Little Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 22 "Gentleman's Kiss"Small and Specialty Poems
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Comment from Gert sherwood
Good day to you Treischel
What fun it was to read you Triolet Poem .
What are you trying to steal a kiss from you wife
Gert
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2013
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Good day to you Treischel
What fun it was to read you Triolet Poem .
What are you trying to steal a kiss from you wife
Gert
Comment Written 22-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2013
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Always. Never enough of those. Thanks Gert.
Comment from ravenblack
how? it depends on his breath and if he just ate a worm. of course, by gentleman, you mean the pictured bird. if not, mouthwash and no tongue.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2013
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how? it depends on his breath and if he just ate a worm. of course, by gentleman, you mean the pictured bird. if not, mouthwash and no tongue.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2013
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Hah! Now that's an evaluation!
Comment from Righteous Riter
This photo rocks. The words bring the photo to life as the message is clear and understandable. The rhyming is good. This piece flows well as the harmony is where it needs to be. This piece captured my attention from the beginning and held it to the end. Good work.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2013
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This photo rocks. The words bring the photo to life as the message is clear and understandable. The rhyming is good. This piece flows well as the harmony is where it needs to be. This piece captured my attention from the beginning and held it to the end. Good work.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2013
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Thank you Righteous. Appreciate your I put.
Comment from josieg521
Very victorian and sweet. I can see a woman in a long flowing gown holding an unbrella over her head and a valiant knight kissing her hand. Rhyming and timing were right on point. Good job.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2013
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Very victorian and sweet. I can see a woman in a long flowing gown holding an unbrella over her head and a valiant knight kissing her hand. Rhyming and timing were right on point. Good job.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2013
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Very adroit. thank you josieg
Comment from Shirlena
Aww look at the little birdies. You can beat a nature poem and the Triolet style of poetry compliments your choice of verbiage in this peice.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2013
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Aww look at the little birdies. You can beat a nature poem and the Triolet style of poetry compliments your choice of verbiage in this peice.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2013
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Thanks Shirlena.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This well-written, thought-provoking triolet reminds me of how, in my day anyway, the pressure--up to a point--was all on the boy. HE had to be the one to get up the nerve to ask a girl out, to kiss her (or not). Then, if he wanted to go too far, the pressure was on the girl to say "NO"!
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2013
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This well-written, thought-provoking triolet reminds me of how, in my day anyway, the pressure--up to a point--was all on the boy. HE had to be the one to get up the nerve to ask a girl out, to kiss her (or not). Then, if he wanted to go too far, the pressure was on the girl to say "NO"!
Comment Written 19-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2013
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Thanks Janice. I sure remember those days.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
What a pleasant presentation for your poem. The picture of the birds smooching is a hoot.Your triolet is perfect and flows so smooth it rolls off the tongue. Well done. Nancy
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2013
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What a pleasant presentation for your poem. The picture of the birds smooching is a hoot.Your triolet is perfect and flows so smooth it rolls off the tongue. Well done. Nancy
Comment Written 19-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2013
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Thank you so much Nancy. You ake me smile!
Comment from judelesemann
The photo goes so well with the poem. This is a nice, pleasant, warm fuzzy type poem. I loved it. Of course, I always like your utter-ings! Thanks for the moment of pleasure. Be blessed, Jude
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
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The photo goes so well with the poem. This is a nice, pleasant, warm fuzzy type poem. I loved it. Of course, I always like your utter-ings! Thanks for the moment of pleasure. Be blessed, Jude
Comment Written 17-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
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Thank you Jude. You are so kind.
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...And very honest! ;-)
Comment from yonashalom
This is excellent my friend. Great triolet form. Birds are neat to watch. Nice choice of artwork for this. The poem reads very smooth. :) ~Yona
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
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This is excellent my friend. Great triolet form. Birds are neat to watch. Nice choice of artwork for this. The poem reads very smooth. :) ~Yona
Comment Written 17-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
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Thanks Yona. These are fun and easy to write. Once you have the first two lines, you end up with 5 lines out of 8. So you only have to come up with 3 more lines using 2 rhymes., because the format is so fixed, the ABaAabAB rhyme scheme is so simple.
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Yeah, I have done a couple before. The challenge is for it not to sound choppy. You did good. ~Yona
Comment from Joannforsberg
Cute use of two birds and the love story question here of kissing. Like the concept of stealing a kiss and how will a fair maiden respond. The contrast of bliss and hiss are well chosen.
blessings, Jo
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
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Cute use of two birds and the love story question here of kissing. Like the concept of stealing a kiss and how will a fair maiden respond. The contrast of bliss and hiss are well chosen.
blessings, Jo
Comment Written 17-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
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Thank you Jo. You make me smile!
