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Comment from Robin Gilmor
OH no, this poem says it all. My problem is very little exercise. Well said, good rhyme and such a timeless subject. Truly a joy to read and be reminded of
that which I must work on. Eighteen pounds, I'm jealous. Smiles. Robin :)
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2013
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OH no, this poem says it all. My problem is very little exercise. Well said, good rhyme and such a timeless subject. Truly a joy to read and be reminded of
that which I must work on. Eighteen pounds, I'm jealous. Smiles. Robin :)
Comment Written 10-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2013
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Thanks Robin. Just a start.
Comment from 9999pool
Wow! 18 lbs is a feat for the weight watchers program. Congrats. French fries besides fattening also have a lot of harmful cholesterol. Good diet, good health. Obesity can create cardiac problems in future.
Expressed well and penned great too.
Cheerio, for this breezy and light entertaining read.
Cheerio, Ritchie.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2013
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Wow! 18 lbs is a feat for the weight watchers program. Congrats. French fries besides fattening also have a lot of harmful cholesterol. Good diet, good health. Obesity can create cardiac problems in future.
Expressed well and penned great too.
Cheerio, for this breezy and light entertaining read.
Cheerio, Ritchie.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2013
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Thanks Ritchie. I still have them once in a while, French Fries, I mean.
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The best way to good health is some light exercise everyday. If we starve from french fries, life can be dull as certain foods give us the creative spark.
Comment from Selina Stambi
Congratulations, Tom!
What a hectic pace this read went at .... really enjoyed it - made me smile - well done: on all counts!
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2013
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Congratulations, Tom!
What a hectic pace this read went at .... really enjoyed it - made me smile - well done: on all counts!
Comment Written 10-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2013
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Thank you, Sonali. I need well wieners on this one. Want to lose another 70 pounds.
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Ouch - I weigh 100 pounds - there wouldn't be anything left of me, then!!
Comment from sunnilicious
Congratulations... Keeping a good body is heart smart too. Good poem. It is conversational. Nice tone. Good free verse form. Great work.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2013
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Congratulations... Keeping a good body is heart smart too. Good poem. It is conversational. Nice tone. Good free verse form. Great work.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2013
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Thank you Sunnilicious. The battle goes on.
Comment from Preston McWhorter
Hi, Tresichel,
Excellent free verse. It is cute. Not as sophisticated as your usual work. Repetition and alliterations effective. 18 pounds lost? I am envious. Trying to lose weight as Tyler Black said "I feel you man".
Preston
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2013
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Hi, Tresichel,
Excellent free verse. It is cute. Not as sophisticated as your usual work. Repetition and alliterations effective. 18 pounds lost? I am envious. Trying to lose weight as Tyler Black said "I feel you man".
Preston
Comment Written 09-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2013
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Thank you Preston. More Lean Ciusines, less pizza.
Comment from mikenbel
Good free verse! Why is it that the food that is the most satisfying is also what is so bad for us. Congratulations on making positive progress with losing weight!
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2013
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Good free verse! Why is it that the food that is the most satisfying is also what is so bad for us. Congratulations on making positive progress with losing weight!
Comment Written 09-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2013
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Thank you mikenbel. Small steady steps.
Comment from jobax
I like your subject matter. It is quite timely.
I think that opening with a cliche ... see food diet is not strong.
Writing about your diet is good therapy and a good help aid!
Good luck!
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reply by the author on 09-Jun-2013
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I like your subject matter. It is quite timely.
I think that opening with a cliche ... see food diet is not strong.
Writing about your diet is good therapy and a good help aid!
Good luck!
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2013
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Thanks jobaxt.
Comment from Darkhorse555
i wouldnt bother with that weight watchers stuff you no sooner eat it before your hungry again i enjoyed the weight loss god bless
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2013
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i wouldnt bother with that weight watchers stuff you no sooner eat it before your hungry again i enjoyed the weight loss god bless
Comment Written 09-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2013
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Thank you Darkhorse, I know what you do.
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go on tell me i cant wait to hear
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Typo. Meant to say, I know what you mean.
Comment from KarlAnonymous
Very clever poem. Love the opening, set a tone for the rest. Rhyme scheme allowed for an easy flow. And most importantly, good job on the accomplishment.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2013
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Very clever poem. Love the opening, set a tone for the rest. Rhyme scheme allowed for an easy flow. And most importantly, good job on the accomplishment.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2013
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Thank you Karl for a nice review, and encouragement.
Comment from lorijean
Well done just think thin, not nice being on a constant diet, hate to say I am one of those who can eat anything and stay the same... good luck and keep up the good work...
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2013
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Well done just think thin, not nice being on a constant diet, hate to say I am one of those who can eat anything and stay the same... good luck and keep up the good work...
Comment Written 09-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2013
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Thank you lorijean. Your are lucky.
