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Comment from mrsmajor
I love the relationship you have with your Grandson, it's a wonderful thing, since there are so many children that do not have such a pleasure, this was a well thought out and written poem, interesting descriptions for one that may not have had the enjoyment of have been involved in such an experiences..It was a pleasure..Thanks for sharing.
Warm Hugs,
Victoria
reply by the author on 09-May-2013
I love the relationship you have with your Grandson, it's a wonderful thing, since there are so many children that do not have such a pleasure, this was a well thought out and written poem, interesting descriptions for one that may not have had the enjoyment of have been involved in such an experiences..It was a pleasure..Thanks for sharing.
Warm Hugs,
Victoria
Comment Written 09-May-2013
reply by the author on 09-May-2013
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Thanks again Victotia. Your warm thoughts are well appreciated.
You are so welcome, this one was a real pleasure...Your descriptions were well written, I felt like I was there..
Hugs,
Victoria
Comment from Hawaiian Mermaid
Aloha Treischel,
Being part Cherokee Indian I can appreciate the cave, cliffs and sketching on the rocks. You had a great memory with your younger one and a great poem as a tribute.
Aloha, Ginger
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reply by the author on 08-May-2013
Aloha Treischel,
Being part Cherokee Indian I can appreciate the cave, cliffs and sketching on the rocks. You had a great memory with your younger one and a great poem as a tribute.
Aloha, Ginger
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Comment Written 07-May-2013
reply by the author on 08-May-2013
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Thank you Ginger. My Grandson is also part Cherokee. His Great Grandma Rose is 100%., on my son-in-laws side.
Comment from Sararb
What a lovely adventure for you and your grandson, This will be a memory that he will always hold dear. You did a wonderful job writing this poem. It flowed so smoothly, and the added bonus was a picture of the cave that was a part of your special day. Sararb :)
reply by the author on 06-May-2013
What a lovely adventure for you and your grandson, This will be a memory that he will always hold dear. You did a wonderful job writing this poem. It flowed so smoothly, and the added bonus was a picture of the cave that was a part of your special day. Sararb :)
Comment Written 06-May-2013
reply by the author on 06-May-2013
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Thank you Sara.
Comment from Robin Gilmor
CAVES, I am so scared for you both. I'm telling Grandma. Learn to fly fish together, play golf or tennis together. Stay out of caves. Your verse is delightful, and teaching your grandson a true. treasure. Well written, as always
and a delightful read. NO more caves!!!!! Robin :)
reply by the author on 06-May-2013
CAVES, I am so scared for you both. I'm telling Grandma. Learn to fly fish together, play golf or tennis together. Stay out of caves. Your verse is delightful, and teaching your grandson a true. treasure. Well written, as always
and a delightful read. NO more caves!!!!! Robin :)
Comment Written 06-May-2013
reply by the author on 06-May-2013
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Thanks Robin, No, No, don't tell!
Comment from Indie Skreet
well done Tom, this is wonderful. Quite a few 5-7-5's in one methinks and as I am not one for rules, I love it even more lol, Indie
reply by the author on 06-May-2013
well done Tom, this is wonderful. Quite a few 5-7-5's in one methinks and as I am not one for rules, I love it even more lol, Indie
Comment Written 06-May-2013
reply by the author on 06-May-2013
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Thanks Indie.gotta think outside the box.
Comment from GracieAnn
Treischel, this 5-7-5 is remarkably executed in a logical, readable, and pleasurable way. The words have depth of meaning and demonstrates the time honored passing treasures from generation to generation. GracieAnn
reply by the author on 06-May-2013
Treischel, this 5-7-5 is remarkably executed in a logical, readable, and pleasurable way. The words have depth of meaning and demonstrates the time honored passing treasures from generation to generation. GracieAnn
Comment Written 06-May-2013
reply by the author on 06-May-2013
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Thank you Gracie Ann. I appreciate those thoughtful comments.
Comment from Callyope
I like this in that I can see the inner boy in you... I have 3 boys myself, such adventurous little guys. They certainly bring out my inner child. If there was a hiccup, it would be the second verse of the last stanza, having 6 syllables instead of 7... Great poem, boys being boys :)
Cordially,
Callyope
reply by the author on 06-May-2013
I like this in that I can see the inner boy in you... I have 3 boys myself, such adventurous little guys. They certainly bring out my inner child. If there was a hiccup, it would be the second verse of the last stanza, having 6 syllables instead of 7... Great poem, boys being boys :)
Cordially,
Callyope
Comment Written 05-May-2013
reply by the author on 06-May-2013
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Thank you Callyope.oops your right. Infixed it. Thanks for the catch.
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Your quite welcome. I know how easy it is to miss a tiny little oops. The mind knows it by heart, making the eye skip right over the imperfection. Glad I could help!
Callyope