Plant Matters
Conversational Plant Matter Lamenting Over...31 total reviews
Comment from BrilliantQuill
A clever little work. So much is done in the field of anthropomorphism, but plants are never given their own personalities...their own souls. Yet since they are in fact living entities it's fun to imagine that they would feel human like emotions.
Since plants are not capable of active movement or expression, we tend to neglect them more than we would our fauna friends. Plants die all the time because of humans, so we deserve this searing indictment.
I like how you made the tone of this humorous. You very easily could've made it morose because it does deal with death, but handling death in such a dark way all the time has become cliche.
I did feel like the pacing was a little choppy, but perhaps that's what you were going for. I'm not sure exactly how to improve it at this point, but the rhythm reminded me of a car that kept starting and stopping.
All in all this is a minor qualm, however, and I really enjoyed this work.
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reply by the author on 07-Apr-2013
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A clever little work. So much is done in the field of anthropomorphism, but plants are never given their own personalities...their own souls. Yet since they are in fact living entities it's fun to imagine that they would feel human like emotions.
Since plants are not capable of active movement or expression, we tend to neglect them more than we would our fauna friends. Plants die all the time because of humans, so we deserve this searing indictment.
I like how you made the tone of this humorous. You very easily could've made it morose because it does deal with death, but handling death in such a dark way all the time has become cliche.
I did feel like the pacing was a little choppy, but perhaps that's what you were going for. I'm not sure exactly how to improve it at this point, but the rhythm reminded me of a car that kept starting and stopping.
All in all this is a minor qualm, however, and I really enjoyed this work.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2013
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LOL Well thats a pretty good analysis then. Many thanks.
There was supposed to be a lamenting ebb and flow with this but not without some cutting comments so I very much welcome your warm comments. I'm a rhymer by trade and free verse NOT my forte...I always find too much to say, but THANKS for your honesty and glad you enjoyed my post.
Cheers P
Comment from Dougspoetry
A somewhat lengthy parhment sharing the laments of doomed foliage. No doubt the Princess of darkness (at least in the plant world) derived some pleasure from writing this piece. LOL Another great write to add to Your Imense collection of Masterpieces. Hope all is well!
God Bless!
Doug
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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A somewhat lengthy parhment sharing the laments of doomed foliage. No doubt the Princess of darkness (at least in the plant world) derived some pleasure from writing this piece. LOL Another great write to add to Your Imense collection of Masterpieces. Hope all is well!
God Bless!
Doug
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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Awww Douglas, the plants thank you my friend.
I DID derive pleasure from this piece and to be honest I DO have a few that grow.
Mainly the cactii. LMAO
Lubbed your review. Enjoy your day. Now what's this about masterpieces? Speak for yourself holy man. (I meant that with respect and it was said with my closet humour Douglas...but of course you knew that!)
Cheers P
xoxo
Comment from Jean Lutz
I've heard that talking to plants help them thrive, but it would appear yours are talking back. My favorite plants grow right here on FanStory in the form of words. Indeed they grow. Here's hoping the judges award you with fruit for your labors.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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I've heard that talking to plants help them thrive, but it would appear yours are talking back. My favorite plants grow right here on FanStory in the form of words. Indeed they grow. Here's hoping the judges award you with fruit for your labors.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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Haha, yes I just wish I knew what they really said.
It would probably not be printable Jean! LOL
Thanks for a sterling review.
Cheers P
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Comment from Frankeddy
The Free verse is not my favorite because of no rhyme or humor...well.?
I was attracted to the well chosen picture, after re-reading and visualizing the
plants thoughts it makes a lot of sense,so well worth the rating.
Have a great day. _9 C here yesterday but warm sunshine.
Spring is close
Frankeddy
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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The Free verse is not my favorite because of no rhyme or humor...well.?
I was attracted to the well chosen picture, after re-reading and visualizing the
plants thoughts it makes a lot of sense,so well worth the rating.
Have a great day. _9 C here yesterday but warm sunshine.
Spring is close
Frankeddy
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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Haha, nice that I can get you to read a free verse Ed.
Many thanks, this is NOT my normal genre as you know.
Back to normal soon I promise.
Hugs to Marg.
Cheers P
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Comment from Jacq77
Absolutely brilliant! If I had any sixes left I would give it. I loved this clever, witty poem from start to finish, and cackled loudly throughout. But I don't think I'll ever look at my garden hose in the same way EVER again. :-) I do feel for your plants though. Not that I'm a gardener either - this almost describes me, although I (usually) catch them in the nick of time, when they are just beginning to wilt.
You have an amazing way of stringing words together that just blows my mind away. Excellent. Superb. What more can I say?
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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Absolutely brilliant! If I had any sixes left I would give it. I loved this clever, witty poem from start to finish, and cackled loudly throughout. But I don't think I'll ever look at my garden hose in the same way EVER again. :-) I do feel for your plants though. Not that I'm a gardener either - this almost describes me, although I (usually) catch them in the nick of time, when they are just beginning to wilt.
You have an amazing way of stringing words together that just blows my mind away. Excellent. Superb. What more can I say?
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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LOL Absolutely brilliant review thanks so much.
