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Comment from quicksandyamurray
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You wrote an interesting poem. It sounds as if you have had a lot of experience with internet dating. It appears some not-so-good experiences were had. You were very thorough and a treasure trove of information for the beginner. I found that your fourth stanza didn't follow the rhythm of the first three, making it a little awkward. Your fifth stanza didn't follow either. It was rather abrupt in length in comparison. The first three stanzas, though rambling, were smooth and rhymed pleasingly. It is a decent entry.

 Comment Written 23-Mar-2013


reply by the author on 23-Mar-2013
    This contest did not allow for author's notes. I always write my poetry with each line having the same number of syllables--in this case 8. Usually, when contest permits, I make a notation that each line has the same number of syllables. This is a bug-a-boo with me and I stick to it. I dislike poetry that is uneven. Regarding length--the contest limited all entries to 200 words. So my premise is--yes, internet dating can work if a person is careful, weeds out the players, and hopefully meets someone nice. Several couples I know have met and married through internet dating. As for me--I don't want to remarry. Nuff said about all that!
reply by quicksandyamurray on 04-Apr-2013
    I must say, you are a good sport. I'm not a critical reader as far as structure goes. I am more the meat of the subject type and usually an open-minded sort. I apologize for the scruffy attitude. After having reread my response to you i had to ask myself, who wrote that? Certainly not my usual self.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
    No worries. We all have our days and our preferences. :)
Comment from seewhatimwritingnow
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LOL- Neat poem with all the 'to do' and 'not to do' instructions. I think buying a horse online would be a lot easier! LOL Great write- I enjoyed this. Best of luck in the contest! Betty

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2013


reply by the author on 17-Mar-2013
    Thank you, Betty. As I said--it's a minefield. Ha! I do know couples who have met AND some who have married after meeting on line who just adore each other. Internet puts people together who are at great distances that otherwise would never have known about each other.
Comment from poseytoon
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Oh my gosh! How great is this? You can take somehting so mundane and create an interesting and pertinent essay and it is poem as well. Very, very good job. Good luck in the contest

 Comment Written 15-Mar-2013


reply by the author on 15-Mar-2013
    Thank you, Poseytoon. i appreciate your nice review and 6 stars so much.
Comment from Sararb
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I love your poem of online love. This has gotten to be a big thing, but it is still a dangerous thing, because you never know what you might run into. It really isn't a safe way to meet someone. Great job that you did with this poem. Sararb

 Comment Written 15-Mar-2013


reply by the author on 15-Mar-2013
    Hi, Sararb. Have to be careful in any case, nowadays. Hope you are well and thank you for your nice review.
Comment from Bobbi22
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Your poem takes the reader through the steps of online dating and offers some great advice - definitely not for cowards. Very well written. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 14-Mar-2013


reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
    Thank you, RightPics. I appreciate your astute review.
Comment from RodG
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What a delightful way to give would- be on- line darters advice. Mostly, you are serious, but I see some droll humor here, too. The Speaker is definitely talking from experience. The problem with longer poems with this many rhyming couplets is that the pattern gets stale quickly. RodG

 Comment Written 14-Mar-2013


reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
    Thanks for your review, Rod.
Comment from GarthL
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It certainly is a world phenomenon that shows no signs of slowing and is fraught with many dangers. With due diligence performed I'm sure there are many examples of it all working out beautifully for all concerned and there are some examples even here on fs I'm aware of where that's the case. It's a good entry Marilyn, the rhyming couplet scheme works well and the read is fluid. Good luck in the contest!
Health'n'happiness to you and yours, Garth

 Comment Written 14-Mar-2013


reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
    Hi Garth, Thank you. I appreciate your nice review.
reply by GarthL on 14-Mar-2013
    Good luck!!!
Comment from Candyjean
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This is such a great message in the form of a poem. You had a lot to say and I think it will sink in to many. I had a friend who's first attempt at Internet dating went horribly wrong, but she did not give up and bachelor # 2 is now married.

 Comment Written 14-Mar-2013


reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
    Hi Candyjean--thank you for your nice review. I'm glad it worked out for your friend.
Comment from janalma
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Well, I guess this is good advice. Never tried it. Seems like it would be dangerous even with all of these things covered. Your poem rhymes well and has no forced lines, or spag that I saw. I know little about poetry but this seems well-written as a cautionary bit.

 Comment Written 14-Mar-2013


reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
    Thank you so much, janalma, for your helpful review.