Comment from NicciFaye

Excellent

Excellent...and I don't have any more sixes I am allowed to give you...this was well done and beautifully written...the questions in the poem serve as a great insightful thoughts to ponder on and great appreciation for the final hour.

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2013

Thanks for the virtual six Nicci...glad you like this :) R

Comment from Selina Stambi

Excellent

So very well done, my friend - for some reason it read, in my head, so much like Kipling's "If For Boys"

Your poetic style is inimitable. I wouldn't change anything in it.

Loved the final stanza.... a grand, sweeping conclusion.

All the best in the contest. Hope this one wins.

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2013

Thanks Sonali. Glad you liked this and thanks also for the good wishes!

Comment from Jaq Cee

Exceptional

I thoroughly enjoyed this reflective piece R. I haven't really thought very long about this, but I guess I'd like to think I've left the world with a smile on a few faces.

Very well-written with strong rhymes. Good luck in the contest. :) Jaq xx

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2013

Thanks once again JC for the 6. I'm really chuffed! R

Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep

Exceptional

Thank you for writing a wonderful poem like this containing beautiful sentimen. Your rhyming and lines are very even and have delightful flow. Giddy

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013

Thanks for the generous rating, Giddy. Glad you liked it! R

Comment from ephraim crud, COS.

Exceptional

an excellent and original entry. How refreshing to see here on blandstory of all places. Wish you luck (even though we have one in this contest ourselves :) kind regards Connie and eph

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013

Thanks once again. I'll have a look at your entry too soon! R

Comment from Zinnia48

Excellent

I wanted to give you a 6 star, but apparently I'm out--so here's one virtually. I am constantly in awe of your use of language and metaphor. thanks for sharing your gift. Caroline

PS: I miss your actual photo! c.

 Comment Written 30-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013

The virtual 6 start is more than enough, thanks! :) Might bring back the actual photo, just for you. We'll see :)

Comment from jobax

Excellent

The reflections upon life are cogent.
There are 16 syllables in the first and third lines of the 2nd, 3rd, and 4th verses which could be reduced to 15 with little change of meaning and which to my ear would read a bit smoother.
Also, what matter(s) ... night come(s) reads a bit smoother with the s, again to my ear!
Very nice rhyming!

 Comment Written 30-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013

Thanks jobax for the review as well as for the corrections. I'll consider and ponder them soon! R

Comment from nancyjam

Excellent

I enjoyed reading your quatrains. this is a powerful,
up-beat poem of encouragement for anyone facing
the end of the journey here on earth.
Great message that peThanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 30-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013

Thanks nancyjam. Glad you like it! R

Comment from CrystieCookie999

Excellent

I think this is a good poem to read on a Sunday. I appreciate the lines:
If the book that holds your story has a tale of love within it,
Then the path that lies behind you has been very good to tread.

I don't think you need the comma after "sun is gently sinking,"
but that's up to you.

 Comment Written 30-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013

Thank you very much, glad you like it! I'll make the correction soon. R

Comment from patsypats

Excellent

Very delightful read. Full of vivid imagery with your carefully chosen words. The rhyming scheme adds so much character to your words and the rhythm is smooth and easy to follow:)

 Comment Written 30-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013

Thank you very much, glad you like it! R