Little Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 19 "Sun and Moon"Small and Specialty Poems
5 total reviews
Comment from elliejean
I love the picture. Day merging with the night. I love the author notes. I thought I was the only one to see it. Day and night share the sky for just a little time. But night is great and we look forward to our dreams most of the time. Great work.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2013
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I love the picture. Day merging with the night. I love the author notes. I thought I was the only one to see it. Day and night share the sky for just a little time. But night is great and we look forward to our dreams most of the time. Great work.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2013
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Thank you elliejean, glad you see it too.
Comment from mauial
As I read this across the first lind all the way across and the second line, this doesn't make sense:
When moon brings out her mellow beams
With brilliant hues of orange and red
Reading It the other two ways is okay.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2013
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As I read this across the first lind all the way across and the second line, this doesn't make sense:
When moon brings out her mellow beams
With brilliant hues of orange and red
Reading It the other two ways is okay.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2013
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Boy, that's pretty harsh. I guess you reject the concept that the sun is low and the moon is in the sky. They are both present, that's the whole premise.
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I know that's the premise, but the way it reads it makes the moon seem to be brilliant with hues of orange and red, instead of the sun.
Comment from Galactia
Thank you for entering this contest.
beautiful written Trigee very well written, done in perfection, A seperate story in part 1 and 2, joining together to make a complete sceene of the evening sky, perfect rhyme scheeme of abab, 8 syllable count across all lines and delightful presentation.
great job and GL
Regards
Tia
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2013
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Thank you for entering this contest.
beautiful written Trigee very well written, done in perfection, A seperate story in part 1 and 2, joining together to make a complete sceene of the evening sky, perfect rhyme scheeme of abab, 8 syllable count across all lines and delightful presentation.
great job and GL
Regards
Tia
Comment Written 18-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2013
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Wow! What a pleasant surprise to get the awesome rating, thank you.
Comment from RedGryffyn
Good poem. It was interesting and a nice approach to a trigee. You incorporated a large amount of description into such a small piece. Imagery was present and you brought this poem to life. No spelling or grammatical errors. The format is correct. No suggestions perfect as is. Thanks for sharing and best of luck.
Red Gryffyn
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2013
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Good poem. It was interesting and a nice approach to a trigee. You incorporated a large amount of description into such a small piece. Imagery was present and you brought this poem to life. No spelling or grammatical errors. The format is correct. No suggestions perfect as is. Thanks for sharing and best of luck.
Red Gryffyn
Comment Written 18-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2013
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Thank you Red
Comment from pbroussard209
I have never seen a poem like this and it looks very difficult. I'm glad I read the directions on how to read it first so I could get the whole picture. I think you did a wonderful job.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2013
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I have never seen a poem like this and it looks very difficult. I'm glad I read the directions on how to read it first so I could get the whole picture. I think you did a wonderful job.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2013
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Thank you pbroussard
