughts of
drowning are very scary to me - lol.
thanks for sharing
love,
jan
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2013
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Hmmm: visionary1234:
Silver threads and ocean's darkest bed don't seem to
be on friendly terms. I hope you kill him before he
goes to ocean's darkest bed because the thoughts of
drowning are very scary to me - lol.
thanks for sharing
love,
jan
Comment Written 03-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2013
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thx so much jan! :)Sharyn
Comment from Patti R.
So fantastic! So like a woman to toss out and wrap that silver thread around his wretched ankles and give it a jolly good yank! Toppling him! We have our ways. This sonnet builds upon metaphor so well, Sharyn. Absolutely spot on perfect.
Great alliteration, effective enjambment, an entire woeful tale is revealed in so succinct a poem. I loved it.
That'll teach 'im.
Patti
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2013
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So fantastic! So like a woman to toss out and wrap that silver thread around his wretched ankles and give it a jolly good yank! Toppling him! We have our ways. This sonnet builds upon metaphor so well, Sharyn. Absolutely spot on perfect.
Great alliteration, effective enjambment, an entire woeful tale is revealed in so succinct a poem. I loved it.
That'll teach 'im.
Patti
Comment Written 03-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2013
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you betcha! GRRRR! Thx so much for your lovely six on this one Patti!
big hugs :)S
Comment from MidnightWriter4U
Hell hath no fury as that of a woman scorned. The ominous state of affairs (no pun intended) is set perfectly in the ninth line. The ending couplets tell of the fate of a deceitful man receiving his just reward. ouch!
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2013
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Hell hath no fury as that of a woman scorned. The ominous state of affairs (no pun intended) is set perfectly in the ninth line. The ending couplets tell of the fate of a deceitful man receiving his just reward. ouch!
Comment Written 03-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2013
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aah, thank you so much for your lovely six on this one my dear! Glad you enjoyed! :)Sharyn
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You are very welcome, friend. MN :)
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I enjoyed reading your contest entry. It flowed well and I appreciate the author's notes. I am not a poet, but enjoy reading them, so any help I get is appreciated. Good luck.
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2013
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I enjoyed reading your contest entry. It flowed well and I appreciate the author's notes. I am not a poet, but enjoy reading them, so any help I get is appreciated. Good luck.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2013
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Bless you Barbara! :)Sharyn
Comment from amada
Very well done, Sharyn. I know this work took much time and dedication. It's very expressive in that sad and "to the I
could fly to scorching glory of the sun." Alliteration is great as well.
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2013
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Very well done, Sharyn. I know this work took much time and dedication. It's very expressive in that sad and "to the I
could fly to scorching glory of the sun." Alliteration is great as well.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2013
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thx so much my dear! :)Sharyn
Comment from Alan K Pease
Thank you for describing how you structured your poem giving us insights into the process by which you formed it following most constraints of a Shakespearean sonnet. Love doesn't always follow ones purpose/argument. Silver threads are what we bond to our own values.
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2013
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Thank you for describing how you structured your poem giving us insights into the process by which you formed it following most constraints of a Shakespearean sonnet. Love doesn't always follow ones purpose/argument. Silver threads are what we bond to our own values.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2013
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thx so much AK - this was such a strange art piece ... an interesting prompt, hmm? :)Sharyn
Comment from Bill Schott
Your sonnet does a nice job of telling the story of a love betrayed. The silver thread is a bit mystical and ultimately devastating in a surreal way. The turn at line nine is classic and this sonnet is a fun read.
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2013
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Your sonnet does a nice job of telling the story of a love betrayed. The silver thread is a bit mystical and ultimately devastating in a surreal way. The turn at line nine is classic and this sonnet is a fun read.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2013
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So glad you enjoyed this one, Bill. Sonnets are always an interesting write - or should that be "challenge"? :)))Sharyn
Comment from Debra White
This is wonderful! A fantastic entry for the contest...
I love the story in your poem - your take on the art work is great and the style of the poem works brilliantly.
I really appreciated the inclusion of author notes - so informative.
All the best in the contest, I enjoyed reading this.
Kindest regards, Debra :)
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2013
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This is wonderful! A fantastic entry for the contest...
I love the story in your poem - your take on the art work is great and the style of the poem works brilliantly.
I really appreciated the inclusion of author notes - so informative.
All the best in the contest, I enjoyed reading this.
Kindest regards, Debra :)
Comment Written 03-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2013
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So glad you enjoyed this one Debra - thank you so much! :)Sharyn
Comment from CR Delport
This is a lovely poem that is very well written and make for quite a nice read. You sure have a nice gift to write beautiful poetry. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2013
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This is a lovely poem that is very well written and make for quite a nice read. You sure have a nice gift to write beautiful poetry. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2013
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Bless you CR - thanks so much for reading and enjoying! :)S