Free verse is NOT my forte but I like to go out on a shaky limb, OFTEN. Haha
Cheers and thanks again
Closet
Comment from charlyann
Fucking Brilliant ..your sure can write a poem, I wouldn't even know where to begin, it looks like so much work, it's perfect, just marvelous..your writing voice has such personality...erections and beggars and sods, oh my
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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Fucking Brilliant ..your sure can write a poem, I wouldn't even know where to begin, it looks like so much work, it's perfect, just marvelous..your writing voice has such personality...erections and beggars and sods, oh my
Comment Written 15-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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Aww thanks charly brown!
I appreciate your observational skills and bleeding ears.
This was a long winded eulogy. LOL
Be in to see you tomorrow...
Cheers Meisty
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PS Thanks for the super sixer review, MOST appreciated, especially when free versing is NOT my thanggggg.
Comment from Gary D. Hardy
Well done with this one! It is very thought provoking. I know it's a well written piece on plant demise that I half way share. This is thought provoking because it could also relate to our family members in nursing Homes that seem to be cast aside as well! Just speaking from some recent experiences! Great job!
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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Well done with this one! It is very thought provoking. I know it's a well written piece on plant demise that I half way share. This is thought provoking because it could also relate to our family members in nursing Homes that seem to be cast aside as well! Just speaking from some recent experiences! Great job!
Comment Written 15-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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Thanks Gary, I can see the relevance here...very sad.
Nice to know my plants can reach these heights and grab the reader in different ways. Especially seeing as though they are well and truly on their way out...and down. Haha
Cheers P
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Comment from Connie C
Well, as you know Sweetie, I am no expert in free verse, so I will give this my best shot as a reviewer. First, I like that you combine both sentences and phrases--makes for a more interesting read to me. Second, I love how you personify the poor dying plants. Personification is so fun to write and to read. Just the freedom to personify anything is a kick. Third, there are so many brilliant little Closet-like phrases or expressions in here. For example, the part about the "forty foot half-firm erection" is so like something you might write, which, of course, is always a delight to read. Fourth, you always succeed at a good play on words, e.g., "rotting in earthen pots now just rotten earth in pots." I think you will do very well in the contest with another of your original, clever, and humorous postings. You know I always want to give you a sixer, but I ran out way early in the week. I really must learn to spread those babies out.
Love ya and your poem too,
Connie xoxoxo
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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Well, as you know Sweetie, I am no expert in free verse, so I will give this my best shot as a reviewer. First, I like that you combine both sentences and phrases--makes for a more interesting read to me. Second, I love how you personify the poor dying plants. Personification is so fun to write and to read. Just the freedom to personify anything is a kick. Third, there are so many brilliant little Closet-like phrases or expressions in here. For example, the part about the "forty foot half-firm erection" is so like something you might write, which, of course, is always a delight to read. Fourth, you always succeed at a good play on words, e.g., "rotting in earthen pots now just rotten earth in pots." I think you will do very well in the contest with another of your original, clever, and humorous postings. You know I always want to give you a sixer, but I ran out way early in the week. I really must learn to spread those babies out.
Love ya and your poem too,
Connie xoxoxo
Comment Written 15-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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Awww thanks Connie girl...I'll honestly take whatever I get on this because I am JUST not confident with free versing...I find the biggest problem where to stop my line lengths so the hint of rhyme is there but NOT too overpowering or structured. Thats BIG for the little ol' closet you know? Yep, I think you know.
Loved you review and you simply mustn't give me a sixer all the time...unless of course you think I deserve it of course. Haha
Share your sixers around, you KNOW I value whether people like it through their comments more so than ANYTHING else.
Invisible rankings are SO much better...you know the ones that come from the words in review...not the stars attached.
LUB you.
Hugs...and kisses...to you.
A little wave to Bill ~
Cheers and thanks a bunch from Down Under...
Phillippa xoxoxo
Comment from ephraim crud, COS.
hydroponics! there's your answer.
i use it all the time and it's never
failed to produce a bumper crop!
i'm a lawnmower. i cut grass all day!
another fabulous write, me Closet,
done with your usual wisely wit and
word choices. thank you for sharing,
Phillippa, and muchly good luck!
hugs, xxx, ephin eph.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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hydroponics! there's your answer.
i use it all the time and it's never
failed to produce a bumper crop!
i'm a lawnmower. i cut grass all day!
another fabulous write, me Closet,
done with your usual wisely wit and
word choices. thank you for sharing,
Phillippa, and muchly good luck!
hugs, xxx, ephin eph.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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Haha..you too funny...been there, tried that, nearly burnt the house down. LMAO
I'm kidding...keep the crops OUTSIDE.
Cheers on the ephing cheeky response.
Hugs
P
xoxo
Comment from strandregs
It's cerainly creative: plants talking, and free of verse:
verse plant grower ever star of the month.
and funny yes funny if won't call the RSPCPlant murderer controller.Z.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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It's cerainly creative: plants talking, and free of verse:
verse plant grower ever star of the month.
and funny yes funny if won't call the RSPCPlant murderer controller.Z.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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What? Plant murderer?
How many years is that worth?
Just as long as they don't put me in charge of the prison garden.
I could be whipping up a few more plant eulogies. Hahaha
Thanks Z...
Cheers P
xo
