Comment from yonashalom

Excellent

This poem reminds me of the days when I was in church and felt I shouldn't leave. Those quiet times in hospital chapels. Brings back memories with such few words. :) Thanks. I could use some quiet time. ~Yona

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2013

Thank you Yona. Can't we all.

reply by yonashalom on 17-Apr-2013

:))

Comment from Robin Gilmor

Excellent

With all your pictures you should have one of your own....It is now expected. :) Good write, with a good message that is certainly clear to the reader without
and pondering. thank you for sharing. Smiles. Robin :)

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013

Thanks Robin. I'm flattered, you think so.

Comment from Sararb

Excellent

This poem says a lot about a person with a lot of things he needs to confess and pray about. Your poem said a lot in just a few words. I like the style and format of this one. Sararb

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013

Thanks Sara, I like playing with this format.

Comment from NicciFaye

Excellent

For a 1-6-1 poem, which I haven't written yet, this is excellent and to the point. Nothing bad to comment about, for I love the Lord and understand exactly what is being said.

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013

Thank you Nicci. So glad you relate to it.

reply by NicciFaye on 16-Apr-2013

Welcome. This is my second day on here and I can't get off. I want to try it out for a few more days before I upgrade and post some of my work. Am loving this FanStory thus far. Look forward to more of your work. Please check back later for some of mine. God bless

reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013

Welcome to the site. If you love poetry this is the place to learn and grow.

Comment from Gungalo

Excellent

Stay
your sinful soul's not right today
Pray

And to stay until it is? That could be forever and a day. Hope you are ready for the long stay, Tom. Still, it's a wonderful write.

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013

Thank you Gungalo. A long smile!

reply by Gungalo on 16-Apr-2013

Smiling at you Tom.

Comment from Indie Skreet

Excellent

well I could 'try' Tom, but has never helped me much in the past. Me thinks God has gone on strike where I'm concerned and maybe permanently! I am assuming this is to do with the bombastic event of the Marathon and if so, I would never make light of that, so with that in mind, I pray for the victims and their families in my own way, best Indie

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013

Thanks Indie, yes I thought it appropriate based on current events.
PS, no one is hopeless, ;-)

reply by Indie Skreet on 16-Apr-2013

well Tom, how very charitable! lol xx

Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

There are a few of people out there who ought to think of praying for forgiveness after yesterday's stupid outrage. I would hope, also, they didn't get it either! You did this really well, 1-6-1, I have never tried any of those. It just goes to show how much you can say with so few words. :) xsx Sandra

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013

Thanks Sandra, your so right!

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

The not really obvious AAA rhyme scheme is an additional interesting aspect of this brief but meaningful haiku-esque poem.

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013

Thanks Bill. Glad you noticed.