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Comment from LateBloomer
Hello Treischel,
A timely 5-7-5 poem. You have said a mouthful, especially ... Evil Wind that blows. Good commentary. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2013
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Hello Treischel,
A timely 5-7-5 poem. You have said a mouthful, especially ... Evil Wind that blows. Good commentary. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
Comment Written 03-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2013
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Thank you so much, LateBloomer.
Comment from Glasstruth
Really like the alliteration of T words. For spring you couldn't have picked a better topic. The word evil struck me a bit strange. I know it's destruction, but partly we need to prepare for global warming and build accordingly and where as well. One guy in the news oncw said, "The tornado was a beautiful sight, while being smack in the middle of it, of course in an armored vehicle that looked like a tank. Thanks for sharing. Les
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2013
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Really like the alliteration of T words. For spring you couldn't have picked a better topic. The word evil struck me a bit strange. I know it's destruction, but partly we need to prepare for global warming and build accordingly and where as well. One guy in the news oncw said, "The tornado was a beautiful sight, while being smack in the middle of it, of course in an armored vehicle that looked like a tank. Thanks for sharing. Les
Comment Written 01-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2013
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Thank you Glasstruth. I use it metaphorically. The power of nature is truly awesome.
Comment from Ekim777
The consonance of your words is what holds the poem together. Neatly done but your third line bemuses me. How is the wind evil unless it symbolizes something else. Can mother nature be evil. At best she is indifferent to the ways of men. At any rate, neither nature nor her tornadoes can be labeled evil because they are not malicious. -Ekim777
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2013
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The consonance of your words is what holds the poem together. Neatly done but your third line bemuses me. How is the wind evil unless it symbolizes something else. Can mother nature be evil. At best she is indifferent to the ways of men. At any rate, neither nature nor her tornadoes can be labeled evil because they are not malicious. -Ekim777
Comment Written 01-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2013
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Thank for your comments even though they are quite esoteric. Since this is poetry, I thought a had license in that description. Your point is correct. I describe a wind that causes death and destruction as evil, metaphorically.
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It was Einstein who said, God is sophisticated but never malicious. -Ekim777
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True. He also said every point of view is relative.
Comment from lorijean
I cannot believe that they have suffered a second one, Nature at it's worst. well written my heart goes out the families.....
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2013
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I cannot believe that they have suffered a second one, Nature at it's worst. well written my heart goes out the families.....
Comment Written 01-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2013
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Thank you lorijean. It is incredible that it would happen twice, so soon.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Your words are perfect for this tragic poem. How terrible it must be there to those poor people to see they homes disappear in moments. Dreadful. When I saw your photo there, I thought, oh no, you lived there and took the picture, I am so relieved to know you weren't. Another great piece of writing. xsx Sandra
reply by the author on 23-May-2013
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Your words are perfect for this tragic poem. How terrible it must be there to those poor people to see they homes disappear in moments. Dreadful. When I saw your photo there, I thought, oh no, you lived there and took the picture, I am so relieved to know you weren't. Another great piece of writing. xsx Sandra
Comment Written 23-May-2013
reply by the author on 23-May-2013
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Thank you Sandra. Fortunate it wasn't here, but we do get them here too..
Comment from robina1978
Excellent photo to complement this little poem. I can so relate to this. An absolutely horrible event and even a few children dead I think, I heard.
reply by the author on 23-May-2013
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Excellent photo to complement this little poem. I can so relate to this. An absolutely horrible event and even a few children dead I think, I heard.
Comment Written 23-May-2013
reply by the author on 23-May-2013
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Thank you Ine. Yes, a 4 schools were destroyed and 9 children died. It was most sad and tragic.
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welcome and it wasso tragic. Ine
Comment from Maguy Daoud
Please Mr. Treischel as I said before in my last comment, you need to be so vast by adding verses, your words have so much inner power, so let's your spirit flies again... And of course is only for good critical ( please don't take it personally ) I'm hungry to read more about your words...
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reply by the author on 23-May-2013
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Please Mr. Treischel as I said before in my last comment, you need to be so vast by adding verses, your words have so much inner power, so let's your spirit flies again... And of course is only for good critical ( please don't take it personally ) I'm hungry to read more about your words...
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Comment Written 23-May-2013
reply by the author on 23-May-2013
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Thank you Maguy. Please understand that this was and entrant into a 5-7-5 contest. I'm following contest rules.
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Hello, Ah Ok i got it now, thanks for explanation.
Comment from fishenigma
Nicely put. I like the alliteration and consonance with all the "T's". The multiple meanings of "blows" is very effective as well.
reply by the author on 22-May-2013
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Nicely put. I like the alliteration and consonance with all the "T's". The multiple meanings of "blows" is very effective as well.
Comment Written 22-May-2013
reply by the author on 22-May-2013
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Thank you for the wonderful perception fish enigma.
Comment from Sararb
This is so true of the dreaded tornado. That was such a tragic thing that happen in Oklahoma. That is only 131 miles from the city of Wichita Falls, Texas my husband's hometown. They had a similar storm a few years ago that killed a lot of people there. We visited afterwards and the devastation was enormous. Sara :)
reply by the author on 22-May-2013
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This is so true of the dreaded tornado. That was such a tragic thing that happen in Oklahoma. That is only 131 miles from the city of Wichita Falls, Texas my husband's hometown. They had a similar storm a few years ago that killed a lot of people there. We visited afterwards and the devastation was enormous. Sara :)
Comment Written 22-May-2013
reply by the author on 22-May-2013
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Those things are so terrible. It's hard to imagine.
Comment from mikenbel
Excellent haiku! I was wondering when I would start seeing an outpouring for the tragedy in Oklahoma. Very well written, with good imagery.
reply by the author on 22-May-2013
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Excellent haiku! I was wondering when I would start seeing an outpouring for the tragedy in Oklahoma. Very well written, with good imagery.
Comment Written 22-May-2013
reply by the author on 22-May-2013
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Thank you Mikenbel. It was so tragic.
