SIR PERCY'S DEMISE
Historical Fiction49 total reviews
Comment from RJ
This is a avery good contest entry. I feel for Sir Percival and he clutches her favour and knowing he won't see Anne again. There is nothing to change. Good luck in the contest. RJ
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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This is a avery good contest entry. I feel for Sir Percival and he clutches her favour and knowing he won't see Anne again. There is nothing to change. Good luck in the contest. RJ
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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Thank you RJ, for your kind review and good wishes... Mel.
Comment from J. Dark
This is a superb entry to the 55 word content. It is packed full of charm, drama and passion. I really enjoyed the way it ties in with history.
I wish you luck for the competition - it is a fine entry.
Kindest of regards,
Julie :-)
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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This is a superb entry to the 55 word content. It is packed full of charm, drama and passion. I really enjoyed the way it ties in with history.
I wish you luck for the competition - it is a fine entry.
Kindest of regards,
Julie :-)
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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Thank you Julie, once again and for the good wishes. It will be interesting to see the results... Regards Mel.
Comment from Jacq77
This is a very clever and original idea using only 55 words. You have done it well, telling a lot in those few words, which evoke great imagery. I hope you do well in the contest. Very well done!
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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This is a very clever and original idea using only 55 words. You have done it well, telling a lot in those few words, which evoke great imagery. I hope you do well in the contest. Very well done!
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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Thank you very much Jacq77, for your kind review and good wishes... Mel.
Comment from trampwatch
very good. It is difficult to write a story in 55 words. you've managed perfectly. you deserve to do well in the contest. well done. shame the lucky charm wasnt lucky though.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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very good. It is difficult to write a story in 55 words. you've managed perfectly. you deserve to do well in the contest. well done. shame the lucky charm wasnt lucky though.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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Thank you tranpwatch, for your kind review and good wishes. Mel.
Comment from vkmack
What a brilliant idea! Historical fiction would never have occurred to me, and you did a beautiful job. This was a tough topic--Agincourt and once more into the breach--but you just did great. I'm intrigued and want to know more. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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What a brilliant idea! Historical fiction would never have occurred to me, and you did a beautiful job. This was a tough topic--Agincourt and once more into the breach--but you just did great. I'm intrigued and want to know more. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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Thank you vkmack, for your kind review and good wishes. I have ideas for further stories so in the future I'm sure you will see more... Mel.
Comment from jaeladarling
Awww, such a sad story. :( But it is well written, and I like the subject you chose. History is always a good foundation. Nice work, and good luck to you!
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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Awww, such a sad story. :( But it is well written, and I like the subject you chose. History is always a good foundation. Nice work, and good luck to you!
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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Thank you jaeladarling, for your kind review and good wishes... Mel.
Comment from mizzkris20
Wow! This is a very short but powerful flash fiction story. With only 55 words you have managed to give a beginning, middle, and end. The imagery you use is good
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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Wow! This is a very short but powerful flash fiction story. With only 55 words you have managed to give a beginning, middle, and end. The imagery you use is good
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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Thank you mizzkris20, for your kind review... Mel.
Comment from writing2inspire
This is a sad tale which is hard to portray in 55 words. You start out with a formal declaration of who the main character is, but it doesn't carry the emotional content of a man dying. In the second sentence you wrote: "Fighting the French and defending the Great Warrior King Henry V. I fell in mortal distress" which needs a comma after "V" which is the end of a participial phrase. The First Knight must have been gallant to the bone, thinking of his fair lady's sorrow with his dying breath. Interesting topic.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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This is a sad tale which is hard to portray in 55 words. You start out with a formal declaration of who the main character is, but it doesn't carry the emotional content of a man dying. In the second sentence you wrote: "Fighting the French and defending the Great Warrior King Henry V. I fell in mortal distress" which needs a comma after "V" which is the end of a participial phrase. The First Knight must have been gallant to the bone, thinking of his fair lady's sorrow with his dying breath. Interesting topic.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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Thank you for your review. I changed the full stop. As regards the rest, 55 words means there have to be compromises. I think I have got it about right and have already spent far too much time on it. Mel.
Comment from ZBaron
What a well done 55 word story. I've never read such short historical fiction, especially a piece that is effective as this. A beginning, middle, and end makes this a well-written, complete story. Good luck with this great entry.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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What a well done 55 word story. I've never read such short historical fiction, especially a piece that is effective as this. A beginning, middle, and end makes this a well-written, complete story. Good luck with this great entry.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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Thank you ZBaron, for your kind review... Mel.
Comment from MidnightWriter4U
A very good story of Sir Percy. I found the information about the embroidered ribbon most interesting. The artwork choice is perfect for this short story. Great read!
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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A very good story of Sir Percy. I found the information about the embroidered ribbon most interesting. The artwork choice is perfect for this short story. Great read!
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
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Thank you for a kind review, I'm glad you enjoyed the story... Mel.
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You are welcome. MN :)
