Little Poems
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10 total reviews
Comment from Nottoway
Nicely done short poem about abuse.
I am agreement in wishing that abuse would go away. Having worked in the Criminal Justice industry for over 31 years, I have seen and heard firsthand too often that the blame that often the victim is blamed.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2013
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Nicely done short poem about abuse.
I am agreement in wishing that abuse would go away. Having worked in the Criminal Justice industry for over 31 years, I have seen and heard firsthand too often that the blame that often the victim is blamed.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2013
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Thanks Nottoway. You definitely would know. It is a shame the victims are made to believe it's their fault.
Comment from robina1978
The artwork is wonderful indeed and complements your 5A poem very well. We can never ask enough attention for this terrible crime. Excellent use of this form.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2013
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The artwork is wonderful indeed and complements your 5A poem very well. We can never ask enough attention for this terrible crime. Excellent use of this form.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2013
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Thank you Ine.
Comment from ravenblack
Though I really do not like the 5A form, you again are one of the few able to pull it off not sacrificing meaning for the sake if alliteration. Too often, the victims if abuse are vilified becoming abused all over again.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2013
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Though I really do not like the 5A form, you again are one of the few able to pull it off not sacrificing meaning for the sake if alliteration. Too often, the victims if abuse are vilified becoming abused all over again.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2013
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Thank you Ravenback. You are so right that they aren't a difficult thing to do. I wrote 6 of them in 10 minutes. Have only posted 2 so far, but on days I'm busy, they come in handy. I put them in the same category as 3-5-3s or 5-7-5s. Short poems that can be expressive if done properly.
Comment from DRG24
Although I don't quite believe my interpretation of the poem is correct, I still love it!!!! I thank you again for supporting my form and ican happy that you enjoy writing it!!!
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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Although I don't quite believe my interpretation of the poem is correct, I still love it!!!! I thank you again for supporting my form and ican happy that you enjoy writing it!!!
Comment Written 17-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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Thank you DRG.
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Hi Tom,
As a child I survived - so I thank you for this work, and your care. Powerful moments my friend.
Thank you for sharing it.
Maureen
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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Hi Tom,
As a child I survived - so I thank you for this work, and your care. Powerful moments my friend.
Thank you for sharing it.
Maureen
Comment Written 17-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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Thank you Maureen. I hope thongs have improved in the world since then, but I fear not much.
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At least it is not as "hidden" as it used to be. I can take some pride in knowing I broke the cycle...and my own children never lived in fear.
Hugs
Maureen
Comment from sunnilicious
Domestic violence is not something that I promote. This is an excellent haiku with running alliteration in each line. However, I think the issue need to have more light shined on it. Good work.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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Domestic violence is not something that I promote. This is an excellent haiku with running alliteration in each line. However, I think the issue need to have more light shined on it. Good work.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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Thanks sunnilicious. Yes. This was a small forum. The need is great.
Comment from Selina Stambi
Wow!
What a lot you've packed into this.
Author notes: agree - a million times over.
Fabulous alliteration, as always.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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Wow!
What a lot you've packed into this.
Author notes: agree - a million times over.
Fabulous alliteration, as always.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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Thank you Sonali.
Comment from Capricorn30
Abuse summarized in good visual imagery as it makes its physical and psychological trauma known in unattractive dark tones.
Well-penned, alliterative commentary.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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Abuse summarized in good visual imagery as it makes its physical and psychological trauma known in unattractive dark tones.
Well-penned, alliterative commentary.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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Thank you Capricorn.
Comment from NicciFaye
Lovely artwork. You've enhanced it with your poetic words. I see the vision in the art you've created with this well penned poem. Great alliteration in the first line and throughout the entire poem.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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Lovely artwork. You've enhanced it with your poetic words. I see the vision in the art you've created with this well penned poem. Great alliteration in the first line and throughout the entire poem.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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Thanks Nicci. I hope you see alliteration in every line.
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Yes. The first line just stood out to me as I felt you captured the art of the poem in that line. I've updated the comment as well. The entire poem is excellent.
Comment from lorijean
I totally agree with you a strong message in your verse, not only physical but verbal can be just as painful, well done for putting thus out there.....
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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I totally agree with you a strong message in your verse, not only physical but verbal can be just as painful, well done for putting thus out there.....
Comment Written 17-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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Thank you lorijean.
