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Along the Jericho Road

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Murder Mystery

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Comment from jadapenn
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A breather chapter which just makes you wonder in which direction you're headed with the bit of conversation between the priests and then blondie Shaw. I hope they have her up for obstruction of the law at the end. She might just be walking off with the biggest clue yet. Well written. Luv jada


 Comment Written 21-Jul-2013


reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
    Thanks so much, Jada. I love your insights into the psychological aspects of this story. XXX Bev
Comment from Realist101
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Hi Bev...I need to get this book together so I can read it from the start. This chapter seems flawlessly written. ONE idea? For drama...and effect, I would add the word 'real' in front of 'pain'/last sentence. :D Beautiful work. x. susan

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2013


reply by the author on 17-Apr-2013
    Hi, Susan. That's a great idea. Amazing how one word can change the feel of something! Another reason I love getting reviews. Thank you, my friend, for your awesome and generous review. Hugs, Bev
Comment from Pearl Edwards
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I haven't read previous chapters but this one certainly held my interest and I will look forward to reading more. Darcy sounds like an interesting character, and this conversation between the priests also was well done.

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2013


reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
    Hi, Pearl

    Thanks so much for stopping by to read my chapter. I appreciate your delightful review very much!

    Warm regards, Bev
Comment from mizzkris20
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Your dialogue is excellent! The characters are realistic. You are a great writer and I enjoyed reading this addition. Great job and good luck with future writes

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2013


reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
    Thank you so much, mizzkris. I sure appreciate your encouraging and generous review! Warm regards, Bev
Comment from Selina Stambi
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At that moment ... or ... at that particular moment ... sounds better than at the moment

Bev dear, this read just gets better and better. The dialogue is just fabulous.

I'm dying to know what's next!

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2013


reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
    Thank you so much, Sonali, for this awesome review! I really appreciate your support and generosity. And I think your suggestion is a good one - change made!

    Hugs, Bev
Comment from Maustin
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Your work continues to unravel into ongoing intrigue with strong anticipation, after you finish the latest chapter. The dialogue continues to be very believeable throughout. It flows well. Your storyline does too. The character development is also strong and realistic. Great job, as always. Enjoyed.

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2013


reply by the author on 15-Apr-2013
    Thank you so much, Miracle. I sure appreciate your generous and supportive review. So good to hear from you. And, thanks so much for that generous six! Hugs, Bev
reply by Maustin on 15-Apr-2013
    So welcome, Bev. Just been busy writing, reading, organizing, and etc. I plan to try to get on FS at least once a week or every other week. Very good work. Keep on going, Bev. Hugs and blessings to you, always.... :)
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
    Thanks so much, sweetie. XXX Bev
reply by Maustin on 16-Apr-2013
    So welcome, Bev :)
Comment from Joy Graham
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Another fine chapter of this story, Bev. Well written as usual. This new gal is annoying me. I want her to hand over this evidence so we can get on with the business of catching this killer. Great suspense and drama! I'd like to read the next chapter now, please. Can't wait -lol!

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2013


reply by the author on 15-Apr-2013
    Joy, thank you so much for this truly gracious and generous review. I'm glad my contempt for people like Darcy came through in this chapter. And you are always so generous in your encouragement. That means a lot to me.

    Hugs, Bev
Comment from Nanette Mary
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Hullo Writingfdundimension ....

This certainly is an unusual piece of writing with a
not-very-polite ending. However, from a story point of view, I look forward to reading further chapters.
From ... Nanette Mary.

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2013


reply by the author on 15-Apr-2013
    Thank you for stopping by to read, Nanette Mary. I appreciate your generosity! Warmest regards, Bev
Comment from Righteous Riter
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The writer had my attention from the start. The topic or God alone makes me eager to read. I was thinking this chapter was taking me one place and I ended up somewhere else. I reminds me of how you think you are going one place and God takes you to another place. I like the transitioning in this chapter and how the writer brings the reader to a stressed released ending.

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2013


reply by the author on 15-Apr-2013
    Thank you for a very thorough and generous review, RR. I am most appreciative of your encouraging words. Warmest regards, Bev
Comment from Patrick G Cox
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Hi Bev,

Hmmm, I rather think this b-1-tch of a niece is about to cause the case to go rather pear shaped and perhaps even let the murderer off the hook.

Stupid, stupid, stupid.

Good chapter, I didn't spot any hiccoughs.

Patrick

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2013


reply by the author on 15-Apr-2013
    Thanks, Patrick. I really appreciate the generous review. Warmest regards, Bev